It's Liaozhai, Not Cthulhu

There is no introduction to system rewards, magical skills, etc. There is no introduction at all. There are also some jokes that are confusing. If you want to write it for others to read, I suggest you explain it.

Martial arts transformation, let's make it into a strong colonization armor that can be transformed with a belt. It will look like you will bring the world to a standstill a hundred years later.

This gram invades the world. This is not the Lifecaster. It is the Persona. You can go to the Velvet Room in a few days.

Let's just talk about how to fall in love with Kathemeow. She is really, good, lovely. Singing is also good, good, and listening. Kathermiao, will you read the street novel I wrote?

The author's idea is quite clever, but sometimes the words "because", "so", etc. Are weird. I would like to give you a little suggestion. Use the appropriate amount of jokes. There are too many jokes in this book. For an old bookworm like me, the two-dimensional version is fine, but it is not friendly to newcomers. It is more like a self-interest novel.

The setting of your book is almost the same as that of Brother Zhongdi's The Fifteen Years of Liao Zhai Blacksmith. What does it have to do with him? There are many elements, but his book is more organized. Your power system is messy and may not be easy to deal with later.

I can't stand watching it since the beginning of Divine Weaponmon. Have you changed the writing?

The avatar doesn't have to be a girl, but it's different to have a trumpet when playing online games.

It's pretty good-looking, but the post-production process was too complicated, and there were too many private goods.

Author, let me make a comment here. The transitions in your chapters are too abrupt, making people confused. As the author, of course you know how the plot should develop. If there is anything missing in the middle, you can fill it in with your own brain, but we readers don't, which greatly affects the sense of reading. Often when a chapter is finished and then the next chapter is read, the content at the beginning has nothing to do with the previous chapter or a section is obviously skipped, and the reader just wants to throw the book away.