People in Naruto, Monk Jizo

People become famous detectives under the Hokage, Japan's feudal daimyo system.

If you say this is a Conan fan, I believe it

The setting of national luck canceling out illusions is too outrageous. The national luck of a castle lord's chef can cancel out the protagonist's illusions. So how does Danzo control the daimyo?

After catching up on the latest chapter, you can see that a more realistic world of Naruto is slowly unfolding. The author is very ambitious. He is trying to build a real Naruto world. What is different from the original work is that there are ninjas, civilians, samurai and bureaucrats in this world. They live in the same world as ninjas, influence ninjas, and are influenced by ninjas. They are no longer the background panels of the original comics. The world of ninjas and the world of ordinary people are integrated in the book. So I said that the author is very ambitious. He is building a sandbox world called Naruto. The protagonist is his chess piece and his eyes. Judging from this point alone, the protagonist still has ideas. However, if I add a but here, this kind of slowly unfolding writing method, this kind of writing method full of historical significance, has extremely high requirements for plot and writing style. And this is fan fiction, not historical fiction. This way of writing means that the pace is slow, the upgrade is slow, and it is difficult to find a sufficient audience. Just like the first volume of this book, the author spends a lot of space describing a case that happened in the Daiming Mansion of the Country of Fire. From point to point, he is actually introducing the prosperity of the capital of the Country of Fire, the official structure of the Country of Fire, the accumulated internal conflicts, and the contrast between the bottom and the top when the Third World War came. These can be said to be Naruto, but they have nothing to do with Naruto. They can be said to be a historical text about the Japanese shogunate, but there is no big difference. Anyway, they just don't match the style of the original hot-blooded comics. I'm afraid it will be difficult to find a suitable audience. Of course, this is a matter of style, but other than that, this book is quite interesting. For example, the foreshadowing laid down in the first volume is revealed again in the second volume. Some ninjutsu and moves in the original work have also been expanded upon. In general, the author is sincere and ambitious, but it is a pity that he did not choose the topic well. I hope that after finishing this book, the author can publish a novel more suitable for this style.

It's a pity that I don't like the protagonist of the bald donkey monk, and I don't like Buddhism. No matter how the ancient Confucian and Taoist masters in my country revise and tamper with it to localize it, they still can't change the nature of the Buddha who is a demon. He deceives, fools, attracts all living beings to feed himself, is sophistry, and packages it in a high-level way, but it can't change its nature.

Am I reading a detective novel? A lot of space is spent on being a detective and screening readers, right? It's inexplicable, a Naruto fan is doing some shitty detective work.

It's boring. You're already a deserter. Why not take this opportunity to leave the ninja profession? Isn't this just changing your skin and continuing to be a ninja?

? ? ? Is this really written by a Naruto fan? Not to mention the long-winded plot of solving the case. It takes more than ten minutes to defeat a passerby samurai. I wasted for a long time and was speechless. I really missed the point.

Naruto's introduction of DND monks makes people full of expectations. The first investigation makes people irritated. If the story is told at the same pace later, it will make people feel that there is no priority. Anyway, it is a bit disappointing.

Investigating crimes is okay in the middle of writing, but you have to figure out what the readers expect from the content when they see the name and introduction of the book. In fact, the beginning of the book was pretty good, but from the twenty-something chapters onwards, it started to involve dozens of chapters with incorrect writing and detective work, and the writing was not interesting. You personally feel that this book is a long one, and it will get better later, but we readers came in because of your title and introduction. I ordered sweet and sour pork ribs and you served me a big pork knuckle. I told you that the food you served was wrong. You said that the big pork knuckle is delicious. Do you think readers will buy it?

Advantages: Too many ideas, Disadvantages: Too many ideas

In order to restore the destiny of the country, do we need to have planetary consciousness? How can we plant trees in the big tube wood?

Great God, this is Hokage. You use your godhood to solve crimes for me, and you're so cool.

The author has many ideas, but the problem is that there are too many ideas and he is not able to filter them appropriately. Too many elements are mixed into Naruto, which greatly affects the look and feel. Some things are not suitable to be included. In the beginning, you took the risk of defecting to become a monk, without making people question you? Did you have no interpersonal relationships with the team at all? With the little time you gained by almost defecting, will you be able to convince the team to delay going back to hand in the mission or take a long detour? After all, the leader of the team is a clan who is not even willing to do this, so why not persuade him to accept a mission close to the Temple of Fire? The conflict at the beginning is really too blunt The subsequent problems with the style of painting also make people unable to complain. Yes, you can add settings that the author didn't mention, but you have to keep the style and logic consistent, otherwise I can also set up a scientific and technological civilization testing ground behind my back! I saw that the Dynasty Luck Protection Officer was immune to the genjutsu and couldn't stand it. It's not impossible, but the style of painting is wrong. I don't read Naruto fandom to see this. To put it bluntly, the so-called human heart is powerless in the face of the extraordinary power that exists in reality. As the old saying goes, "The people's heart is as iron as fake, and the official law is as real as a furnace." Even if you set up an illusion detection mechanism, it is better than your luck blessing. The final problem with this novel is that there are too many mixed elements. It reminds me of the author of the Western fantasy "The Pale Hand" who had the same problem and wanted to cram every element into the book. The author of "Ninja World Ice Breaking House" has done a good job in unifying the style and elements. Although there are a lot of supplementary settings, it does not make people feel weird, and there is no ups and downs in the plot at all.

What can I say, I feel a little tired watching it. There are more than 10 chapters in the past about solving crimes, which gave me the illusion of watching a Conan fan. Later, the chuunin exams intervened in the military war of the samurai class. Ordinary samurai dared to endure humiliation. Although they were genin, the setting was not very reasonable. I'm almost halfway through the book, which has more than 300,000 words. I feel like the progress is too slow. The protagonist is still 10 years old, and he hasn't even passed a year in the book. There were a lot of book friends commenting and interacting at the beginning, but they became less and less later. The subject matter is well chosen, but I feel that the previous crime-solving chapters have screened out all the people who want to read it. If the previous crime-solving chapters are not revised, this book will most likely be a flop.

The author has ideas, but he can't figure out the main line. This book is destined to be a flop. I suggest you cut it and reopen it!

An adult who travels to the past and endures all day long must be a fake time traveler.

To be honest, most serious Buddhas have experienced everything in the mortal world and got tired of it before they achieved enlightenment and escaped into Buddhism. The protagonist is very funny, he has been brainwashed 🙂

Investigating cases in the world of Naruto doesn't have to be so complicated, just use mind-reading methods. Moreover, those who did not respect human rights in the feudal era were already famous poisoners. It is only reasonable that all persons related to the case should be investigated. The author uses Naruto and the background of the Warring States Period. But the way things are done inside is indeed the system of a modern detective. A bit nondescript.

I ordered a chapter to express my feelings. I really like Monk and Naruto, but author, your book is too far away from the main plot.

It often appears that in order to set off the protagonist's wisdom and martial prowess (actually using caution and cleverness), a group of people around him are forcibly reduced to intelligence.

This is Lao Dao's second book. The first one, "Hogwarts, Become a God", was blocked for some reasons and had to open another one. I promise to finish writing this book, and I ask for your support.

The author missed the point. What we are looking at is what tricks your imagination can play with the monks, and how to gain a foothold in the world of Naruto, instead of focusing on the monks who do not lie, who are good, lawful and evil, and who don't care about the missions. I skipped watching it before V. The beginning was obviously very attractive, but it felt very boring afterward.

The recent content has completely deviated from Naruto. Does the author still remember that he is writing a Naruto fanfic?

If the author is capable, it would be better to write something original.

I didn't handle it very well at the beginning. I ran away to become a monk out of nowhere. I couldn't do that even if I wanted to die!

How long will it take to write Chapter 32 of the mission?

It's not as good as the last one. It's a pity that it collapsed.

The biggest contribution of this book is that it completes many basic settings of Naruto.

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