Develop the World from One Person

After swallowing the jujube in a hurry, I saw it now and briefly talked about some character settings. From being cautious at the beginning to being arrogant and domineering later on, the whole image of the protagonist in this book has become three-dimensional so far, but I don't think it's likable. When I first came into contact with the government, I could clearly see the cowardice and low self-esteem of the protagonist. I thought it was intentional by the author to make it easier to make obvious comparisons later in the development, but I found out later that I was wrong. Throughout the first and middle stages, the protagonist's reckless behavior, lack of knowledge, and lack of ambition really made the author write deeply. As far as the character setting is concerned, the protagonist is indeed written vividly, but the problem is that all the shortcomings are shown, and it is difficult to see the outstanding qualities of the protagonist. It seems understandable that the author wants to show a little person getting an opportunity and embarking on a leisurely and unrestrained road in the world. But the writing is really almost meaningless. When I look at the protagonist's team from the back, I always feel that there is a good-for-nothing person followed by 180 awesome guys. The protagonist can't hold it down. If nothing else, why is the Master willing to listen to the protagonist's arrangements? When I saw the back, I saw the protagonist's casual tone ordering Heavenly Master to do this and that, and I always felt that some of the orders were not in line with Heavenly Master's three views. As for some countries, the author feels a certain sense of satisfaction in being able to take revenge on some of the evils done by some neighboring countries in history in the article. The only thing I feel uncomfortable about is that the nouns of some of the countries in the middle, such as "humanoid creatures", "mountain monkey country", and "flying cake country" are deliberately derogatory to me. As for the plot world, in fact, you can watch the early world carefully, but once you get to the Gundam world, you really can't stand it anymore. The next few worlds are basically jump-watching. If nothing else, Gundam World is indeed a failure, and having another Elysium after Gundam is a complete burden. There are basically all the Gundams in Elysium. The only medical equipment worth paying attention to is that it can be completely replaced by both hands in the world of one person. It's too useless.

Split one chapter into three chapters. How did you come up with the idea?

In the first world, you encountered something and you were confused. In the tenth world, you encountered an accident and you were still confused. You traveled through so many worlds in vain and you didn't grow at all.

I'm finally ready to write. I read a novel in the middle of the night and was about to get pissed off, so I read a few chapters of the previous person. The behavior and character of the protagonist are almost Yue. I'm a social beast in my thirties. I rely on the anime and novels I read to identify people. Some people compare the protagonist to Zhang Chulan. He doesn't deserve it. Zhang Chulan's meanness is disguised and purposeful. There are other big guys there to set it off. The protagonist is really mean, mad. The more I think about it, the angrier I get.

It's anticlimactic and disappointing. The protagonist created by the author is a complete loser.

Among the later batch of people with crooked views, the part about the girl in yellow from Yitian, where the protagonist takes things without telling her, and even if she is discovered, she still has a say-how-you-discovered attitude, just because she is better than her? Taken for granted gangster logic?

All I can say is that it's poisonous... Well, it's not just any poison. I didn't see anything in the third golden chapter. The first world was completely mean. You said this fits the character of the protagonist as a bitch, and I agree. You managed to show off your skills and broke the system without doing anything. After writing more than ninety chapters, you got the Heavenly Barrier (which was drawn during the settlement). The first world has passed, and your own strength has not improved at all, right? I can only say that it doesn't look good. One hundred points is wasted, so I just treat it as a lost dollar.

It's already the ninth world, and the protagonist hasn't seen much growth, either in character or ability. Traveling through the world is completely random. His personal strength is not as strong as the Heavenly Master. He dares to contact gods and immortals. His survival is entirely due to the protagonist's halo. There are too many uncertainties. Being able to keep traveling like this is just down to luck.

Could it be possible to make the protagonist's IQ a little higher? If there are several more worlds, couldn't he grow up a little?

Licking Natasha wildly from behind. What! Can't live without her?

It is recommended that the author delete all the first few chapters and rewrite them. With this beginning, no matter how good your subsequent writing is, you will not get good results. Originally, these things at the beginning are just a small poisonous point at the end, but when placed at the beginning, they are extremely poisonous. At least more than 90% of people will immediately turn away after reading this beginning.

It's hard to see this protagonist as a positive character, as an anti-hero, but the fire is not yet there. It can only be compared to the little Luo Luo killed by Deadpool, the gang leader of DC Joker. I hope that the charm of the protagonist will be increased in the later stage. He is too silly and too bad to be completely bad, neither good nor bad.

I originally thought it would be interesting to read the description of this situation in a realistic way, but then I found a witless and witty comedy, and after reading it again, I found that it still followed the plot, 88

As for the beginning, it was terribly written. There is no crime, the unit will only ask questions, and the tone is very good. Even if he collided with any academician, it would be the same. Then it's time to meet the person in charge. It's impossible to see someone with a full-time job all at once, but if you're in charge of a deputy job, you can still see someone as long as you insist on spending time. After seeing you, his tone will be very good, and he will not reveal his thoughts and guesses to you. The most basic quality is to see through without telling you.

The protagonist even accepted the cannibal Ruan Feng... It's too anti-human and does not agree with my three views, so I have to withdraw first! 🙏🙏🙏

This is the first time a book review has been deleted... I didn't say anything, I just felt that Pig's Knuckle's personality changed too much, from being timid in the main world to being arrogant and neurotic in the copy, so I deleted it?

What are you writing about? What is the use of the system?

The subject matter is quite good, but the writing style makes me really unable to stand it.

The protagonist is just a crispy chicken with fancy attacks. The author has never asked the protagonist to improve his physique. After experiencing four or five worlds, he has not improved at all. At the beginning of the Marvel chapter, he faced the Black Widow who was controlled by the protagonist and was an empty-handed ordinary person. He threatened to kill the protagonist. The protagonist believed it, believed it, believed it... But it is true that the body has no protection at all. To sum up, The attack method is extraordinary, the brain is not Extraordinary (the reaction speed when facing threats is the same as that of ordinary people), The body is not extraordinary (meaning that ordinary people say that they can hurt the protagonist, but the protagonist is still very scared), 😓

I feel so uncomfortable watching it! The subject matter is okay, but the writing makes it uncomfortable to read.

After the protagonist was captured, no one believed what he said during the interrogation. Why not just open the portal?

Taishang Laojun, as urgent as ordering the author to code words faster

When I saw the second world, I suddenly felt no sleep at all ᕦ(ò_óˇ)ᕤ I didn't go to class anymore and concentrated on reading (´Д`)y━･~~

It was too boring to see the back part. The power is basically useless. I hide when I encounter you and run away when I see you. I have never really fought. Either I brought a few people and crushed them, or I was tricked by the creator god of the opposite world. The huge world alliance basically does logistics and cleans up the mess after it is done. The fun part of this type of book is not written at all.

In the martial arts world, Zhenqi can be an advanced version of Qi, and Shooting Condor is better than Tianlong and Yitian. There is a fault in relying on the sky and low martial arts. Tianlong Zhongwu and Gaowu are mixed together, and I am afraid that one person may not be able to handle it. There are also Doomsday Wolf and Sea Tiger War God in the Kewu system that you can choose from in the early stage. In terms of human body strengthening, they are good in the middle and late stages. Chaowu words include the Legend of Emperor series, Legend of Xuanbing, Heaven and Earth Tribulation, Xuanyuan Sword, etc. If you have reached the Golden Elixir or Nascent Soul Stage in the Divine Martial Stage, go to the Saint Seiyas to get the training of the small universe, understand the principles of atomic destruction, and then combine it with martial arts training to reach the point where you can use light-speed punches as normal ordinary punches without wearing holy clothes. Be careful not to give your faith to the gods among the saints casually, otherwise they will only become cannon fodder and pawns. The Cancer skill, Corpse Qi Underworld Wave, is a divine soul skill worth learning. Those who have the golden elixir or Nascent Soul stage cultivation level must have the ninth or tenth sense of the small universe, so the principle of atomic destruction is the big part. It is worth considering the space city in Space Fortress in technology. The GN particles in Gundam 00 can be contacted with super weapons and are multi-functional gate sources. Go to the Gundam Unicorn with the power of a medium-sized weapon and get the psycho-sensory skeleton and the Psyche system and the energy system, which are all the best energy systems for Bi Nuclear Weapons. After that, you can consider the StarCraft world and the Star Wars series, as well as the early stage of the doomsday-swallowing starry sky Nirvana. Why is it that America and the United States are leading the development of the earth? This needs to be changed. When it is strong enough, go to China to develop with the help of American comics. An organization composed of old American spies wants to protect the earth? QTMD, they are the source of disaster for the earth. It needs to be banned. Fans of this book will think of these world materials.

I haven't come to a world where I can obviously do it directly, but I still use my brain to do it. I don't know what I want to express. It feels like it can be an adventurous and enjoyable article, but in the end, useless things are added.

Crossing a line: The protagonist of the magical mobile phone doesn't care at all~ The super villain's superhuman potion, as long as he doesn't seek death, he is basically invincible~ The super power is out of control and the mental power is saved to be controlled~ Dragon Ball Immortality~ If you want to cultivate immortality, Yuan Hong's Eighty-nine Mysterious Techniques are stolen and intercepted directly, and then you have to find some low-level worlds to learn the basics, and you won't make it up later, and you feel invincible.

The writing of this book is okay, but it adds that it takes fifteen days to travel back in time, and it takes thirty days to open the door (I remember it should be correct). There are too many words describing the psychological activities of the characters, which makes it annoying to read, and a lot of them can be omitted. One chapter lasts for more than ten to thirty pages, and there are very few truly useful descriptions, and there is little improvement in world strategy progress, but if you don't read it, you are afraid of overlooking some information, which makes it uncomfortable. Some worlds are just for a few useful technologies, and it is too late to withdraw after getting them. It is still necessary to describe the psychological activities of the protagonist. From the introduction of the God War to the present, every world that can be quickly traveled has always been related to the God War. After the protagonist travels back and starts to discuss it, he goes back to explore carefully, and then begins to describe crazy psychological activities. If you look carefully, it's almost the same routine now. It was quite interesting to read it at first, starting from Gundam. After I got the staff, the description of psychological activities began to increase dramatically. Just like my current discussion, there is a lot of nonsense, a lot of useless information, and the readers are very tired.

What's going on? How did I put your book into the eunuch group at that time? I just opened the starting point and saw that this group of books had gone to second place. When I came in, I saw that you had finished writing all of them. What's going on?

Can I ask how you got the nickname at the end? I haven't had a title for more than 4,000 days now.