Xiaozhi, What Are You Doing?

The author's elf writing is okay, it's a good idea, but Xiaozhi can't live without Pikachu 😢.

Ding, Jiangjiang's little footprints are here!

A little personal feeling Because my understanding of Pokemon is mainly from the game Dark Phantom and a Pokemon I watched a long time ago (the protagonist is not Ash Ketchum and I have forgotten his name), so I am just commenting on it as a reader who doesn't know much about Pokemon First, what attracted me when I first watched it was Leshiram, personally. I feel like people who don't know much about Pokémon, reading this type of novel, probably won't be particularly fond of the Pokémon that the protagonist uses for sensory stimulation. Although the author will definitely enhance this Pokémon in the future, those who don't know Pokémon very well probably won't see the latter, so I hope that Pokémon that makes people feel weak will not appear in the protagonist's main team. Secondly, I don't know if the author doesn't have an outline, or if he feels there is no main line because he wrote special-shot fan fiction in the past (the main line should be the competition, but I don't feel the importance of this). The writing feels very similar to Feng Xiaohuang's The End of the World, but his one can be completed at any time by traveling everywhere. This is just a world of yours. If you don't have a clear main line in the early stage, it will easily end when you finish it in the middle and late stages. Third, I don't know if I thought wrongly. I feel that the author has too many branches. Can I fill them in later? Now the love affair with Sonia is considered a branch plot, and Sirona will definitely not be willing to accept it. There are also several other women who are relatively close to the protagonist (I am a staunch harem party). Even if they are not accepted, I still need to describe them. There are a lot of them. There is also the Leshiram who also has secrets, and there is also the Lightning Bird, which also has secrets about the power of the wave guide. There are too many, can the author handle it? Fourth, another thing is that the author is so good that it won't make any difference to read it. Although every chapter is very interesting, basically ten chapters only push a little bit of the plot, and there are too many interactions with the elves (I also like to watch interactions, but it is not good if there is too much plot). Especially if you have to pay after it is released, you can only watch every chapter that is interesting. If there is no particularly close connection between the two chapters, I feel that many people will be more willing to watch pirated copies. (Put on a shield) Personally, I feel like this is just a small suggestion. If the author already has your own outline or ideas, then please take my words as shit and thank you. Don't let me disrupt your thinking.

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This book really has a lot of Pokémon battle techniques. The author should have studied them in detail. It also has a new heroine. Although the emotional line is generally handled, the problem is that it always emphasizes the configuration of the four skills. It feels like a game and an anime. It will feel a bit fragmented. It would be better not to mention it at all.

Shouldn't it be written about Ash Ketchum instead of Pikachu? So what's the point of traveling to become Xiaozhi? It's not the same as traveling to become a random passerby.

It feels like it was sold to a studio... The more I look at it, the more something seems wrong. The author hasn't sent any messages recently, so he probably ran away.

I don't want to tell the author how to write it, but the entire setting of the elf novel is very inconsistent with the logic of current realistic elf novels, which makes me really uncomfortable. The author's theme is really good. The protagonist is Xiaozhi from a parallel world. He can only play online elf duels. In reality, there are no elf. This is a useless start. However, the protagonist's talent is very conspicuous. If he continues to upgrade, there will definitely be many excellent and logical slap-in-the-face plots. But the author just wants to stick to the old game settings, what are the four skills and what are the forgotten skills. In real-life Pokémon novels, this is the most anti-intellectual. Does it mean that once the fire-breathing dragon learns to spray flames, it will no longer need sparks? Can't that elf use a jet-type character explosion in a real battle? Is this a jet of flames or a big character explosion? Why do real-life Pokémon novels reflect the settings in the games? Let me give you a very simple example. According to the abilities of trainers in reality, most of them cannot keep up with the rhythm of Pokémon battles. They can only give instructions at critical moments. Most of them rely on the Pokémon's own fighting ability. You set a four-skill, do you want the Pokémon to hear what skill you say before the Pokémon releases that skill? A conference setting that trainers can only use four skills is testing the reader's IQ? Doesn't my elf know how to combine skills? According to the relationship between skill proficiency and skill connection in real-life elf novels, it is impossible for a Pokémon to do the same thing. It must be through continuous practice, and consecutively releasing multiple skill combos at once to achieve a powerful combo. Only in this way can you seize the opportunity and win without losing the rhythm of the battle. High-level Pokémon battles in real life cannot be like round-by-round in the game, nor can they be as mentally retarded as in the anime. In real-life Pokémon works, Erquan has already pointed out a good writing idea to PM authors. Why are we still going back now? The author also said that he has read the current PM article, so I am very surprised how you typed out such illogical words? I really don't understand. Is it a writing problem? To be honest, Erquan's writing style is average, but he is able to write about real-life Pokémon battles through a combination of skills and upgrades, which is very interesting. If you don't want to write about real-life Pokémon battles and just want to copy the settings in the game, then don't sell it!

The Chinese player won the R competition

Xiaozhi! This is not easy to write. Xiaozhi can be regarded as the reincarnation of the Wave Hero and can become the strongest Wave Hero. This time there is a white dragon. You must know that the three dragons of the Way are called the Dragon God. It is impossible not to have the power of the dragon, not to mention the power of Tokiwa and the power of Chao Ke. , With this love for elves and the affinity with mythical beasts, you can easily get the superpowers of two lifetimes of mental strength, a fighter? Not to mention Xiaozhi's physique, not to mention the waveguide lurking in the body, it would be unreasonable not to have a Lucario. By the way, I don't know how the author will arrange the heroine issue. After all, there are all kinds of cp gangs, and the most popular one is Semei. Lillie is also popular. Xiaoxia likes Xiaozhi's original version in Zhenzhuan, but in this world Xiaozhi is 18 and is about the same age as Sister Baicai. At this time, Nazi Either the outbreak is still happening or the heart disease has been cured, unless there is a second set, there are boys, such as Xiaomao, if he keeps taking the road of being a trainer, he will be the second Qinglu, but what about the Rockets trio in this world, and there are no people like Chihong in the world, right?

ReshiramThe appearance of a married woman

What was written in the latest chapter? Seven champion-level figures, each with an elf? Wouldn't it be possible to beat an elf while beating a human? I didn't realize that there was such a big difference between the mythical beast and the champion before, so it's awkward to just act like that?

After reading Chapter 6, my opinion of the protagonist turned dark. The initial elves run away, but if there is a chance to lead other elves in the middle, they just don't want to, and they are willing to work hard. I got an elf egg and hatched a mythical beast, so I thought about using it to fight and participate in the competition two months later. So the initial escape was really self-inflicted.

To be honest, this Ash Ketchum book is not as good as the original Ash Ketchum.

I see many people questioning the settings of the four skills. Let me clarify. First of all, not all battles in this book have four skills. Regular competitions must have four skills, small competitions such as field battles and gym challenges are not restricted. And in fact, the anime that everyone watches strictly follows the four skills since Muji, except for a few special circumstances. Like Xiaozhi's Koga Ninja, its skills are Yan Hui, Iai Slash, Shadow Clone, and Water Shuriken. When you watch xy, will you wonder why Koga Ninja doesn't use water cannon? No way! Anyway, handsome is not the end of it. And if regular competitions do not limit skills, there will be big bugs. Muyin once had bug dragons with more than a dozen skills. Furthermore, I mean that the big competition requires four skills, but I don't mean that the elves only know four skills. Don't misinterpret it. Finally, I have been reading a lot of other elf articles recently and have referenced them. You will find that most authors write that it is common for elves to have only two or three skills left. Because the low-power skills in the front will be replaced by high-power skills, and secondly, the protagonist becomes stronger and stronger in the back, and you can hit people in one move. For example, in the later stages of my writing, Reshiram actually had only one Green Flame. The mythical beast is suppressed. Which ordinary elf Qingyan can't beat it in seconds? So there are quite a lot of four skills in the big competition. As for the battle with mythical beasts, it doesn't matter if you catch the beasts or use any skills.

I hope [Xiao Zhi] Master Zhi's CP: Xiaoxia, Sundae, Nazi, Kona, Xiaoyao, Lila Silona, ​​Mingyi, Kamizilei, Serena, Maxiu Liliie Xiao Gang's CP: Xiao Xue, Xiao Ji Xiao Mao's CP: Douzi, Aier

Sirona, loli form

Zhi Ye

Sonia

The setting of this book is outrageous. Let me start with the first part. It is said to be realistic, but does the battle depend on race or level? By default, all Pokémon in battle are at full level? For example, when playing Kona, the borrowed Pokémon is of the same level as the Kona of the Four Heavenly Kings? Laisram, who was born just a short time ago, can leapfrog and defeat the Pokémon of the Four Heavenly Kings, defeat the Pokémon of Frozendos 4 with low health, and defeat two Zapdos is outrageous... How long have you been born? Even if you are disabled, the level difference is still there. Are you faster than your opponent? I'm afraid it would be dead after just one hit, but you can still sustain it with so many skills. Is there no class oppression in this world?

Reshiram and Lugia

... The author really doesn't know how to write big scenes. The plot of the Plasma Troupe causing trouble was really a bit dissuasive. In a group fight, there are no monsters, and there is no sneak attack. The protagonist is stupidly waiting to be killed along the way. Forget it, I just have one question, how can an ice dragon defeat 4 champions? It's still a version that can go to extreme size + mega. You, Flame White Kyurem, are considered a der.

Cang Xiang's era has passed, now I am the best in the world

Suddenly I found something wrong with this book Not only is there no system, Xiaozhi also does not allow the opening waveguide to hang up The waveguide is already late

Speaking of which, I thought Pikachu would be a recurring character, but it turned out to be a one-episode character.

When will the author accept Sirona? If not, can you please stop making it so unclear? It's very uncomfortable to watch. If you want to accept it, it's best during the challenge period.

The main character is so awesome, the name of your book is just ridiculous😁😅😅😅

The author used to write touhou fan fiction. This is his first time writing a Pokémon article and he lacks experience. Please give me your opinions, such as typos, unreasonable settings, description problems, etc. I will try my best to correct them. But I will not keep any comments that are personal attacks. (｀へ´)=3

I feel that this book is good at writing about the original region Other basic Pokémon novels also have a Chinese prototype area But it is a bit wrong. The concentration of Pokémon is not enough. It is written like a Chinese version of the world of beasts. It does not have the flavor of Pokémon The original Chinese area of this book. The Pokémon painting style is very good. Also in terms of Pokémon tactics, this book is "everyone knows very well" and other It's different even if the protagonist understands it but others don't understand it. It's a bit novel But knowing how to operate it is another matter

Bailong who is married with a girl