The Movie and TV Wanderer

I just keep writing about the foreign world. It seems very awkward to intersperse domestic stories. That's my personal opinion.

The selection of materials is very good, but there are too many system scenes. You can completely remove a lot of parts that explain the system. Goldfinger does not need to be explained clearly at all. The protagonist and readers only need to know that there is this system that allows the protagonist to travel through the world and that there is a lottery every time. Specific explanations can be written using the protagonist's guesses. It is best for the system not to reveal any other information except necessary prompts. Now the system feels the same as the online customer service, and emails are returned 😐

The best time travel story, I think, should be to be a financially free person in the real world. Don't have too much money, don't open a company, and it doesn't matter if you have a lot of women. You have to do the mission of traveling across the world, but you have to do it selectively. Of course, there is no penalty from the system. Go up to women when they are supposed to, don't look around, don't give the other party anything you can't give, and how do you know that women will die or live for you when you come back?

The previous story was quite good, but the only thing that failed was you, my deskmate. The relationship between the protagonist and Zhou Xiaozhi was unreasonable, and it was even more inconsistent with the mission. People cannot deceive themselves about their feelings, they can only make assumptions. Adding redundant descriptions of other female characters is confusing. Not only does it not highlight their emotions, it makes readers feel that they are in trouble. People are matched, hierarchical, ideological, economic, capable, status, these are the sources of contradictions and conflicts.

The protagonist is too relaxed and has too little pressure. When he has time, he doesn't work hard to practice guns, cannons, combat and make various preparations. He is still in the mood to open a company and have fun. The protagonist is not short of money ╮ (╯＿╰) ╭ Parachute diving, survival in the wild, proficiency in weapons, drone operation, etc.? Time bomb, machine gun belt magazine loaded? To a certain extent, this protagonist is useless;

The realistic plot is slightly worse, the heroine is not likeable, and the pig's feet are a bit licky. Try not to write realistic stories, and the results will be better.

Didn't hold on! He died of poison in more than sixty chapters! Complain about it! It was okay in the beginning, but once the heroine appeared, I couldn't hold on! Skip the real world! The first dungeon after the heroine was okay, but after she returned, instead of training herself and strengthening her ability to survive, she started to open a company and fall in love and make a fuss! I can't resist it anymore! It's better to abandon the book!

Regarding women, it is better to say less, do less, and make fewer mistakes. It is better to focus on the copy.

It's so exciting, I haven't seen enough, please update.

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