Uncle Jiu: I Have the Talent to Banish an Immortal

Everything else is fine. The writing is barely above 2 points and is passable. Writing about the infighting in Maoshan is not interesting. There may indeed be some infighting, but there were so many interesting stories in that period. What's wrong with it? It seems frustrating to use infighting to spread out the story. The above is purely a personal opinion.

I've had enough of one Jiu Shu and one Siheyuan. I recommend it every day.

When did Shi Jian become the leader of Maoshan? ? ?

He actually accepted some literary talents and is still honest? Taking a dog as his apprentice would be more useful than him...

Can't even copy it? This is the worst author I have ever had

The protagonist is arrogant and arrogant, but he is so awesome without learning many skills. It is very annoying to watch. How can such a person be the protagonist?

Author! So many questions! The system is no longer there, has it been destroyed? What did the protagonist get from the system! It makes no sense to explain anything!

"It's the master" "Stinky Taoist priest, I want you to sit" Looked at 30 photos and guess how many times I saw these two sentences🤔

In this book, Uncle Jiu also wants to recruit Qiu Sheng and Wen Cai. One of them has some talent, but he is not doing his job. He just wants to learn martial arts and have fun. One of them just wants to have fun and free their own nature, and they are lazy and have no ambition. One of them is because Uncle Jiu did not teach them well, but the biggest reason is that they have this kind of character. I am afraid that Uncle Jiu can't control it. It is better to take in two orphans. Even if their talents are not very good, they are relatively determined and will not cause so much trouble for Uncle Nine.

Everything else is okay, but the details are not. To be more specific, there are typos and a lot of bad sentences, but they still haven't been corrected. It looks a bit like voice input, and you don't have to read it again to check it after you finish it. As for the others, they are a bit inconsistent. For example, at the beginning of point 1, it is said that the protagonist is a soul traveler, and later it is said that the protagonist is a wearer, but he has returned to his youth. Personally, I prefer Wearing. There are only one or two sentences that say the protagonist is Soul Wearing. It's okay to delete it, but it's important to keep it to maintain inconsistency. The second point is that when the protagonist was struck by lightning, all his hair was gone. Uncle Jiu said that he would have recovered very quickly if he had not been struck by lightning. Later, the protagonist said that the root was damaged, and it had to be recovered as the cultivation level improved before it could grow back. Other background settings and timeline are confusing. Point 1: In this book, Shi Jian is the leader of Maoshan, but in the original work, he is only a candidate for the leader. The second point is that Wen Cai is not the book that Uncle Jiu adopted and grew up in. Then there is the issue of timeline. I thought the protagonist was met by Uncle Jiu when he just came out of the mountain (because he was the eldest disciple), but later when he met Qiu Shengwencai, they had grown up, and when he accepted Qiu Shengwencai as his apprentice, he was also changed to Mr. Zombie (Mr. Ren moved his grave) around the time of the movie. But there are still advantages. For example, although there are a lot of typos and grammatical errors, the writing is okay (it is supported by my newbie peers, and if you read it quickly, you will not notice it) In summary, it is a book, and you can read it if you close this chapter and say that it has functions (this chapter says that there is no complete interaction, but there are some details that make people pay attention to).

No wonder it's a crime scene, it's poisoned at the beginning, and the protagonist is also stupid haha

Why did you accept the literary talent? To be honest, this scammer was left next to Uncle Jiu. If someone is in front of a villain, he will definitely be the kind of person who will crush his bones and throw away his ashes.

It started off well, but looking at the writing, I can't stand it.

"What on earth do you want to do? Do you want to fight with me until death?" "We are all immortals now, immortals!" "As long as we continue to practice, we can ascend to the next heaven." Looking at the figure in front of me wearing a dragon dance, the figure lying across the mid-air was timid and frightened. screamed uncontrollably. "Immortal?!" "Today, you will die!" "The only thing you are wrong about is insulting my teacher and bullying my fellow disciples!" "The only thing you are wrong about is slaughtering the righteous people in the world!" " It was your fault that you harmed my Taoist comrade!" "It was your fault that you shouldn't have touched her!" "Come on, look at this first move!" Long Wu writhed, and he slowly moved the sword beside him. "The first move, change, the wind blows and the bones are removed!" "The second move, change, the brilliant righteousness slays the devil!" "The third move, change, the profound energy of the world vicissitudes!" "As for the last move, change, it is like a dream, like an illusory Taoist Priest!" The shadow of the sword is tumbling, and the human shadow is scattered. "People from the lower realm, how dare you be so bold?" "Those who violate the rules will have their golden crowns removed and knocked down from the lower realm!" The dragon dance writhed again. The gates of heaven opened wide and the golden crown fell. "Master, I am here to take care of you until you die!" "Little girl, the poor man is back!" ......

When a normal person travels back in time and sees all the dead people, his first reaction is to be afraid of nausea and vomiting. With no memory of his previous life, his second reaction is to run away. But the protagonist ends up burying people? ? ?

After reading this novel, I only remember one sentence: Stinky Taoist priests, you are seeking death.

Isn't the banished immortal an immortal who was demoted to earth? Does the talent of banishing the immortal mean that the protagonist will become an immortal and then be demoted to earth, so the protagonist is a bad guy?

Total 10 points for plot, 8 points for writing, 5 points for writing There are so many typos that I can't watch While I was watching it, I suddenly found a typo It's more unappetizing than eating flies

See Chapter 19. Except for the name, which is a little too mediocre, and the dialogue, which is too modern, I haven't found anything wrong with it.

Author, can you check the sentences and typos from the first chapter? I feel so awkward.

I beg the author to read it from the beginning and correct the typos and sentences.

Awei

The word count is 144w, and the out-of-circle index is 670. Is Shennong still there?

Let me come. With me, Anlan will have a better future.

Literary talent

Prosperity

Emperor