Liu Song Han Que

It feels like it's unfinished, and it's hard to cut it in the end. It's possible for a generation to want to time travel to modern times, and the system has become weird. If you do this, something will definitely happen to the cabinet. Either the imperial power will overwhelm the prime minister's power, or the prime minister's power will overwhelm the imperial power. I can already imagine the result of chaos and war after the death of the protagonist.

I'm usually very picky about reading novels, and I'm really tired of all kinds of slutty articles that always say, "Damn, I'm the best in the world, forcefully mentally retarded, live in a villa but pick up trash and eat shit, can't live without the system, loser, break up the engagement, start with a slap in the face, be targeted by the world all day long, either assassinated or ridiculed..." And so on. Sometimes I spend the whole day looking for novels. This is a good book. I have the desire to read it. I will reward you with all your votes.

Why is it that when reading this book, I feel that the front and back are not written by the same person? The front is like a primary school student's composition, and the back is a bit like a master's. The character of the protagonist is not out of the ordinary, brave and resourceful. After discovering a book of fairy grass, you can skip the plot of the protagonist in Chang'an. Anyway, Chang'an was saved, and the rest is very exciting.

I have reached Chapter 63. It may be due to the author's experience and age, or it may be the first time I write. I always want to cram everything in, and always want to express everything, but some of the expressions are actually superfluous, missing the point, or not connecting the high and low. In fact, I am also a person who has been there. The authors of three historical texts can refer to the writing styles of these three books: Liao Hua, Pioneer of the Three Kingdoms, Gui Sanguo, and Ruzi Di. The description and description are both very good. How can I say that the story composed of words always does not exceed the limitations of the author's thinking. First of all, the outline cannot be messy, and the writing style must be unified. If it is a light novel, it can follow the style of the Three Kingdoms. If it is a plot type, it can follow the style of Ruzi Emperor. If it is a passionate type, it can follow the style of Liao Huazhuan. This is just the description of the style of the narrative technique. The outline must be decided first. What is the final outcome of the protagonist? You have to think about it now. Many times, texts written in different situations reflect the author's psychology differently. For example, the repressive and awkward social atmosphere of the Qing Dynasty in Cao Xueqin's era reflected in the Dream of Red Mansions. If the same outline cannot be decided, readers will be confused. There are always regrets in history, and there are countless long rivers. Traveling through the past has changed the regrets, and the rest is human beings. Life, how to write this life is a difficult problem, because many times the author's own life has not yet begun. At present, I can't understand the outline. Writing must be rigorous. If there are typos, correct them. If the paragraphs are not full, revise the paragraphs and refine them. If the chapters are not full, delete them. If they are correct, don't make them appear abrupt and inexplicable. Words are only a carrier. How to describe a deeply rooted story and an ups and downs plot depends on the author. The relaxed and cheerful writing style at the beginning is understandable, okay and tolerant, but then why does it start to force the protagonist to add inner drama to himself? Or should I say that the author adds inner drama to himself? Doesn't it look awkward? It's pretentious and artificial, like a text written by a girl. It seems to be honest, but in fact there is no relief or openness at all. We are all readers who have read the text for many years. We are not fools. Why should we be so pretentious? The main problem is the author's own mentality. In fact, it was affected by the readers' previous book reviews. As a result, the subsequent changes are not a soft landing. The first thing is that the style of writing must be unified. Then, for example, the setting of the protagonist is obviously not connected. I understand everything at the beginning, but nothing works at the end. Everything must be consistent. Reason, try to be as realistic as possible, and don't use yy. Don't say that many text novels nowadays are too yy. If there is a little yy, you can't stand it. It's fake. One moment, Wang Xiu starts to suspect that Wang Xiu is spying on him, and Wang Xiu is also, and the next moment, Di Renjie seems to be obsessed with him. How can I put it... I don't get too entangled in the details one by one. I don't know whether it is mainly about the author or the protagonist. This description technique is a bit superficial. After the book is finished, we have to erect all the memorial arches. Don't pinch it no matter how you look at it. It feels like you are fooling the readers like children. In the final analysis, it is still a sign of the author's immaturity. Wang Xiu's paragraph is just a small node, and the crowd is always long. Throwing a pebble will sometimes not even cause ripples. Don't compare the historical background of the book with today's China from time to time. It will appear very abrupt and out of place, because there is no comparison at all, and it will only appear to be the author's politics. Immature ideological thinking (the China we are currently in is a great and stubborn historical miracle composed of the uncertain factor "human" that has not been reached in history or even in human history for thousands of years. It is unmatched by any ancient and prosperous age in the past. I dare not say it in the future, and it never existed before. Therefore, it is really awkward and abrupt to use today's China or modern China as the background board for some of the narrations and descriptions in the time-traveling novel). I won't say much more. I spent two days reading this book from the extra chapters, from the first chapter to the sixty-three chapters. I can ignore some immature places and descriptions. When reading historical texts, I just want to read descriptions of people who are roughly related to the historical context. Now I feel that it is a bit strange no matter how I read it. I would like to give you some suggestions.

In fact, the place where the male protagonist guards is particularly important. The land in Guanzhong has always been the foundation of the empire. The first step for the male protagonist now is to guard Guanzhong and let Liu Yu and the officials see his talents. Liu Yu is actually not particularly satisfied with Liu Yifu, and it is not impossible for the male protagonist to become a prince in the future. The second step is to develop your own power in Guanzhong and have your own people in the court. I also feel that the male protagonist thinks too simply because he just came here. He has not yet realized the cruelty of troubled times. In troubled times, you will die or I will die. You need to change your mind quickly. You must know that in history, he was killed by powerful ministers. In addition, I always feel that the male protagonist is not as magnanimous as a human protagonist. He likes money and enjoys it, which feels like a poor loser's counterattack. He still needs to have a bit of a hero's demeanor. Now he is a bit frivolous. I guess he will slowly adapt to the age of status.

The Five Dynasties and Ten Kingdoms practiced democracy and freedom, vomit vomit

He really is a saint, right? It's quite uncomfortable.

Are the last few chapters serious? Cavalry archery defeats heavy cavalry? Mo Dao defeated Heavy Cavalry? First of all, let's not talk about how Han people and nomads compare in riding and shooting. How did a Han become a Wuhu? Isn't it just about equipment? The armor is strong and the weapons are sharp. Mo Dao, if you really think you can chop a heavy cavalry into pieces, that's just because Li Siye is so powerful. In the history of the protagonist, from the Northern and Southern Dynasties to the Sui and Tang Dynasties, the development of heavy cavalry was at its peak. Even Mongolia had both light and heavy cavalry, and was defeated by the Egyptian Mamluk heavy cavalry and the Polish Hussars. How could the light cavalry defeat the heavy cavalry? The Song Dynasty of Xixia, Liao and Jin Dynasty relied on iron kites, kidnappers and horses to fight, and they couldn't bear to bet. Do you think the Song Dynasty's equipment was worse than Mo Dao? The Song Dynasty had mastered the cold forging (cold rolling) technology, and the armor it made was stronger and the weapons sharper than those of the Tang Dynasty. It was still invincible to the heavy cavalry. Do you think you can fight against the heavy cavalry just by relying on the Mo Dao? Hu Xia and Northern Wei really want heavy cavalry, but you only have Modao, which is definitely a dead end.

Even a poor family is a family! Our ancestors were also rich! The family is also a medium to large landowner! The family has a hundred members, farming and studying, and now it is equivalent to a company worth tens of millions! What is worse than the aristocratic clan is the political resources!

Lao Liu is indeed one of the few immediate emperors in history. According to the historical era at that time, no emperor before the Liu Song Dynasty could beat Old Liu, so that Li Shimin, Zhu Yuanzhang and Zhu Di's father and son who started a bowl may not be able to beat Old Liu stably.

What I wrote before really persuades you to retreat. You don't have the cognitive level of a time traveler at all. After you get the food and grass, you can build a new army in addition to relieving the victims. Not more than 20,000 is enough for you to stabilize the situation. Are you still afraid of the rebellion of these two people with the troops in hand? Let them take the initiative to attack the enemy. You take over the core pass, and then continue to recruit troops. By 5w, organize the victims to build large-scale water conservancy facilities at the same time, and continue to explode the troops during the next autumn harvest. At the same time, bribe the subordinates of those two people, find opportunities to kill them and their senior officials, gather and disperse the soldiers of these two people, you can sit back and relax, and then organize the landless poor in Guanzhong to open up wasteland for development in Shu.

I really can't stand the inappropriate cuteness from time to time, as well as the details that the author took for granted and didn't handle well. The key is that you admit it when everyone points it out, but you don't want anyone to tell you that it's okay to leave without seeing you off. But if you get these things done, it will obviously become a masterpiece of Nanbei Chaoli. If you revise the chapters significantly one day, I will kick my ass.

I must have drawn it correctly?

Seeing Mo Dao... How should I put it, Mo Dao is not a very magical black technology. In the Tang Dynasty, it was just a secondary weapon for crossbowmen. It was Li Siye who smashed the man and horse's equipment. I am afraid it has nothing to do with the sword directly, and this thing has no restraint effect on the cavalry...

In an era when entire clans (not entire families) are wiped out at every turn, what is the point of a country? Hu Han? It doesn't matter if you play for the Yi tribe, your bloodline is gone, so you play for the country. Does the one who started the figurines have no descendants? It's not a rebellion.

The ending of the last two chapters was quite disappointing.

I suggest the author delete the part about traditional Chinese medicine. It's unreasonable and unfounded. It's going to be criticized. It's uncomfortable to read.

In fact, before some northern aristocratic families developed into the terrifying Guanlong Group, they did not have much military power in their hands. Those kind of Zhuang and Hakka Ding were completely defeated in front of the regular army. So facing Xi Jin who commanded Hebei, they really had no ability or courage to resist. Brother, the "Guanlong" of the Guanlong Group refers to "Guanzhong" and "Longyou", which is no match for the Guandong people in Shandong and Hebei.

Can't you just dress up as Liu Yilong? This is going to involve internal fighting again, and the Southern Dynasty was ruined by internal fighting.

Initial Map

Original History: Genealogy Table of Emperors of Liu Song Dynasty

There is a very important question. Has food production increased significantly? Otherwise, how will it be enough to supply workers and cities?

There is a slight problem at the end. When I saw another fight, I knew there might be something wrong. I don't need to explain it so clearly. The ending looks forward to the future. It's easy to feel isolated if you write too much. But the book is good, the ending is a spoiler

After I was Liu Yu, I suggested that the author write that after Liu Song unified the world, he changed the country's name to Han, and the dynasty named Song was not domineering.

It's obvious that the writing style has become more stable since it was released. The last few chapters have been well written. Once you have stable readers, you can consider revising the previous chapters. It's a pity that some readers were persuaded to quit by your previous chapters. They are all renewed at the moment. Come on.

So far, the writing is good! I have been following the reading!

It will be updated several times a day after it is put on the shelves. Remember to update during the Chinese New Year. The last few chapters have been written well. It is not toxic at the moment. Come on.

This book is estimated to have more than 1 million words to write. It is really difficult to write later, so I changed it to global hegemony and replaced it with maps and hydrology.

The writing is a bit interesting, and with the support of two monthly tickets, I would like to ask for some details

The timeline is a bit confusing. You have to record the process of writing your book clearly. The great cause is three years and the great cause is four years. Sometimes a lot of things happen and time hardly advances. Sometimes time advances for a long time inexplicably. Please pay more attention, brother.