Darkmoon Dungeon

It's from Tieba, it's really like prose. Bells and whistles (dog head)

Read three chapters. Internet literature is fast-paced. Whether you have fans or not, it's best not to show off your skills in the first three chapters. The main reason is that the show off of skills is too blunt. It depends on the writing style.

After reading three or five chapters, I found that there are too many abstract words in the first two chapters. Maybe you want to focus on describing the atmosphere or something like that, but readers like me don't really pay attention to descriptions when reading online articles, especially your descriptions are very detailed. There is no way to sympathize with the descriptions in chapters one and two. The characters appear later, and the descriptions are quite detailed, but the descriptions are not abstract and just understandable, so I will take a closer look. After the characters appeared, I still had the desire to read on, but in fact, when I read the third and fourth chapters, I unconsciously read it faster than the first and second chapters. I won't read the next few chapters. It doesn't matter whether it's good or bad. There are too few words.

Bells and whistles. (I haven't read a chapter yet)

I can't understand the plot, it's not attractive

If you can't stand it, please move on to Chapter 10 and start reading from Chapter 11 😆😆😆

Overall, it's an excellent work. It's just the large number of unclear descriptions in the first few pictures that are a bit discouraging. I jumped right into watching it, and it would be better if the protagonist's character could be more mature and stable. This kind of childish character is difficult to get into.

Lao Tie, are you writing prose or a novel?😄

Write more, too little 😏

I don't know if you, the author, read what I said. If you haven't seen it yet, I have a few points to make. 1. As I said before, I will take a good look at your book, so my speech may be more truthful due to a certain psychology. And I am not a professional book reviewer or anything like that. I am just a very ordinary reader. All my speeches are based on my first impression after reading them. There is no other meaning. I hope you understand. 2. And because of recent relationship problems, I used the review of your book as a way to vent, so I said a bit too much, I hope you don't mind. 3. Well, my speech is not about reading it and then speaking together. I just say whatever sentence I see. If I feel something, I will say it directly. So maybe some of your foreshadowing, or some of the things that I didn't understand, are understood below. Some of the previous comments may be incorrect, so you don't need to take it too seriously. Well, that's all for now.

Due to some indescribable reasons, when reading, the number of words is few or incomplete, so it is best to re-download the chapter.

Book lovers, do you think the pace is too slow? Because I want to tell the story clearly, there is a lot of foreshadowing. Although it seems a bit too novice 😁😁, the story has just begun. In addition to the dozen or so characters originally set, I will also fill in more supporting characters to enrich the content of the story. As for the writing style, to be honest, I feel that if you want to describe this kind of dark background subject from a third-person perspective, it is difficult to set off the atmosphere and let readers get involved. However, I am constantly reading relevant original works and materials, etc., And I am also exercising my writing style. I hope book friends can give me more suggestions! The head of a hundred-foot pole must make progress, and the world in the ten directions is the whole body.

Alas, I feel a little sad that I just discovered it now [Eunuch Bookfold] Collection +1