In One Piece, Building the Strongest Marine Branch

What the hell is in the latest chapter? Another time traveler? His grades were already average, but he still does this?

The most outrageous thing is that Thor is said to be an old man in the instructor group at first. Basically, all the newcomers to Zefa are led by the leader of the instructor group. Then Taotu comes out and doesn't recognize Thor. He almost can't help but kill Thor. Although it is an inner drama, there is no one who can set this thing to fight and practice by himself.

The overall description is very good, but the malice towards Aoki Pheasant is a bit overt, and it is forced to subdue his intelligence, and his malice is also a hindrance. The Aokiji written by the author is more like an opponent than the dove in the comics. As long as Akainu says it, he will oppose it regardless of whether it is right or wrong.

When you reach your peak, the system is disappearing and you become useless again. How will you die?

What the hell is it to raise a double wearer? .

Why do we need to buy blueprints for dormitories and bases? Are there any special effects? If not, wouldn't buying it be pure and wasteful? Your relationship can't even get the drawings of a base and dormitories? And where can't I buy dormitory drawings? I don't understand it at all. What's the point of buying this kind of blueprint? You didn't include any special effects?

The Thunder Fruit has no weaknesses, it just doesn't eat and give it away. What's the difference between giving it away to a girl? I really can't hold on anymore, so I'm sorry to bother you.

I'm really impressed by this kind of protagonist who can't live without a system.

If you have a system, you will be a genius, if you don't have a system, you will be a waste, so what use do you have? Beginning to persuade you to quit! I suggest you revise the opening chapter. If you don't revise it, it will just be a mess and not many people will read it.

To put it simply, first, the author has no concept of combat power. Not to mention the Lieutenant Colonel of the headquarters, even the Lieutenant General of the headquarters may not necessarily master both of the two colors of domineering. Second, the strongest talent plus the strongest fruit, the strength of a colonel from the headquarters comes at the beginning? Why don't you go to the Navy Headquarters and try to find a colonel who can beat her? With the strongest normal talent and the strongest natural fruit, you can beat the unarmed and domineering major general of the headquarters at the beginning Third, plot conflict, you have not mastered the fun point of fan fiction at all, and the plot conflict created is like boiled water. To make readers keep reading, the first thing to bear is the protagonist's charm, kingly blood, calm development, and darkness dominance. It does not say that it must be consistent, but you have to choose one of the three major categories to write your own taste, otherwise it will be difficult to make a living. To sum up, this book is basically useless. If you are willing, you can try to save it, but there are very few people who can survive the early stage of your book, so I suggest you start a new one.