Summon the Gentleman Sword at the Beginning

If the author doesn't know how to write a book, then don't write it. Madam of the Commander of the Forbidden Army, haha

If you can't write a plot, don't write it forcefully. It will make people's heads hurt when they read it. Can you convince yourself by looking at the plot?

To be honest, the author, your plot is too childish. I recommend you to read Angxiao's new book. His previous plot is really the best I have read so far. Everything from the layout to the inner activities of the characters is well written, especially the dozens of chapters at the beginning...

It's too slow. The protagonist doesn't have his own rhythm. Although he is very powerful, he has to act according to other people's rules. When he first returned home, he was assassinated and the protagonist had no temper at all. If you ask the protagonist to assassinate all the princes and suspects in order to break the rules, you have to show your attitude if you fail. Lifting the table directly made them scruple. How can you guard against thieves every day?                                                                                                                                                                                                           Of a great master of the Yang family, the emperor was afraid to move for more than a dozen years, but the two great masters of the protagonist, were able to make the emperor abdicate in favor of a worthy man. Be refreshing. Playing Machiavellian means that when the strength is insufficient, the protagonist's strength is overflowing. If you want to write a Machiavellian plot, don't make the protagonist too strong.

，，， It's a pity that the flaw is too obvious. Since it is written about tactics, shouldn't everyone gather around the table and act under certain rules? As a result, only the protagonist is using the power strategy seriously (not to mention whether the power strategy is well written), while others are flipping the table. From the beginning to the present, the protagonist has been assassinated dozens of times (a slight exaggeration), but the protagonist never fights back (referring to directly killing the mastermind behind the scenes). He has always been pretending to be a pig, but never eats a tiger. Of course I know that if I write it this way, it may be over in 100,000 words, because all the enemies will be killed. Therefore, the biggest flaw in writing Machiavellian plots is that the protagonist is always assassinated.                                                                                                                                                                               but the protagonist as a prince are always assassinated. Not to mention being assassinated so many times. Finally, when it comes to summoning characters, they basically revolve around the protagonist, and they are not used well at all. The biggest bug is Tong Lao. Speaking of Tong Lao, the most profound impression is that Tong Lao used the life and death talisman to control the thirty-six holes and seventy-two islands. In the end, the life and death talisman was just a decoration and I never saw it being used (I jumped to read it, maybe I didn't pay attention). If not for the life and death talisman, he could control everyone in the world (exaggeration). The Sunflower Guards who were trained said they were spying on information, but it turned out that the first group was to become bodyguards for Tong Lao. In the early stage of summoning characters, both of them knew what was going on and what was hidden, but later on they didn't say anything openly and basically kept them by their side as bodyguards. Summoning characters is completely useless.         ，，，，（)        ，，， This book overstates the strength of the characters summoned by the protagonist. As a result, it does not use hard power to be strong, but instead uses power and tactics to win every step of the way, which is a bit inferior.

You are being assassinated every day. You are the pinnacle of a grandmaster. Brother, except for the grand master of a palace, you are the most embarrassing. Don't you know how to imitate others to assassinate? You are not good at writing plots and plots. Are you not good at pushing horizontally? Wouldn't it be good for you to kill several princes by dividing three by five and dividing by two? Do you still have feelings for them? It's too childish.

An invincible-style story can be pushed horizontally, and you have no idea what you are doing. It is a marriage offer and the woman wants to escape from it. If you want to write it slowly and leisurely, don't do anything with high combat power. After you have high combat power, you are doing something with low combat power. It is very boring.

Brother, no matter how powerful the Jia family is, I can't bear it if they don't say that they are the queen's biological brother or something like that. A person of the nephew generation is paying attention to the wife of the chief of the imperial guard all day long. Do you know who can be the chief of the imperial guard of the emperor? You have to be absolutely close to the Prime Minister and your confidant. Is a nephew of the broken Jia family looking for death? The most important thing is that the queen knows about this. Are all the heads of the Jia family pigs? Can't you see someone using your children and nephews as guns behind your back?

Why do you accept girls one after another? It takes so much space to write, but it is impossible to describe the characteristics of these women. It is a dry description of appearance that can be forgotten after turning the page. If you don't have this skill, you should write less about recruiting girls.

I read dozens of them, all of which were about conspiracies and conspiracies, but it was so embarrassing that it was like a child playing house with an upright villain and no brainer to read it! A dandy dared to rob the wife of the commander of the imperial army in the street again and again. However, a general didn't even have a guard servant in his family and was robbed when he went out to buy groceries every day. There was also someone who wrote that this woman was some kind of eldest prince, so he killed the prince and killed the person he was loyal to, and let his whole family be wiped out. What was his plan! Is it love!

Is this a change of author? Earlier, the king of Xiliang was inclined to make peace with the Jin Dynasty. Later, it was directly written that the king of Xiliang was also highly skilled in martial arts and wanted to make peace with Wusun. I couldn't stand it anymore and gave up the book.

The machinations in the introduction made me laugh. Author, please read what you have written. Can you convince yourself of the behavior of the characters in it?

The wife of a dignified commander of the Forbidden Army has been targeted by a dandy young man, and she is still worried? ? Is this talking about conspiracy? ? ? Even if he is the prime minister, the emperor has to find a way to kill people before doing such a thing, right?

Brother, find a job in a factory. This industry is too deep and not suitable for you.

Why don't you write about political strategy instead of comprehensive martial arts? At least there is an original work to copy from

After reading the fifty chapters, it's tasteless It's clearly written in the style of summoning Shuang Shuang. It's made in the style of history and strategy, and the integration of the two is awkward, looking like a Yin-Yang monster. Furthermore, didn't the protagonist travel through time? I always write about princes having sex. Even if they have memories, they are just other people. Just like when we watch movies, what do you want to express? In real society, brothers fight for family property and break the first pile, let alone the throne! Another dynasty, marrying a daughter to a prince is an attempt to gain the power of the dragon, which is obviously inconsistent with what you said about the Qiu family's style. Fighting for the heir apparent, fighting for the dragon, or death, and not one person dies alone. It's the kind of family that dies After reading Chapter 50, the protagonist's style does not stand out. For example, I have been a proton for ten years and will start trouble when I come back, or I just come back and don't know the situation, so I just keep developing. In the author's writing, the protagonist is like a puppet

A fly stalks a dog, just like a tiger stealing cat food from a kitten's bowl. The summoning stream is not pushed horizontally, but is it about conspiracy?

The writing is okay, but the ink is too heavy. What did you write? The political struggle is childish, the summoning flow is not refreshing enough, and the plot has no climax and is sticky.

Seriously. The subject matter is good subject matter. But not everyone is suited to intrigue. Such an awesome system. Flat push flow is the most suitable.

The author should not write about power and strategy. You are an ordinary person in reality. You have never even been a village chief. You just write about the emperor's level of strategy. How is it possible that he is a good person from one perspective and a bad person from another perspective? How can it be so easy for you to tell at a glance that everything is good and everything is bad? It is better to write about Gaowu.

It's such a good subject that the ink stains are sticky and the teeth are white and the eyes are white.

There are too few characters summoned. Can't we issue more tasks?

Suggestions for the author. I feel like the protagonist can be made a little more domineering. Emperors are all domineering and kingly.

The writing is okay, but the plot is a bit immature. The author is probably young, which creates a lot of poisonous points.

It can be seen that the author really wants to write a deep plot, but he keeps digging holes and never fills them in. I can't even finish the free chapters. It's not satisfying!

It feels like an average story. For hegemony stories, you usually don't have so many female protagonists in the early stages, and there aren't many wars. Well-written hegemony stories are all about princes, and the emperors are all sixth sons. And then as it develops, there are more generals. After watching it for a long time, I haven't even reached the battle for hegemony yet, but there are a lot of female protagonists.

After setting up a grand master, the protagonist thinks that everyone is a grand master. Regardless of priorities, I want to play tricks. You need to know what your background is. You should fight against the system, speed up the summons, and use your strength to overwhelm people.

I'm still waiting for the update, is it going to suck? Although I jumped to watch it, it still made people feel a sense of anticipation.

Maybe love starts out because of dependence, but if you really love it, it will definitely turn into dependence. Just when they were missing each other, Xiaowu suddenly came to him like a spring breeze. She smiled so beautifully that he couldn't help but want to grab her, but when he waved his arm, it was empty. This was a dream after all, a sweet dream!

The front is ok! After Chapter 200! It shouldn't have been written by someone! The sentences are a mess! It's very uncomfortable to listen to the book!