Honghu Dangtian Ji

The writing style of the traditional martial arts of the Jinliang line is acceptable, but the story is not new, the narrative is straightforward, and the writing is too "rushed" and lacks the succession and transition of the plot. The Mao Dun conflict broke out too quickly and neglected the shaping of the characters. There are many characters in the current five chapters, but most of them are "flat", such as the disciples of the Langya Sect and the Qingyu Gang, and they have a bit of a "tool man" flavor. For example, the three people in Zhuxian Village can be portrayed differently and try to create distinct images of the three people. Now it feels like the three people are "one" and "untenable" if they are separated. It is recommended that the author should not be obsessed with the promotion of the story, and polish the characters first. You can try to write a short biography of the character. The character is the muscle that connects the subsequent story. It is also recommended that the story be more "novel" and try to incorporate other elements. It is still difficult to write 100% pure martial arts, especially in the current context of "the decline of martial arts". It is difficult for such a "square" martial arts story to attract readers. Finally, I hope the author can continue to write 🌹🌹🌹

The vocabulary is rich and the descriptions are meticulous. Nowadays, it is rare to see the classic martial arts novel format of the author Da Da. You can clearly feel that every sentence has been carefully considered. Come on, come on

This novel is fast-paced in conception, the details are fascinating, and the characters are profound, making readers interested. It can be seen that the author is a modern literati who is familiar with martial arts skills and has a profound study of ancient history. His writing style is wonderful and smooth, bringing readers into the follow-up of the story. Looking forward to a series of exciting plots!

After reading the first few chapters, I believe that this will be a martial arts novel with rich characters and an ups and downs story. The male protagonist has a free and lively personality. What life situation he will have in the future, I look forward to subsequent updates. It is worth pointing out that the author's description of the fighting scenes shows his research on martial arts, with exquisite design and high readability.

Fire Tongs Liu Ming, ancient martial arts novels are not common nowadays, after squatting ୧( ⁼̴̶̤̀ω⁼̴̶̤́ )૭

It's rare to see such a pure style of martial arts novels nowadays. I look forward to the follow-up updates!

Continuing the tradition and following the soul of "Swordsman", the language and plot settings are very good. You can absorb the suggestions of other friends in the comment area to enrich the characters. In addition, Feng Chunbao is quite like Linghu Shaoxia. Is it possible that Chun Chun is like Chong? I don't know what life path will correspond to Linghu Chong's in the future. I hope Chun Bao can make up for Linghu Chong's shortcomings in his life. Quanhouwen 😍

It can be seen from Brother Lu's pen that he depicts martial arts heroes, all over the dangerous rivers and lakes, moral grievances and grievances, which is soul-stirring. The plot has twists and turns, ups and downs, and is amazing. The text description is delicate and meticulous, showing the author's unique ingenuity. The characters are vivid, three-dimensional and deeply rooted in the hearts of the people. The martial arts world is so vividly drawn that it makes people feel like they are actually there. Reading it makes one's blood boil with excitement and yearning. {"TopicId":"908374221557334016","TopicName":"Martial Arts Novels"}Brother Lu{"TopicId":"908374798043578368","TopicName":"Shallow Comment"}My micro-review

The writing is good, the plot is compact, and it can be seen that the author is very careful. It is very good. It is a good article.