Immortal for Eternity in the Cultivation World

This book is not too censorship, I will chop it up

Emperor·Zhouyi

Let me tell you what I think. I personally feel depressed. Maybe many supporters will say whether you like it or not, but I think I should still have some rights to speak since I have spent money to subscribe. So let me tell you why I feel depressed 1. Long There is a sense of time passing, the rhythm is not well grasped, and the details are not noticed. There are no outstanding supporting roles or protagonists of the era, such as Lao Bai and Zhu Zhu. Most of them are written in Spring and Autumn Period. There are not many details. It is difficult to say that it is unforgettable. I can only say that I choose the general among the dwarfs. It's not big enough, it doesn't have a sense of historical grandeur, and if you pull it too fast, it feels like a running account. In this regard, there is a group photo novel on Qidian's best-selling list (I won't mention which one, so as not to be accused of advertising), which is very outstanding. Every era has its protagonists who are deeply memorable and haunting. The sense of grandeur of history can also make people tremble. 2. In my eyes, the protagonist has no profound logic of thought and behavior (the author does not have a clear main line to push the protagonist forward). Call him stubborn, but he comes out to cause trouble from time to time and instigate rebellion at every turn (is the author an angry youth?). You say that he promotes the development of history, but he is not deeply involved in controlling the direction and being the real mastermind behind the scenes, which makes people feel very naive (those who are young in reading may not feel this). If you want to be that stubborn at the beginning, just stick to the word "gou" from the beginning to the end, do less things and do things casually. If you feel that the world is not good and you want to make the world a better place, then control the direction. I really feel that the author may be an angry young man who doesn't have my outline, which makes the protagonist do things in a haphazard manner without a consistent guideline, and he can't help but let the protagonist instigate rebellion from time to time. And the protagonist has only been busy building things and celebrating for so many years. He neither tries to find ways to improve his qualifications and seize the gap between spiritual energy to become stronger as soon as possible, nor does he try to plunder resources to control the development direction of future generations. He has been messing around for thousands of years, and the final plot is scattered and not profound. The two main things that make me unable to stand it are these two points. In the final analysis, I feel that the plot is scattered and not profound, and it feels a bit like a running story. Personally, I feel that this book is actually good at the beginning, but I don't have a good grasp of it later on. It's tasteless and it's a pity to abandon it. Supporters, please don't complain. When I think it's time to leave, I will naturally delete it. That's it

How can I put it, I feel very disappointed, this book should not be like this. The early structure of this book can indeed be called the foundation of a good book, but later on the plot appeared to have unreasonable parts and gradually collapsed. The Immortality Fruit that the protagonist possesses seems strange to me. What kind of strange method is it specifically? Mainly lies in the author's shaping in the writing. In the early days, the fruit of immortality was the golden finger for the protagonist to survive, enter the immortal path, strengthen himself, and acquire skills. Every step of the protagonist's steps fit the title and continued to attract readers who clicked in because of the title. But when the first destiny protagonist came out, I vaguely felt that the author wanted to weaken the fruit of immortality and wanted to move it behind the scenes and among the group portraits. This is the first strange point. When or before the protagonist was an outer disciple of the sect, he could obtain the skills that consume lifespan, ripen plants and perform divination. Why can't he get the same or other functions after having half the resources of the immortal world? It feels like he is in trouble. The technique that Gong obtained by consuming his lifespan and shortening the lifespan of others was very unexpected. He suddenly came out to click on a question after briefly breaking away from the golden finger of the Immortality Principle. Moreover, this technique was obviously a specialized technique later developed to retaliate against those bosses who used secret techniques (or to fit in with the subsequent plot). Then comes the second strange point. After introducing the legend of Kunlun, the author feels that he is clearly paving the way for behind-the-scenes streaming, because the protagonist's resources and combat power are clearly at the top (except for a few old monsters, but if you want to write about behind-the-scenes streaming or group portrait streaming, there are obviously many ways to solve them), but the author is introducing a few When Kunlun pushed out the people, I felt that they were brought out in a few strokes in order to highlight the fruit of immortality. Although this highlighted the feeling of passage of time, it gave me a very twisted feeling. I could no longer tell whether the author wanted to write about behind-the-scenes stories or continue to focus on the protagonist's experience (I didn't know it was the latter until the protagonist was born and wanted to save the human race). The third thing is that the boundary between being stubborn and being unscrupulous in this article is very unclear. If you only look at the first part, it is obvious that the protagonist exists for the sake of being stubborn, but later on the protagonist gradually becomes unscrupulous. No, I can't say I'm being strict. I can only say that it's really weird to go out and celebrate every day under the tone of being stubborn. For example, when we meet the first Destiny Child (I really forgot his name... And I don't want to watch it again...) At the end of the game, this can obviously be seen as an accident caused by too many outings and celebrations. The protagonist is secretive and afraid of revealing his identity, which makes this historic meeting seem very dull and boring to read. In my opinion, since you meet a special person at a specific time, you can expose yourself as his benefactor even if you don't reveal the fruit of immortality. As for living to this day, you can also use some secret techniques or vague words (after all, from the author's few words, I feel that Xiao has a good nature except for getting into trouble). This is the fourth strange point. It is not very exciting, or it is ordinary. To sum up, I just wrote what I thought of, and the logic may not make sense. Moreover, I talk nonsense. Only my mouth is strong in my whole body. I can only teach authors to write. I am a keyboard warrior. I am ***.

The recent eunuch chapter is really eye-catching. I can't wait to catch the author and ask him to write more. It's so exciting. I even doubted whether it was written by an old eunuch who had been working for decades. The characterization and control of details are simply superb, and this aspect feels like it is at its peak. I would like to call you number one in the eunuch article. The Tianlao chapter is considered a fairy tale, the Kyushu chapter feels a bit lame and can barely be read, and the Eunuch chapter is really the pinnacle of peaks! I have seen many works by the master Shirogane, and I have never seen one that can describe every psychology, action, and plot advancement so naturally! Come on! I really recommend Gao Wuwen to write about eunuchs in the next book, it will definitely be a hit!

Don't let the introduction fool you. I personally guarantee that this book is a good source of food and close to fairy grass. . I haven't encountered a book like this for a long time.

It's time to update. It's been so many days. The more you procrastinate, the less you want to write. The less you write, the less inspired you are. The more you rest, the easier it is to become lazy. It's time to update. Get up. We are waiting for you.

Dad, please update more, Dad

Solemn reminder: This book is the ancestor of the longevity series.

The author can do it. I have always felt that this kind of creativity can actually be written a lot. As the level system improves, I may be able to work as a sweeper in some school, an old man in a sect library, a recorder of the war between humans and demons. As time goes by, maybe I can start a modernization process of cultivation and become a weird old professor of a cultivation university in the new era. I can also use a spaceship to travel to the universe. There is a lot of content that can be developed.