My Sand Sculpture Redeemed Girlfriend

I hope the author can see that, first of all, it can be seen from between the lines that you cannot write and have no idea what issues to avoid. Secondly, it is recommended that the author read the works of the big guys in the love zone when he has free time, and learn from them purposefully, but without changing his own style. For example, the use of emojis is good, it is really cute. I hope the author will not stop at this book, and I also wish the author better and better, and academic success. Finally, if you can sing, sing more, the supporting vocals are too little

Bai was excited, and the only comment he made was the advertisement.

It's good to watch, but my feelings get better inexplicably. There's an inexplicable sense of dissonance when I look at it. The character of the protagonist changes after just a few pictures. If I use love at first sight as an explanation, I can only say that it's too forced. You can refer to other books to read it. Good luck to the author~

It's well written, why isn't there anyone?

To be honest, the author writes about love quite delicately.

The author writes like a little girl.

The author's writing is very good, and it is definitely worth reading and subscribing. Recommend a book: Mental Patients Have More Happiness "Old Man in Time Travels to Scavenge and Survive by Making Bad Movies"

After a brief look, the author's writing is actually quite good. Of course it would be better if it could be divided into paragraphs appropriately. Overly long paragraphs of text can easily kill people's interest. Of course just suggestions, suggestions.

It's so annoying to watch without segmentation! The rest of the book is still very good, but I guess I will read half of it, and it is too troublesome to not divide it into paragraphs.

Just write it for fun!

It's so well written, why don't more people read it? 🌚

Why is there not even a double quotation mark in this sentence? It's really annoying.

The short story "Listen to the Summer Cicadas with You" has just been released and is being serialized. Please support the new writers hahahaha

I'm borrowing a building to recommend this word game novel that I like. The adventure of this word game is really mysterious. The world view is set on a full moon night. It is combined with various fantasy elements and the plot is well designed. The collection link is below, you can try to collect it and watch it.

To be honest, brother, the emotional transformation of your book is a bit poor, but I can still read it.

There are no character cards, the introduction is relatively simple, and I don't recognize the pen name, so it's difficult to get into the trap.

Did you make a wrong bet? Why are you submitting short stories? It's better to submit to urban areas than short stories.

How to put it this way, the male protagonist was reborn and his previous life counted as 18 years for you, but now it counts as 10 years and 28 years. The character is portrayed like that of a junior high school student, without the so-called maturity and stability of a person who has experienced two lives.

The author's story is actually well written, but not delicate enough. Emotional transformation requires a process and needs to be repeated step by step. You can start from the psychology of both parties and write it appropriately. It shows pathos or excitement or anger or strangeness, and the inner heart is different from the expression, depending on the situation (the first few pictures look good and the character setting. The setting of the character should be clear and prominent. What is she? Wenqing? Yandere? Tsundere? Green tea? Bingshan? If you want to have distinctive character characteristics, such as sand sculpture, you need to enlarge the background. The background of the character should be introduced at least a little when it appears.