Plunder the Heavens Starting from Doupo

Gu Xun'er can be accepted, but the emotions need to be written more delicately. If you don't know how to write emotional scenes, you will write it in a way that grows over time. I hope Gu Xun'er won't be touched, and there will be fantasy and technological weapons. . It can only be said that it is too poisonous. The character issues of the protagonist and the system need to be better described. If the protagonist is lecherous and unmotivated, it will be disgusting. There must be a step-by-step practice process for alchemy. If you don't buy it, you can just practice it and it will be poisonous. There can be fire from other worlds in the mall. You must also remember the timeline. Xiao Yan is now 15. The protagonist is only about 11 years old, so you must remember this. In addition, you should not leave any opportunity behind. If you let Xiao Yan grow up, you can say that you will find a mess for yourself. If you snatch it by chance, it is estimated that Xiao Yan will switch to earth-level skills. His cultivation will definitely not be as good as the original. At most, he will be similar to an ordinary genius in Zhongzhou (after all, there is Yao Lao). Anyway, remember to avoid lightning!

I voted for QQ and QQ. Once approved, I will send it there.

There are many female protagonists in the harem of this book, and the protagonist is an LSP who is as handsome as the readers. I will basically accept the ones I like.

This book seems to have been posted to the wrong channel, and it is no longer available. I will re-read it!