Taoist New Ancestor

In the beginning, he was like a Taoist ancestor. He could carve out a few Taoist inscriptions with a mortal bow in a few days and he could carve out powerful rocks. He was full of B points. As a result, his apprentice was kidnapped. He went to rescue the apprentice, but he had a fight with a warrior. He also dressed up as a young master and engaged in some cliché plots with a woman. Didn't you become a Taoist? You are really not a Taoist. The contrast is really speechless.

Let's revise it. The introduction says there is no Tao, no immortals, no gods. You want to preach, practice immortality, and become a god. However, before chapter 20, an old Taoist comes out and says that we are not alone in the Tao. Aren't you slapping yourself?

I have read the author's book, and since you asked for a review, I will say a few words. There is nothing wrong with the overall text expression. The creativity and writing are okay. But from the structure of your story, I can clearly understand that your world view of the whole book is not very complete. Between the monster who appears in your first chapter and the mortal father and son who appear in your third chapter, there is a fatal blurring of consciousness. You are going to challenge a strange and strange world. Mortals in this world should not be so cowardly. They are strong and brave, otherwise they would not have the courage to break into the terrifying mountains. It is an unwise choice for you to cast down the supporting characters in order to highlight the protagonist. It can also be seen from these places that you don't know what the world will be like after you step out. Because you don't have a clue, you forcefully add some clues and explode around you. The appearance of the monster in the first paragraph reflects the success of the effectiveness and power of the protagonist's golden finger. Why don't you turn on the exploration mode at this time? Starting from the pressure brought by the monster, it leads to the weirdness and crisis of the world. The subsequent training of the protagonist's customer service will grow stronger, and then timely show how the protagonist helps people in this world after his appearance. This kind of natural and smooth character creation is more attractive than the story frame of forcing relationships. Finally, the pace of the first three chapters was too slow. Once the father and son appeared on the scene in the third chapter, the whole book was completely broken! It's only 100,000 words, so there's still time to rest and recuperate. After all, it's not easy to sign a contract. 😁 You can't always just think about living on the subsistence allowance. The above is my opinion. People who have read tens of thousands of books are also pretenders, but to be honest, if you don't change, your book will definitely be sold on the street. Come on 🌹🌹

This chapter made me give up the book. A mortal wanted to kill the protagonist, but the protagonist took an arrow and was scared away. . . You don't even dare to retaliate against mortals with a single effort. Are you an immortal and the Taoist ancestor?

To be honest, I felt quite uncomfortable watching it. Before one round ended, another round came up. Why don't you let the reader's brain rest? If you don't develop when it's time to develop, you'll let other things cause trouble. Things must have an ebb and flow! If you keep going up, you'll drown sooner or later. Anyway, I'm about to choke to death.

Alas, my poison point was too low, and I was poisoned to death in the chapter of accepting a female apprentice. To be honest, the author's writing is indeed very good, but that chapter is really poisonous... I wish the author better and better writing, so let's leave now.

If you accept anyone you see as a disciple, you will know the book fee.

The author's biggest failure is that he accepts anyone, even without qualifications or character, as long as they are individuals! ! ! ! ! ! !

At the beginning, he was like a Taoist ancestor. He could carve a few Taoist inscriptions with a mortal bow in a few days to carve out powerful rocks. He was full of b-characters. As a result, his apprentice was kidnapped. He went to save his apprentice, but he had a back-and-forth with a person. He even dressed up as a young master and engaged in some cliché plots with a woman. Didn't you become a Taoist? You are really not a Taoist ancestor. The contrast is really speechless

The layout is too low. Is it just a matter of one person harvesting it and growing cabbage? It is too casual for outsiders to practice martial arts casually. Even if they want to expand the Taoist gate, they should be high-profile, play the Taoist ancestors, burn incense and pray. It was also said before that swordsmanship is easy to enter the demonic way. In this city of mind, any child today is better than him.

The invincible system has no limit on the number of apprentices it can accept. Writer, do you still want to write this book? Accept 10 million apprentices who follow the right path. Become a Taoist ancestor in half a year. Return to Earth to show off. Such a big bug.

Li Xianglan was a complete failure. Why didn't she kidnap her morally and kill her with a thunderbolt to celebrate the New Year?

The starting point of the idea is very high, but unfortunately it turns from awesome to tacky as soon as it appears, and the writing style is not enough to convey that flavor.

He's a eunuch, get off the bookshelf and follow the author to see if he can get out of the palace 😏

I had to show off, but I still had a fucking chapter.

It's numb, you have all the poisonous points. . .