Death: Please Call My Name

First of all, this book is indeed a bit strange. For example, in the first few chapters of the inner world, the dialogue between Qixian and Zhen is a bit vague. I already understand the meaning, but I always feel that there is no need to make it so vague. To be honest, it is really a bit weird. I think the dialogue can be changed. The way of this dialogue can use other things to set off the protagonist. My inner thoughts are, of course, just my personal opinion. If there is a better method, it can be used. Also, when I hit the void for the first time, the battle scene was a bit too stiff, but it is understandable. Maybe the author is not good at writing this aspect. In this regard, you can learn from Su Xiao's battle in Samsara Paradise and the author's description technique. There are some places where I will I won't say more, but in summary, the author still writes very carefully. It can be seen that the author wants to write his own story, which is at least much better than some of the worse death novels. At the beginning, the author wants to write about the protagonist's psychological journey. For example, in the first few chapters of the conversation with Qixian, I feel that in that paragraph, the author wants to flesh out the protagonist's character. Yes, but the dialogue is a bit weird, at least in my personal opinion. Anyway, I can still read it. Don't say anything. This book is very poisonous. I can tell at a glance that the poison resistance is not high enough. I read "Stay Well in a Different World and Live Well" to increase the poison resistance. In short, the author is also very careful to write a "true" story, and the book is still okay.

Sorry, maybe my mentality is a little broken, so I posted this comment. Let me talk about this book first. The theme is growth, spiritual growth, and the protagonist's "real" transformation from immaturity to maturity. One poisonous point is that the protagonist is not like Shuang Wenli, who has mature thinking or acts like a pretense by subduing other people's collective intelligence. Poison point two: The past chapter is very important to the protagonist. It is an important time period to improve strength and expand power, so I wrote many chapters, which were relatively detailed and the rhythm was too slow. Poison point three, the protagonist Zanpakutō has a background. I am not a chuunibyou elementary school student author who simply mixes various abilities. It is related to the origin of the protagonist, so I won't go into details, but it is undeniable that Qixian has too many abilities. Poison point four, this book imitates the style of death. People who die in the original work may not die, but the price is pain. In the same way, people who do not die in the original work may also die. This is not a comedy, but a tragedy with mixed joy and sorrow. I like a character It doesn't mean that you have to save him. You can save him if you can. If it is beyond the protagonist's ability, it would be embarrassing. And the past chapter is the basis. I saved. For example, I saved Isshin Shiba and Masaki Kurosaki. What should I do with Ichigo Kurosaki? Should I just redo the plot? That's so stupid. Who else can I save? There are several characters in the past chapter who will be useful later. Who should I save? Didn't Rukia adopt him, didn't he become a disciple as a soldier, didn't he become a subordinate of the full-sense jutsu, didn't I save most of them from death, didn't I also connect the plot of Heizhen, didn't I try my best? Aizen's Mirror Flowers and Moon, is it possible for the protagonist to be straightforward? Poison point five, the protagonist has too much drama in his heart, I'm sorry, the prototype is me, I have a lot of drama, my psychology is fragile, I put myself into the protagonist, and the intention is to grow together, so the real psychology is basically my psychology, and if a man says he likes him, he must be gay, I don't understand, do you like your friends? The main character is not gay. Poison point 6: The timeline is wrong. I admit this. I defined most of the unclear times by myself, but the order of events is basically correct. If there is a big boss who can show me the accurate time of everything in Death, it is okay for me to call him dad. After all, for an author like me, it is indeed like a reborn parent, and it saves me time to check information every day. Poisonous Point 7: There must be a sentence full of literary youth atmosphere at the beginning of each chapter. Sorry, this is to be close to the style of Death. I think people who read fics will not look down on the second act, right? After all, everyone has something to do with it. Of course, if you are reading a cool novel to put yourself in the role of the protagonist and show off, then this book is really not suitable at the moment. If you want to be more exciting, wait until the past chapter is over and read it when the original plot officially begins. It can be more exciting. Poison point eight, let me think about it... I haven't thought of it yet, so that's it for now. I hope that all new readers or readers who have doubts after reading it can take a look at my summary of poisonous points. I have some psychological problems myself, and I am very tired recently. I also put a lot of effort into this book and designed a lot of things. I read a lot of information to improve the vague setting of Death. The novel I wrote before, Tu Yile, did not have an outline or a detailed setting. This time I wrote an outline and thought about the setting, and tried my best to restore the feeling of Death. My novel is about growth in tragedy, which is probably destined to be very niche. I can accept that the book is relatively cool. So please be sure to think carefully about whether to read it or not after reading this post. If there are questions or comments about the poisonous points I compiled above appear again in the paragraph reviews and book reviews, I may ignore them. I hope you can understand it. Oh, by the way, there is also a writing problem. I'm sorry. I tried my best. My writing will get better and better in the future. Thank you.

My painting skills are poor, just passable.

Although I have not studied painting... But it is indeed a bit ugly, please forgive me...(98 Style of painting is really beautiful) The one on the left is Broken Bee, and the one on the right is Zhen (the protagonist).

How can I put it, it smells like a literary novel. If you want to be popular, you still need to change it. The beginning of each chapter is very uncomfortable at first.

1 Million years ago - the birth of Soul Society. Two thousand years ago, Takuchōjiro Tadaki was able to practice swastika, and he was approved by Yamamoto Genryu Sai (ノji Sai) Shigekuni, and left an indelible scar on his forehead. About two thousand years ago, Yamamoto Genryu Sai Shigekuni created the Gotei 13. The first generation Gotei 13 was said to be the strongest fighting force in history. The first known captains are Yamamoto Genryu Sai Shigekuni and Unohana Retsu. About two thousand years ago - one thousand years ago Unohana Retsu and Zaraki Kenpachi met, and this battle changed the fate of both parties. About a thousand years ago, Soul Society and Arihabah had a major duel, in which Captain Yamamoto used the swastika, and the battle between the Quincy and the God of Death began. About two hundred years ago, the God of Death launched a war of annihilation against the Quincy. Because the Quincy hunted the Hollows and completely disappeared their souls causing the world to collapse, the God of Death carried out the annihilation of the Quincy. 111 years ago (the Arrancar chapter is 110 years ago) Hikifune Kiryu was promoted to the Zero Division, and Urahara Kisuke was promoted from the third seat of the Second Division to the captain of the Twelfth Division. Urahara Kisuke released Nirvana from the nest of maggots and created the Technology Development Bureau. 103, 4 years ago (the Arrancar Chapter is 102, 3 years ago) Aizen Sosuke used part of Matsumoto Rangiku's soul as the material for the broken jade. Ichimaru Gin vowed to take revenge on Aizen and determined to become a Shinigami. 102 years ago (the Arrancar chapter is 101 years ago) Ichimaru Gin entered the fifth division and wanted to stop Rangiku from crying. Only ten pictures can be posted, so I won't post them below 100 years ago, due to Aizen's conspiracy, a soul disappearance event occurred in Rukongai. Hirako and his party, who went to investigate the matter, were involved in the Hollow event, and escaped from the present world with the help of Urahara, Nurihisi, and Yoruichi. Rukia was adopted by the Kuchiki family 49 years ago. About 45 years ago, Hitsugaya met Rangiku, and Hitsugaya learned to control his power in order not to hurt those around him. Determined to become a god of death. Shiba Haiyan passed away 44 years ago. Twenty years ago, the captain of the 10th division at the time, Shiba Isshin, went to the present world alone in order to investigate the death of the Shinigami. He was attacked by a virtual attack created by Sosuke Aizen using the unknown Soul of the Shinigami. Twenty years ago, in order to save Masaki Kurosaki who was in crisis of soul suicide, Shiba entered the body specially made by Kisuke Urahara and lost the power of death. Eighteen years ago, Kurosaki Ichigo was born. About ten years ago, the first generation of Shinigami agents Ginjo Kugo and Tsukishima met. Nine years ago, Kurosaki Masaki died. Non-pure-blooded Quincy lost their power because of Habaha's sanctification. Uryū's mother Katagiri Hae and Kurosaki Masaki died. Five years ago, Orihime Inoue's brother died in an accident. Four years ago, Ichigo Kurosaki and Taitora Sadat met. About two years ago, in the spring, Rukia Kuchiki received the task of stationing in Karakura Town. Then time begins to enter the main plot, the Death Agent chapter. Summer, Soul Society chapter. Autumn, Arrancar Chapter. Winter, Hueco Mundo Chapter and Karakura Town Decisive Battle Chapter. Now, 17 months later, in spring, the Death Agent disappears. Summer, the final chapter, the thousand-year bloody battle.

Literary youth is not a disease, it is really fatal to not be able to cope with the radio waves.

The protagonists in other fan novels are outrageous and extremely manic The protagonist in this fan novel is smaller and softer, as light as water After reading only a few chapters, here are the problems: 1: The homosexual atmosphere is serious, and I am ambiguous with the same sex, and I still feel like a sufferer br>Two: It is too literary and young, and the writing style of the novel is incompatible with modern reading aesthetics. This is writing a novel, not a composition, let alone a paper. The purpose of the novel is to read it in an interesting and easy-to-understand way. This novel must be written in a distant place and poetry, which is wrong. Third, the author wanted to write about the growth history of the protagonist, the psychological changes of his step-by-step growth from a naive young man. The idea was very good, but he did not think about the readers' feelings. When reading the novel, the readers and the protagonist have a sense of substitution. The protagonist writes that Kiriki is weak and weak, but the readers are not, and they cannot get into it at all. If you can't bring in the characters, it fails as a novel.

I'm here to complain. I've only read a few chapters and won't comment on the specific content. Author, what do you think? Give the protagonist a one-word name? "Real" My reading experience is really eye-catching! It's so uncomfortable. Are you taking revenge on society?

Heroine

The supporting characters that were not described much in the original work should either not be written or be marginalized. Don't write them. After a while, you realize that the original work didn't write much, and you don't know how to write them, and then you just find a reason to exit!

Why are eunuch's works featured on Daily Guide? Should it be said that it is a daily introduction to poison?

I have always felt that the Grim Reaper is the most miserable character in the San Minggong manga, and the ending was so hasty in the end. To a certain extent, it was deserved. . It is the strongest in terms of its structure. Not counting the theatrical side story, everything revolves around the protagonist Ichigo Kurosaki and the people around him. First, around Lucia, the Death Chapter, the main character Death. Second, surrounding Orihime, Hueco Mundo, and the main character Arrancar. Third, around Sadato, Wanxianjutsu, the main character Wanxianjutsu (unfinished). Fourth, surrounding Ishida, a thousand-year bloody battle, the main character is the Quincy (unfinished). But the battle plot is really hard to describe in one sentence. It is obviously not designed. You meet the enemy, you are beaten, you cheat, the enemy cheats, and the protagonist starts a bigger cheat, gg... You say this is a battle? You can apply this template to any of Strawberry's main battles from beginning to end. The structure is the strongest and the background is the richest. Please add more flowers, otherwise it will be too wasteful. Especially in the part about the full-genjutsu and the thousand-year bloody battle, the original manga is in a state of ruins, which is a pity.

Good guy, Broken Bee, did you choose the least amazing one among the many amazing beauties?

The title of this book makes me feel like I'm going to kill Superman.

My painting skills are not good, just take a general look...

Gay is very angry, and Dao is gay and Haiyan is gay and "please look at my Haiyan carefully" yue~

Because the drawing was so bad, I just put a code in it and gave a simple hint to know what the situation is...

Book friends are welcome to leave their own ideas and design Zanpakuto abilities as much as you like. I will refer to it.

The protagonist has no sense of immersion at all, and the previous plot is not very exciting. I can only say that the author should read more successful works before writing the next one.

The swastika doesn't look good, so I won't draw it any more

The Zanpakuto is not trustworthy. Since this weapon has a personal consciousness, it means there is a possibility of betrayal. If you are disobedient, you would rather break it and replace it with an ordinary sword.