Star Game Comes True

Author, you don't actually need to describe things related to singing skills. You are not an expert. You can just mention this kind of thing in one stroke. You will save yourself from writing too much and making mistakes.

Less intrigues and more positive energy

I think the writing is pretty good

Write less about villains and more about daily life

This was written by a computer, right? The protagonist has a past life (I originally thought he didn't) and became a trainee? Can't you be a composer?

I followed the recommendation of a veteran and checked it out. The writing is passable. I'll give it a try and read it again. It's only 30 chapters. It's so short. The world background looks familiar. Did it borrow the world setting of "Full-time Artist"?

Young and promising singer in the bar. . . . . Let's not talk about whether the protagonist's age is appropriate or not. . . Isn't the bar noisy? Is it possible that when he sings, passers-by stop dancing? The DJ is cold? I've never been there, so I don't know much about it. If you know anything, please let me know.

"But" appears seven times in the first chapter, which is too often.

I couldn't stand it when I saw I was eliminated. This pretentious slap-in-the-face routine is really too old, and it's a plot I could have predicted many chapters ago.