Xuanling Fights for Immortality

When I read the latest chapter, I felt like many book friends, that it was tasteless and a pity to discard. In this situation, the disadvantages and advantages are generally obvious. The advantages are the setting, skills, training details, the naming of the skills and magical powers is good, the fighting scenes are well written, and the imagination is good. Let me focus on the shortcomings: The characterization is not very good. First of all, the shortcoming is that the character and traits of the protagonist are too vague. After writing so many words, there is no clear and complete personality and traits. Many times it feels like an NPC. It lacks emotion and logic for people and things. The occasional enthusiasm is just for some inexplicable trivial things, which cannot serve the development of the main plot. At the same time, as the protagonist's skills and experience increase, he cannot see the evolution and growth of his cognition, mentality, and values. It is boring without ups and downs. It's really boring to look naturally mature from the time I started undercover to now. The character traits of the various supporting characters are also completely undepicted. It is recommended to take a look at the characterizations of dozens of people from the protagonist to the minor supporting roles in "The Road to the Master of the Cultivation Sect". The position setting is inexplicable. I am loyal to the Volo sect. This is to be an undercover agent and a spy. It is not a situation where death is inevitable. This is not a dead soldier. It is also a trick to give you a suicide talisman. I accept it happily and continue to work hard. I found out that I was taught magic text before. There is obviously a conspiracy. I have no complaints. I just want to go back and ask the person on the line what is going on. In the end, I did not ask, and I still work hard. The key is that the boss never regards you as one of their own, and abandoning the protagonist at any time is equivalent to selecting some geniuses in the sect and abandoning them at any time. Is this reasonable? There is no sufficient reason for all this, and I feel completely calm. I don't know, but I think my IQ has been manipulated. I usually act like I'm smarter than anyone else when doing tasks, but how come I'm no different from an idiot when it comes to this fundamental issue of right and wrong of who I work for and why? Does writing like this insult everyone's intelligence? Is it consistent with common sense and basic human nature? I have no complaints against those who bully you, accuse you, want to kill you, and attack your magic weapon at every turn. The master you recognize provides all kinds of overt and covert protection and support, allowing you to bask in the reputation of the master all the time outside. Outsiders line up to give you treasures, and enjoy all special treatment. No true feelings are shown at all. This is a white-eyed wolf character! Xianxia Xianxia, ​​is this the definition of Xiaxia? What is the definition and character traits of a hero? What should I do? I hope the author will review it In terms of writing skills, the text is passable. But the plot is too flat, without distinction of importance. If you look carefully at some insignificant plots, a lot of pen and ink are spent on trivial matters, and I don't know what I want to express. The total of these parts and the key plot battles and the like can actually be 1:1. This makes people feel like keeping a running account. At the same time, there is a lack of plot conflicts, whether it is the entanglement and struggle on the cognitive level about which side to be loyal to, personal last resort, and the risk and pressure of exposure. These actually have a lot of room for development. Instead of going to the journal to record everything that goes smoothly and you will definitely win the task, and search for materials. None of them are opponents, and they can beat the geniuses at any time. There are too many cool articles, and this old routine really doesn't make anyone happy anymore. In addition, the character dialogue is also very boring, and there is a lack of support from a third-person perspective. A good storyline must be concise and compact, with major events and plots driving the development of the main story. A story in which the main character has a smooth journey and a detailed upgrade story is too rudimentary. I think it is not easy for the author to code, so I sincerely provide the above suggestions, hoping to inspire the author's subsequent story arrangement and writing.

The writing is good, but the plot is not interesting because there are too many unreasonable things. First of all, let's consider why the protagonist's mind is so loyal to the Volo Sect. He is clearly surrounded by enemies from all sides. Now it seems that the Volo Sect is obviously more sinister, but he believes that the Volo Sect will deal with him properly in the end. Once again, the protagonist becomes the disciple of the head of Chenxu. The leader will definitely investigate him before that. Everyone knows that Chenxu has a treasure mirror that can be used for divination, but the protagonist's identity as a spy has not been exposed. Is the real person of the Fuluo sect really so confident that his own tricks can be compared to a mysterious treasure? With a real person's mind, he must think that the protagonist has rebelled, otherwise how could he not be discovered. And the protagonist was still laughing and joking after being reminded by the seal. The treasure mirror knew that there must be a secret treasure covering it, and the head thought it was Li's mysterious treasure. So how could Li not be surprised when he mentioned this matter to the head of the Li family in the next negotiation. Thirdly, the Liu family left the original sect and joined Chenxu, but the sect did not react much. The Liu family had a highly talented child, so they joined Chenxu anyway. The Liu family felt that the sect was too harsh and stingy, so they could negotiate further and directly change the sect openly. The sect actually agreed. It is extremely unreasonable. Aren't you afraid of relying on this to become a spy? Fourthly, the protagonist's cultivation is too smooth, he is all fluent, and his fighting skills are also very powerful. The golden finger is too big, and the protagonist's hard work cannot be seen.

I feel like all undercover stories have issues with their stance, and it's easy to get stuck

I have read a lot of fairy tale books, and I actually think your writing is very good, unconventional, and unlike some of the mass-produced garbage nowadays, which constantly travels through time and still retains memories, but ended up wearing it. The story has no use at all, and is just an occasional explanation of obscenity. Now I skip those time-travel ones when I see them. Why do I always write about time-travel when writing about fairy tales? You should stick with it, more people will definitely watch it. Your book is not the kind of book where the protagonist is full of aura and likes to show off at every turn. Nor is it the kind of book written like an elementary school student's anime, where the book is written as if it is a natural prodigy who understands conspiracies from birth. It is also not the kind of book where the protagonist deliberately finds reasons for killing people, so that the protagonist kills as a matter of course, and when others kill, he is the villain, and then he pretends to be cool. Finally, can you update two chapters every day?

The writing and story are pretty good, but the main character's undercover logic is a bit weird.

Hey, after flipping through more than 500 chapters, I can only say that the Volo sect knows how to raise dogs.

Come on, come on (ง •̀_•́)งKeep going! ! !

This author is a real person. Thousands of fans are worth it and he wrote more than 800 chapters.

Very well written. First of all, the title of the book determines that it is a battle between mysterious spirits, and the world view cannot be very large. The second is undercover. The protagonist is always bound and cannot be free and easy in cultivating immortals.

Come on, it's very good, the writing and plot are very good

Almost 2 million words, only 13 fans, and less than 30 comments. How do you persevere?

Don't you want to sign a contract? How can you persist in writing so much for free?

I can recommend it. I feel that the more I write, the better. I can see some shortcomings in the front, and I can see the author's progress. . Come on

Too verbose and tasteless.

You still have this score with this word count, hey

The writing style is what I like. Good luck to the author.

The style of this introduction reminds me of Dao Pi Jiuxiao 😁

6 I want to know which side I chose in the end

There are a lot of bloody plots, far-fetched

I hope there is no heroine, the story is too confusing

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Some things are unconventional and have their own ideas. But the undercover monthly report was a failure. The low-level monks did not get any useful information, so it can only be said to be useless. The undercover must have important information to risk being exposed to deliver information, just like Infernal Affairs Liu Jianming risked being discovered and sent the sentence "There is an insider to terminate the transaction." Moreover, high-level monks can sense powerful spiritual consciousness. The protagonist's performance in the Hall of Red Dust is quite poor. It is like having no professional training. You are the most important person as a ghost. You must have a strong psychological quality and cannot show it.