Legend of the Dragon King: Holy Sword User

I have only read the first few chapters, and will post my thoughts and suggestions after the reward The first point: From the content, we know that the author changed Tang Wulin into a female, but the protagonist didn't know it, and then he posted a message to be intimate with a person the protagonist thought was a man. It was as close as fencing. Although the protagonist said that he wanted to increase Tang Wulin's favorability, it was a bit too intimate (holding hands). , Forehead to forehead, hug/Although it is to cooperate with the fusion of martial arts, the protagonist does not hesitate whether it is appropriate...) I hope the author can understand the sense of distance when people get along, and it is recommended that people who cannot accept it skip this book Two: The author's writing style needs to be improved. The few chapters I have read feel a bit like a running story. The expressions and movements of the characters are single, and the dialogue between the characters is stiff and distorted when reading. I hope the author's writing style can be improved in the future Three: The details are not handled well enough. For example, the protagonist knows that his mother's surname is Tang and that his martial spirit is the Blue Silver King. When his father bought the Xuanshui Pill, he only thought that he bought it through the Soul Saint's connections and never thought about whether his family background was related to the Tang clan.

Review The book is good, with the setting of Xingyue, and the author is active. I always feel that the protagonist's personality is not clear enough (I know it is a writing problem), but he is too consistent with the group. Gu Yue's emotional line is unclear. If there are multiple female protagonists, pay attention to adding a little Tang Hao's scene later. The future pattern is not big. I recommend Demonic Abyss and Timeline Brawl Personal feelings It would be better to let Shrek be bombed. As for Yun Ming and Na'er's adoptive father and adopted daughter, the author has considered it himself. If he writes it, it will have more plot, but it will make people feel aggrieved (it will not be a problem if it is handled well) During the holidays, the group can write some things behind the original plot or the Xingyue world (not recommended too much), such as the demon invasion of the Yuanen family

emmm is terrible😰😰😰😰

Tang Wulin is transformed into a girl, not the protagonist who is transformed into a girl

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I am going to write a Dragon King Legend fan novel, the main theme is to destroy the Tang Sect, Shrek, and fight against Tang San and Abyss, the Holy Spirit Cult. I hope you can give me some suggestions. For example, on martial arts, Gu Yue and Na Na's affiliation, the protagonist's joining of forces (excluding Tang Sect and Shrek), whether to go to Shrek's school... And so on. I don't want to copy the original too much. Some fanfics just add a protagonist and write based on what the original story went through. I don't want that. Please listen, move your hands, and leave your wonderful suggestions.

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emmm Naer

You can point out any poisonous points or unreasonable points. This is my first time writing a novel, so I may have many problems. Or you can also suggest what soul skills you want the protagonist to have. It's difficult to write fan fiction, but it's even harder to write original work😒

When I saw Nianghua 50, I clicked, it was so fast, I collected it immediately ヾ(￣▽￣)

I don't understand why Legend of the Dragon King fans like to write Tang Wulin as a woman? Don't you think it's weird and disgusting?

Collect demon figures! dnd, DNF, some fantasy work, or a monster from a fantasy work... For the time being, how about 10 comments plus one more? 😰😰😰😰 I saw that no one voted for the recommendation vote 🤓 Update 10 is the maximum, but I guess it may be 2 to 3 hahaha.

The author should be a novice, the article is a bit new, and the various details are not handled very well, but for a novice author, it is still very good, as long as the details are slightly revised, for example, in the first few chapters, Na'er was directly brought home, and she was raised as a daughter without even asking if she had a basic family. . . Keep up the good work, the author. It would be great if you take care of the details.

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So, how many people have watched Legend of the Dragon King?

Do you readers have any novels in which Tang Wulin becomes a woman? I only found five.

The plot is a bit too awkward, and the protagonist is obviously smarter

Where is King Arthur's spear that shines in the end?

Blame it on me, I have been reading for more than ten years. I didn't even understand the novel, so I had to go back and reinvent it.

I feel that the protagonist should go to the World of the Divine Seal Throne instead of the Legend of the Dragon King. The protagonist's weapons, magic and attributes are more in line with the Divine Seal World, and he can also inherit the legacy of Electrolux as a son of light!

Tang Wulin is not a man?

Tang Wulin is a man. Author, it's not good for you to write like this, right?

Very good, but I have a question. I remember that Shrek Academy requires students to apply before the age of 13 (including 13). The protagonist is one year older than Tang Wulin, so doesn't he have to enter a year in advance? If not in advance, he will be over the age.

It feels intermittent, and many places are not clearly written.

In the past, I heard other people say that if the main character's name is the same as that of a friend, it would feel weird, but I didn't think anything of it and didn't really care. But now, when I look at this name, I always think of my friend's facial features. It's not about appearance, it's just... An old acquaintance, always makes me think of him, always awkward, out of character, that's it. But I read a little bit, and the writing is pretty good. Although I won't read it again, I will still keep this book. After all, I don't know what to do if the author publishes a new book. Although I can't read this one, I can take a look at it🐶💦 -------------------------- ----------------------- I shouldn't offend anyone by saying this. If I say anything wrong, please don't reply to me. After all, my heart is fragile and I may be sad for how long. But you can give me a like and let me know🐶💦 That's it, come on, author! ! ! ________________________________

Come on!

Stop barking. Illiterate people. 😅

The main character's name is the same as a friend of mine, hehehe