Seoul Storm 2002

The main plot is unclear and the text is not concise enough. There are a lot of background information on a lot of people in the first dozen chapters, which is unnecessary. When you encounter trouble, expand the character. If you don't encounter trouble, just have a name. In more than ten chapters, the protagonist is reborn in Seoul and is currently delivering food to lose weight... What's the goal? What about grand plans and great achievements? Or are you going to stick to farming? It doesn't matter, you have to have a goal. Things are so fast-paced now, and you can't keep people like this... Finally, writing a book is not easy, so come on, author!

Hope heroine Han Jiaren Li Fuzhen🙂🙂

Have you ever written a novel about the heroine Li Fuzhen? Auntie is 51 years old, and her figure, color and temperament are simply invincible She is really fair and beautiful

This woman can't stand it😁

By the way, the heroine, Samsung's little princess Lee Yoon-hee, is also okay. It's a pity that the monster committed suicide.

The latest chapter has begun to appear locked, either because of strict review or not. . . Forget it, it doesn't matter where you write it. Look and cherish it.

The protagonist's money has been increasing, but his strength has not improved. He is completely a loser. He has founded so many companies and is involved in so many transactions. There is no security measure. He can run around alone and even eat in a chaotic place without fear of being beaten. Especially later, when a manager of a random company negotiates with the protagonist, his status is not improved at all, and it feels like the protagonist is completely divorced from the plot. The protagonist's role is to unfold the plot. The protagonist's interests have nothing to do with it. There is no improvement in social status. I wonder why the protagonist does so many things? In addition to the rewriting of history in the subsequent plot, the protagonist is like the audience in the plot.

Don't write about SNSD, it's all bad. There are many contemporaries of SNSD, so let's change it.

Collect it first and look at it later when it becomes fatter. Since it is a chaebol and it is about business, I hope the author can control it. After all, there are too few Korean entertainment themes.

No, even if a woman co-authored it, Monk Wen will be confiscated. . . .

Come on, author, I'm optimistic about you

The narrative of the novel is too wordy, with typos and sentences that don't make sense, and too much introduction. It feels like an expository essay... The author's writing style is immature, and it can be seen that he is new to writing, and there are problems with the plot logic.

What does the author want to express? Don't really understand? The protagonist has memories and business routes in time travel, but he just lacks the first pot of gold, so he started betting on the World Cup, but the investment company he established later was not his own? Then it's BOE and AG Esports, so what's the point of writing about China Entertainment and Korean Entertainment? I really don't understand. Isn't it good to collect American wool at this time in 2002?

This book is both emotional and ambiguous. It disgusts the harem party and the single-female protagonist. The content starts off well, but later on the plot is exaggerated. You can write a novel without a female protagonist better than this one. This book can be used as an exercise for the author, and at least it can build up a character.

The pace is slow. I know the author wanted to set the stage, but it was a bit long and draggy. Minimize the presence of irrelevant personnel as much as possible. There is also a closer connection. For example, at the beginning, I had no idea why the protagonist wanted to learn racing, and it was very stiff and embarrassing. After reading more than ten chapters, I realized that the target was a little princess. There is a lot of racing knowledge in it that is completely unnecessary. It is enough to advance the plot. For example, one chapter briefly introduces the learning of racing, and then just grind the number of times and meet the little princess. The first part was fine, but later on when I encountered the racing scenes, I just skipped and watched them.

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I don't know if the author has an outline. If you're writing about Korean entertainment, just pretend I didn't say anything. The pig's trotter's system memory is read and should be returned to China for development. Anyway, there are no family members in South Korea. At that time, it was very easy to go back to China to go to college, and the state provided policy subsidies. It's easy to become a big boss with system memory. In South Korea, apart from being able to make friends with a few girl group girls, career bottlenecks will not be very high.

I think it's better to let the male protagonist develop his career and marry the daughter of a chaebol. The chaebol family's struggle for power, love, hate, love, business, and so on are also very interesting to watch, such as Korean dramas K2, The Heirs, The World of High Society, and Penthouse. Authors who all describe the story of chaebols can learn from them. In the entertainment industry, you can also write about celebrities as lovers, chaebols are very popular. Because many Korean entertainment novels write about Korean stars or idols, and few even write about actors. I hope this book can be written from adifferent angle.

I finally read a book that's not all about idols, Korean entertainment? Can Korean Entertainment's Best Actor learn from this? That one was written too quickly. But if I want to write something like that, I don't know if I can release it. Come on, author!

I was reborn in 2002, then around 07 to 09, I became more capable and the girls got older. In Korea, that place is not a cool group.

If a real man wants a harem with a single heroine in his career, like the Black Pharaoh, the woman will jump on it.

The future should be a company of cj plus kakao

Watch ads to support you🙂

So is it the main variety show, or acting, singing and dancing?

If you don't understand, just ask, do the Chinese living in South Korea speak Mandarin when I saw Chapter 2 today?

Very good. Come on 👍

Why does the character's name sound so uncomfortable when read backwards?

Use less commas, it's not coherent at all

I feel like the author's writing is pretty good, and the slow pace in the early stages is understandable. Come on!