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The plot is super great, I'm a fan, ah ah, my wife is so awesome＼(*T▽T*)／

The story is good, the writing is smooth, and the early foreshadowing makes people want to read it. It should be a grand and exciting story! If we want to talk about minor flaws, we can only say that the logic is somewhat poor in some places. For example, in the homework part, is it a normal mother-daughter conversation? Or in the King of Hell part, is Zhu Ji's behavior inconsistent? Is it consistent with his little sense of justice to ask a question rashly in front of such a profound King of Hell? Taking a little girl to see such a King of Hell? For example, in the part about Xiao Yao, he knows how to change the subject, and Xiao Yao's inexplicable last name... Bai Suzhen is a white snake, and Xiao Qing is a green snake. There is no need to deliberately add a surname to the Xiao Yao, right? Flaws do not hide the good points, the author continues to work hard and releases updates so that we can see the wonderful follow-up!

Here it is, the third day. I've been busy these days, so I'm sorry for the delay. Let's review the book first The title of the book, uh, no judgment, it's a bit confusing to me. I can't tell what the story is from the title of the book. But I don't often watch women's videos, and I don't know what the readers of women's videos think So let's just talk about the content I can't find fault with the author's writing style, and the occasional typo is harmless. The coherence is very good. The problem lies in the plot and writing layout. The author was so preoccupied with promoting the plot that he forgot to explain it. It can be seen from the details of the dialogue that the author wants to slowly lay out the setting from the dialogue, but you have to be clear, otherwise it will only be inferior. Settings must be laid out first and then used, otherwise it will create a confusing look. For example, in the first chapter, the talking snake, you pointed out in the article "the talking snake", then the readers will be interested in why the snake can talk, including the subsequent transformation, etc., Which all highlight that this is a world that is inconsistent with the real world. But looking further back, until Chapters 6 and 7, there is no detailed description of the worldview and power system, which is wearing down the reader's little patience Slowly revealing the worldview through dialogue is like breaking the worldview into several fragments. Every time the reader encounters a fragment, he has to recall the previous fragments and piece them together, which will cause a huge mental burden. Setting is something that is used to understand specific things and events, rather than something that needs to be understood slowly In terms of the big plot and writing style, it is obviously closer to the TV series, which is a bit cumbersome. In fact, the highlight of the first few chapters is that Xiaoyan is obviously an ordinary person, but he shows extraordinary abilities and talents, so the others should be reduced. Then my mother died and she wanted revenge. The tenth chapter of the main plot was released. The protagonist's reaction was always very dramatic, and the sadness was not obvious. There was no plot or introduction to deepen the relationship between the mother and my mother in the first few chapters, and the death scene also seemed empty and unappealing In fact, the dialogue between you and me is something that the screenwriter has to add in the process of making the TV series. That is his job, not that you write the article. When writing, you must focus on the key points for the readers, and the author's third-person expression is particularly important. Let's talk about the large prologue. If there are 10 reasons for not signing the contract, these things account for at least 6. It is recommended to release them in the form of extras later. It will not have any effect on the main plot, but will greatly damage the perception This is the problem I can point out. You can slowly understand it. I won't say more. I hope the author can take this to go further 🙏

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I haven't read much yet. What does the title mean? Why does the Crystal of Life come into being and why it breaks? What are the consequences if the Crystal of Life is destroyed... As expected, I'd better keep chasing it🧐

A new day has begun, come on.

Your writing is smooth and you have a very good future, so keep going!

Your wife writes well, keep it up (ง •̀_•́)ง

Good evening, dear author, it is very hard for you to update articles every day. As a student, you have to do homework and update articles every day.

The sauce suddenly bubbled up, and I came with a set of hot pancakes and fruit, tofu curd, fried dough sticks, soy milk and fried dumplings. I looked at the big book and gave the author a big call. I asked for a mutual visit by the way, ^_^

This is my first time reading a female channel. The writing style is four words, flowing and flowing, but anyone who wants to calm down and read will probably be attracted by the foreshadowing in the first few chapters, right? As for the shortcomings, I personally don't think so. I would give it 9.5 Out of 10, and deduct 0.5 In the hope that I can keep writing the book 😌😌

Every sentence is golden and jade, every word is fluent, and the language of the whole text is gorgeous and breathtaking!