Your Chat Group? No! Be Mine!

Say something 1. Many friends say it is a bit messy. Because I am the author, I wrote it according to my own thoughts. Although I also have feelings about it, I feel that it is generally okay. (Of course, since many book friends said it, it must be there, but it is difficult for me to notice it myself.) 2. About the previous Xiao Yan. I don't know if anyone has noticed it, but that city is called Fenglin City, which is full of fire. Originally, I wanted to write something related to Phoenix, and the character performance of Xiao Yan originally planned to be written was different from the current one, but because of the first point, this branch line was quickly ended, resulting in some sudden changes in the protagonist's personality. 3. About Zhang Chulan This is up to me. I really don't like Zhang Chulan's character. 4. About the original group owner Get this person quickly because if the chat group upgrades or the group members increase, it is inevitable that the group owner will pretend to be a wave. In order to avoid this, we can only let him get a quick lunch. 5. Sentence Breaking Some long sentences are indeed a bit difficult to pronounce, so I try to break them up as much as possible. 6. Protagonist character A genius with a strong background, calm enough, and an online IQ. (Of course, the writing may not be enough to describe it, but I will move closer to this aspect.) 7. There will never be green plots and only ambiguous affairs and giving away girls. (I have read several books recently, all of which are like this. I am absolutely disgusted.)

How should I put it? It feels like the writing is too messy, with a bang here and there, especially some chapters that have no connection with the next chapter. It gives me a headache to read, and the personalities of other characters are emm. Of course, you are the author, and you must have some private information and use your own knowledge to write it. I won't talk about it. There is also the protagonist. I still don't feel like a protagonist at all 😅

I feel that the biggest advantage is that it satirizes the diaosi protagonists in chat room novels who become group leaders and use their intelligence advantages to pretend to be magical and gain benefits. It illustrates a point that other group members should not be regarded as fools. Compared with those frustrating group leaders who have no knowledge and correct mentality, famous characters in other worlds have superior experience, mentality and other qualities, and it is impossible to be deceived by such group leaders. I don't see any advantages in other aspects. The protagonist is a second-generation man with someone above him. He is dealing with a loser who has no brains, no experience, and a bad mentality. He relies on the background to take away a lot of authority. This kind of victory has no suspense at all. It is just adults bullying children; characters like Ye Chen and Xiao Yan have been added to the world of the protagonist. , Seemingly intended to satirize the plots of some fantasy novels, but instead made me feel that the structure of the story was too scattered and I had no desire to read on. The protagonist himself is undoubtedly the number one in the group regardless of his brain power and backstage. He is simply a Long Aotian. Everyone in the chat group is kneeling and licking him. How can he completely crush him in other worlds? I really can't appreciate it; the depiction of characters in other worlds contains a lot of private information, which deviates from the original setting; as a novel with chat groups as its main selling point, the story is often written separately from the chat group in large paragraphs, in order to emphasize over and over again how awesome and smart the protagonist is, which feels like the priorities are reversed; in the end, as other readers commented In that way, if you want to watch the protagonist conquer everything in different worlds, there are a lot of Long Aotian novels in the Zhutian genre that you can read. There is no need to read chat group novels. The main point of this type of novel is to interact with people in different worlds to change the original plot, rather than an invincible protagonist taking the initiative to go to other worlds and conquer everything.

If I have to say it, the author's writing style is actually not too bad, but it is not too good either. This kind of writing style can only be regarded as a niche audience, and it tends to be a combination of classical Chinese and novice prose. If you want to understand it, it is basically impossible if you are not an old bookworm. After all, most paragraphs need to be understood by yourself. Otherwise, if you just read the white text, you won't be able to see much, and it will feel very confusing. If you want to truly understand this book, you must have your own understanding and interpretation before you can truly understand it. The author's writing style is equivalent to a poisonous point that is not a poisonous point. And when you read it, you can't think deeply about it. You can only understand it superficially. Otherwise, you will become more and more confused and confused as you read.

The author is so slow to update! One chapter is too short!

After reading Chapter 8, I can summarize in one sentence: If the male protagonist is not a direct disciple of the Taoist ancestor, his behavior and behavior are quite reasonable. Assuming the identity of a direct disciple of the Tao Ancestor, what the male protagonist does is really not worthy of publicity. In terms of magnanimity, magnanimity, and character, which one is worthy of this status? What are you doing? The kitten is stingy. Can you be more generous?

The plot of the main world is a bit messy and too complicated. Although it seems to have a main line, it still feels like a hammer here and there. I hope the author can smooth it out. The second is the chat group, which has no effect on the protagonist. The second is the group chat. The leader's confrontation, in fact, now is the best time to defeat the group leader. The protagonist is a late-stage Jindan boss, and all the authority in his hand has been transferred to him, and the group leader is still a mortal who has just started to practice martial arts. If we don't deal with it now, why not wait until the future group leader grows up? Just fatten yourself up.

I see people keep saying that the protagonist is an aborigine. If he is not an aboriginal Taoist ancestor, how could he be favored by him🙄, a time traveler? It's good if I don't praise you.

A little suggestion, don't write so deliberately in many things. Maybe it's your writing technique, but I think most people still won't feel comfortable reading it. After all, it's too deliberate. ——008

It feels quite strange. Originally, I just told an old man in the comment area that this book is already out of date, so why bother with it? I think it makes sense. However, this is my first time writing a book, and I still feel a little bit unhappy. The first is why so many people say that the protagonist is a descendant of Taozu, a direct descendant of the Supreme Being, or something like that. I never said it from beginning to end. The protagonist is just a direct disciple of Taishang Dao Zong. He has something to do with Dao Zu, but it's really not that big. The Taishang Taoist Sect is just an ordinary Taoist sect. It is not much different from Jiu Shu's Maoshan Sect, but it is closer to the Taoist Ancestor. Second, there are too many conspiracies and tricks? ? I don't know how you can tell. Except for the first few chapters, in order to show that the protagonist and the supporting characters have IQs, the protagonist made a statement in the group, which is a hidden weapon in the words, but I also first let the "group leader" show hostility towards the protagonist before writing it. Also, the death of the "group leader" was because I felt that I couldn't write this character well, but it was just a plot kill, and it didn't seem to have anything to do with the protagonist. The third reason is that the protagonist is stingy, but if I write a magic weapon and give it away for free for free, someone will definitely say that it is a gift to the boy, and the pills given at the beginning are not low in value to Yue Buqun and others. In the end, the protagonist replaces the original group leader. I originally wrote it as a pleasant point, but it seems to have become a poisonous point. I am not sure about this. Is it because I cannot express this feeling with my writing skills, or there is something wrong with my intention.

It looks good. I prefer this kind of Tao Xin type of Tao Xin, which is Dao Xin Liu. I have a suggestion. The protagonist doesn't have a magic weapon yet, and hopes to have a natal magic weapon. The natal magic weapon likes Tai Chi diagrams, jade ruyi and the like, but doesn't like swords and other weapons! Finally, I just hope there won't be a female protagonist!

After reading the previous article, I always felt that something was wrong. Yipin realized that this was a second-generation rich man who came from the same company to suppress poor people. Why are you so distorted in your outlook on life and bullying others with integrity?

Although the protagonist of this novel has an online IQ, he is an indigenous person. Native, native, native, native, native, damn! Goodbye, bye!

Logically speaking, the author did not indicate the relationship between the Sanqing and the Taoist sect of your world. First, the level of the Sanqing is too high and this world cannot bear it. Secondly, the Sanqing will not incarnate into other worlds at will. People are only in their own true master world, and countless other big and small worlds are projections. How can he help you when you burn incense and synaesthesia? The world has its own operation, and they cannot interfere at will. Secondly, Sanqing has countless disciples and descendants. Are you their favorite child? If you want to fool us sophisticated readers, you can do it even casually. 😏

Why do you all like to wash this Nalan Yanran 😴

No more, I ran away. As promised, this is the Dao Ancestor's sect? Either ignore the group leader, or just kill him directly. You are so strong and you are still scheming, and you don't understand what you are scheming. The logic doesn't make sense, and so does the supporting character. Are the supporting characters so sinister? As promised in the big world, if you don't practice well, it's just like a lunatic. I ran away after reading Chapter 10

It's too messy to read. Given the background of the protagonist, I should just ask Daozu to kill the system and the chat group and be done with it. Of course, by writing it like this, it's over, and it doesn't reflect the protagonist's strength or anything.

This is basically taking away the energy and opportunity of the time traveler. In addition, I don't want to repay the karma. I use something like the Nuwa Temple to mention poems to kill the time traveler. There is no need to repay the karma. I don't need to tell you how Hongyun died.

The protagonist is just a native, there is no sense of involvement, bye bye

Does the author actually have an outline? The part about the Chen family's break-up of engagement feels like the author wrote about Dou Po's break-up of engagement and thought I'd do one too, so he wrote about break-up of engagement. Halfway through, he felt that it needed to be fresh and refined, different from others, and then he created something weird 😰

The protagonist is actually a native? ? ? ? ? ?

There is no sense of immersion and the plot is not interesting.