Sleeping and Dreaming During the Day

Take a look at what other people have written. If I hadn't taken a look at your advertisement, I would have just left.

Martial arts are inseparable from Jianghu, Jianghu is in wine, in dreams, and in the heart. You can't tell anything from this introduction 😥. This kind of gameplay is only suitable for authors with many fans. Don't be so fancy for newcomers.

I saw the advertisement, clicked in to take a look, and after reading the first chapter, I was curious to know why the author wanted to write an online novel, and what kind of novel the author wanted to write? What is the purpose of writing a novel? Let's not talk about the above three points. After reading three chapters I feel that this book is quite difficult to sign. The current average number of words in a chapter at Qidian is three thousand or even two thousand words. A chapter of ten thousand words is not easy to read. Moreover, I feel that the writing style is not grounded enough compared to online articles, and not enough compared to literary works. It is concise and smooth, and the character's personality cannot be revealed in the dialogue. One person often talks at length, and the other person says several sentences in a row, but the purpose is unclear, but I don't know what to say, or in other words, I don't know why this person said this. It feels quite tortured for me to read. However, the author does not need to care too much about other people's evaluations. He writes his own and others evaluate other people's.

Close the door tightly, don't let them escape! ! ! 😜😜😜

I feel like I could consider revising the title and introduction of the book. At first glance, it's a bit difficult to understand what the story of your novel is about, and it will be harder for readers to be attracted to it. Personal suggestion

It's from an advertisement. I suggest the author change the beginning. I can't stand it at the beginning 😰

Please support the new book! Please collect it! Please read it! Thank you very much, everyone will make a fortune! !

Thank you to the very hard-working author! Already 400,000 words! Improvements: Don't make long paragraphs. It's better to have shorter paragraphs. Even short paragraphs are fine. I'm a mobile phone user. It's so tiring to read long paragraphs!

Your introduction and Chapter 1 are too bad, they are not the same level. Don't believe those who support it, you don't have that talent, and you haven't even done a good job of segmenting your characters. And like poems, they are usually written like this when they are driven by the climax. You have nothing and you just copy a bunch of random words. It will be the same even if you copy 100,000 words. I couldn't stand watching half of the first picture, it was too ugly. It really hurts your eyes, you brief me. First of all, think about what you want to write, not just something vague. There must be something you want or something you are pursuing. Vainness is the most rubbish design. Then turn over. Your writing on the first page is really bad. You directly introduce the protagonist at the beginning, and then what you are going to do now must be purposeful, just like doing a task, do you understand? The most plain writing method. The main reason is that you have no fans. If you write so poorly, no one will read it. If you have fans, even if you write shit, people will still eat it.

The title of the book is too short. Can't see the selling point and can't arouse interest. It is recommended to change the title to a longer one. If you want a shorter title, just change it after you have achieved results.

I'm here to help out 🤓

I wrote like this before, but as far as I'm concerned, the introduction and title of the book must be attractive, so that people can read it... I really admire my brother, 58 chapters and 390,000 words, awesome

From the title to the introduction, it's all about The Riddler. I can't tell what it means or what I want to express. What's the point of attracting people?

Great support from the author, Jiangjiang is here, I have read it, and I can't sleep!

It's majestic, unconventional, and well written!

There were too many settings at the beginning. Now Qidian readers have no patience. Qidian readers tend to prefer vernacular texts. You should cater to the market.

The literary talent is very good. It reminds me of the first novel "Water Margin" that I read. Come on😊, I hope you write better and better!

Great author, please study the three golden chapters of the great masters.

People are in the Jianghu, walking around, if they meet someone destined...

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The explanation of the main character's name in the introduction is too secondary. I feel like I wanted to bury a hook in the introduction and then the literary youth syndrome broke out. Then I added an exclamation mark + three ellipses represented by periods, plus a weird poem, and the chapter names also have to be in contrast. Are you studying Journey to the West? First of all, when you don't have fans, shouldn't you optimize the title and introduction of the book? Otherwise, how can others have the desire to read the book? It's not unreasonable for the three golden chapters to be the most circulated. Look at what you have written. After clicking to read, it will be a critical opening. It is a messy poem and it is still so long. Text layout is very important. An author can write such a long paragraph, and when I get excited, there are small poems in the middle. When I read the fourth chapter, I didn't want to read it. I don't know what your book is about and there are so many small issues. You are really not good at this. Your writing skills are weak and your writing is young. It is really difficult to explain in one sentence. I suggest you scan the rankings first to see what others have written. By the way, are you an adult? Do all the surnames in this book have to be compound?

Brother doesn't seem to want to sign a contract?

Nowadays we really don't have the patience to read books This is your new book, does it have so many words in one chapter? ? ? ? Other people's 400,000 words have hundreds of chapters, but your 400,000 words only have more than 60 chapters, so I just stopped reading it. . . Because I have been reading novels for almost 20 years, I understand this very well. Basically there is no back. . . . It's either a eunuch or an anticlimax. .

I came in and took a look after seeing the advertisement 🙂 If I have to say, the beginning is critical. To be honest, after reading so many novels, the beginning is so long and the whole page is a poem. , You can read the beginnings of many great movies, which are directly about a specific event, with scenes, characters, and conflicts, and generally the beginnings are very exciting, and others will be interested in continuing to read them. You are the kind of person who makes other people dizzy as soon as they open it, and is still dizzy after patiently turning the second page.

No, are you also cuckolding? Recommended in cuckold books? ? ? ? ? Isn't it so blatant to write this kind of thing now? It's no less than exposing it outdoors? ? ? ? ?