I Have Someone in the Underworld

The various settings, background, protagonist's identity, etc. At the beginning are not clearly explained, and the things obtained in the palace gate and the characters of the palace gate are also very vague. This very beginning is very discouraging to readers. There is a lot of room for improvement in the author's skills.

There is no specific description when the protagonist obtains some skills, props, magic weapons and the like, and it seems very abrupt when used later. In addition, the communication and interaction between the protagonist and other characters feel childish and unreal. And every time the protagonist does something, his next action is very hasty. For example, when he decided to go to the Hongxiao Forbidden Land, he just trusted the voice of the Zi Mansion. When I saw it, I felt that the protagonist and the Zi Mansion had not established a deep trust relationship. He also participated in the Lanque Pavilion selection very hastily. He did not analyze the various stakes beforehand. He just went in because he wanted to fight a long-haired monster that suddenly came out, which made me feel that the protagonist's character is very immature. I haven't seen much at the moment. If there is any relevant explanation later, please ignore it. Just pretend I didn't say it, but I feel like I can't see too much behind it. Purely personal opinions, for reference only, welcome to discuss.

The author's imagination is still good. For example, the law of the underworld is quite interesting.

Not a single comment~ TT