Start by Treating Naruto

Haha, when I saw that Scorpion made his parents into puppets, it was okay to feel guilty. His parents were killed in the war by Konoha White Fang. Those two puppets, father and mother, were made of wood by Scorpion himself. They were not human puppets at that time.

The protagonist is eleven years old and hasn't opened his eyes yet. Are you sure he's not a loser? He also said he was a slightly worse genius than Neji. . . Also, Hinata opened her eyes at the age of four or five, and she still needs the help of the protagonist to open her eyes at the age of ten?

This is not a personal attack. I hope the author can read it and give him some suggestions. I haven't read this book yet. I'm just giving some suggestions to the author's first two books (K Naruto and Conan fan). To be honest, I really like reading the articles written by the author. Because many of the ideas are very interesting. For example (the self-created martial arts ninjutsu in Naruto: The Strongest Master, and the Kawara Serum in Conan.) And it can also be seen that in order not to write down. The number of cheats given to the protagonist is limited. The main opinion is that I hope the author can think carefully about the broken parts (especially the parts with a large time span) and whether the time to enter the next plot is correct. Is there anything left unfinished? If you plan to write the plots in this chapter in reverse order in the next plot, you must make an outline. Don't finish it. You haven't filled in the holes dug in the last chapter. There are two things that are special about Naruto; One is the second time when the protagonist became famous, during the Third Ninja War, the most exciting part at the end seems to have been skipped directly. The second part of the scribbling about Nine Tails is even more outrageous. It jumps directly to 12 years later. If you plan to, you can supplement it in the form of memories (to be honest, you will dissuade a lot of people if you do this. The reverse chronological method feels very high-level in literature, but if you write an Internet article like this, it is wrong.) But you haven't written much at all. What happened in the Nine-Tails Rebellion? How the protagonist group was born, I was confused until the end. In Conan, the highlights are all there. You are about to get the second Yayuyu serum, you have got all the treasure boxes, and you will go directly to the next story. (Are you going to let us make up this part of the plot?) The early stage was okay, but in the later stage, there was no transition between some cases, and it went directly to the next story inexplicably. There are more than one or two of these. I hope the author can improve it later. To be honest, your writing has great potential and your ideas are very interesting. But I hope you have an outline when writing. You can add it at any time when you come up with interesting plots. Every time before writing new content, take a look at the content of the previous chapter and your own outline to see if the new chapter is connected properly and whether the new content deviates from your expected outline. Don't let yourself go as you write.

The subject matter is very interesting, but it's a pity that the author's protagonist who cultivates immortality and possesses a first-grade spiritual elixir and a third-grade divine tree is too dramatic. Naruto's biggest mistake was to waste the Nine-Tails chakra at the beginning. While looking down on Bagua Kongzhang, I still want to learn it. It feels like it will end up being just showing off for the sake of showing off. If you don't like immortal novels and heavens, just leave. It's a pity that expectations are too high

Curing diseases should be quite interesting. In the past, I often saw people getting stronger through cooking.

This book is so great, it will become a classic when it is finished. 😍 Come on and update! 😎

The protagonist, a man, was pregnant and gave birth to a child. In terms of immersion, I really couldn't get into it, so I slipped away. Finally, about the medical system, the protagonist must at least know medical skills, at least medical ninjutsu. The result is nothing. If he is sick, the system treats him. After the system treats him, he rewards the protagonist. Is this system sure that he is not his biological father?

Come on, the writing is very different and very good. I really like this type of book. The writing is very creative. I think this book is still very good~(o´ω`o)ノ

Come on, come on, you are the fattest

The more I look at it, the more something is wrong Naruto spends money to play a prank? Then why did he eat rice with ginseng sand? Why drink expired milk? When he was a child, he was basically beaten and scolded, accompanied by hunger I can only say that it is very poisonous, this book is not suitable for me, let me express my opinion, it is indeed a poison every day

Naruto did not destroy Konoha, proving that he was indeed brainwashed by the kaleidoscope genjutsu.

I was assigned to Kakashi's class and then failed to pass, so I can't become a ninja? It is recommended that the game be changed. This game is too illogical. It is purely for the sake of creating contradictions. It is too deliberate and lowers the character's IQ and is illogical. It is recommended that the game be changed.

I thought I was learning medical ninjutsu from Pig's Knuckle and working at Konoha Hospital, but it turned out to be a funny joke for the author.

Why is it that men are so estranged from pregnancy and childbirth?

What are the benefits of portraying the protagonist as such a low-quality person? All kinds of disdain for other people's Bagua Kongzhang, even with expressions I'm very curious about the author's opinion of what the quality of a person who goes to other people's homes all kinds of contempt for other people's homes is like? I only read a few of them before being dissuaded by various logical inconsistencies Let's not talk about whether to be a ninja or not. How can you be sure that you can maintain your quality of life after not being a ninja? Medical ninjas are also ninjas. If you are not a ninja, how can you enter the system? Anyway, I didn't read it later, so I don't know how the author got it right.

It's for women, and the settings are boring and weak.

When I was a child

I am very curious as to why the caged bird did not trigger the system's disease diagnosis. Couldn't this be regarded as a foreign object entering the eye and causing impairment of eye function?

This book is very beautifully written. I recommend everyone to read it. I can't be blind alone.

The protagonist is completely insane and has too many unreasonable and deliberately funny lines

The author's logic is confusing and his words are confusing. I couldn't stand it after reading two chapters.

In more than 130 chapters, the protagonist picked up the scroll left by Elder Uchiha when he was capturing White Zetsu. Wasn't this scroll accidentally dropped by Elder Uchiha when he first encountered White Zetsu? At least judging from the previous notes, I don't understand Bai Jue. How come I know so much about the contents of the scroll that I dropped before?

It feels like the time is so messed up. Pigfoot, who was one year ahead of Naruto, just graduated, and Naruto took the exam? Also, according to the plot, Naruto has failed the graduation exam many times and repeated the grade??

The more I write, the less interesting it becomes. The first dozen or so chapters were a little interesting but then they stopped being interesting. It tended to be ordinary and mediocre.

What did the author write? The protagonist can't cure the disease, so the system can. It's boring.

I felt so awkward after watching two of them. Is there anyone else who feels the same as me?

No one in the system wants to release the caged bird. The protagonist just likes to be the clan's dog.

This book must be popular. Please give me a recommendation vote first.

A good book is very interesting. If possible, it would be better to give the protagonist more ninjutsu skills, such as Eight Gate Dunjia. Come on, two monthly passes are given to you, I hope you will continue to work hard 👍👍👍

Chapter 10: Eat the fruit and see how much nonsense you have written? Think you wrote it interestingly?