Great Quarrel

Well, I took a rough look at it. It's a subject that I don't often come into contact with. I'll give a little review as an outsider. I feel that the writing is pretty good. At least people can understand what I'm writing. However, the beginning is a bit bland. I suggest you add some spice and make it a little fierce.

Let me talk about two points. First, the plot should be abbreviated. For example, the first two chapters should be summarized in three words, and it is time to leave. Second, the emotional foreshadowing is somewhat lacking. For example, in the second chapter, I suddenly shed tears.