Extraordinary Journey

There are quite a few problems. 🤔 On the one hand, segmentation! The most important thing! Segmentation! First of all, your article is in the style of a Western fantasy, so the name is destined to be long or convoluted, and the stacking of large paragraphs of text will make it annoying to read and make people unwilling to read on. The first chapter is about this problem. You have to learn how to deal with what the characters say. (I mentioned this in the specific part of the article) Secondly, the writing is too fluid and dry, and many places lack necessary polish, or the polish is not in place. Furthermore, switching the perspective, this is related to the previous point, because your writing is not very good, which leads to poor transitions in some places. (It is also mentioned in specific places.) Many of the questions are basic questions made by novices. The first one is easy to explain, but the following ones can only be seen and practiced by yourself. Especially the plot issues. Finally, the introduction should highlight a little bit what the real core of your story is. It also needs to be divided into sections, otherwise it will be really hard to watch in one large group.

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Very wonderful work! Collected permanently! Take your time and watch! Come on update! Welcome to visit us and give us advice!

I'm so envious of you guys who have so many votes...

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I really like this kind of western novel, but I have never tried it. It's well written, keep up the good work!

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Very well written, bookmarked!