Tokyo Dreamers Starts with a Love Game

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It's the same progress as my book, but why are there so many people in your comment area? I'm jealous 😆 Come and learn from each other.

The author is great, there is still a lot of pure love 😓

It's well written, the text is very out-of-the-box, and the basic skills are very solid~ You will know after reading the first chapter that you are a veteran. But I just felt that in terms of setting, I didn't think about the main line to follow So after reading the first chapter, I still didn't see the Nanya people's big goal. But I don't understand light novels either. I'm an amateur.

The writing style is really good. Chapter 2 is quite concise and clear at the beginning. I think some of the writing is complicated and confusing. This is very well written. I feel that the writing is good, but the plot may need to be improved a little bit.

Participating in the essay collection will not take off directly 😏

This book is different from other books. I think the writing style and emotion are deeper. It seems that the author has something to pursue. Good book, keep up the good work

There is no system... There is no system. Can the male protagonist withstand it? Without a system, can the male protagonist avoid being beaten by kneeling in seconds when faced with the difficulties faced by the suitors of beauties? Without a system, is the hero's family a wealthy family? Without a system, have you ever seen a man who can't capsize? When beauties attack the male protagonist, isn't it easy for him to be stabbed to death? There is no system. If the male protagonist copies a copy of the official document, is his brain a memory card?

The writing is very delicate, I love it 🌹

It's beautiful and doesn't look like a novice writer at all.