Hidden Disaster

To be honest, I was quite surprised. The writing is quite to my liking. (Now I have reached the point where I will abandon the book as long as the characters do not fit what I want, the plot is unreasonable, and the three views expressed do not suit me) It is true that there are routines (such as the fat teammate, but there is no sister role anyway), but the advantage is that the writing is not as jerky as other newcomers. The rhythm is okay, not too fast, but I feel like I may have seen more fast-paced games, so the rhythm is a little slow at the moment, but it's better than too fast. In addition, the part about the fat man hiding also seems to depict the characters. Of course, some people may find it a bit redundant now. As far as I am concerned, it can be refined a little more appropriately. I rarely watch it now. I find it too difficult to satisfy my appetite. I hope that the subsequent plot can keep it exciting while still having twists and turns. That would be great. I am totally fine with it being a refreshing novel. From what you said, it seems that you don't have many manuscripts. I don't know if you are a student or someone who has entered the society. Writing articles requires perseverance. Although I don't know exactly what you are writing for, if you can maintain good-quality updates, I feel that my investment is not in vain. I have also collected the book. I will give you some recommendation votes tomorrow. I hope you will continue to work hard (´-ω-`)

Seeds

People who come in, whether you read the book or not, please give us some opinions. Working alone is really hard. Tell me all your weird and creative abilities. No matter what it is, it will be adopted by the author at his discretion If you have any other opinions or if there are any bugs in the book, you can mention them. At least let me know that the books I wrote are read by living people.

The books have been cut and all the manuscripts have been sent out.

The introduction is not attractive. It is better to describe the protagonist's opportunities or what will happen in the future.

It's only four chapters, so it's just a silly advertisement. Wait until there are dozens of chapters before we talk about it.

After reading it, there are a little few chapters. If there are more chapters, I will comment on them carefully.