I Can Travel Between Different Worlds

After seeing more than 60 chapters, I want to say a few words. The rest of the writing is good, but there is one thing that the author has consciously suppressed the protagonist from the beginning. He only talks about traveling through the game world. Players can only gain a few hundred experience by hunting monsters and killing monsters in a month. In this way, they set how to upgrade and exchange various information with the players. I found spiritual liquid as a material, and I felt a lot of things, but the improvement in strength was negligible compared to the protagonist. It took more than 60 chapters to reach the first level of Qi training, and there were 9 levels in Qi training. Brother, and the spiritual liquid is so awesome that it can improve the player. Can't the protagonist use it to improve it? Why not use it. What a good setting and writing, but it suppresses the protagonist too hard. No wonder you are said to be so watery.

First: The plot is bland and lacks an eye-catching plot. The overly bland plot is like a running account. You can write some but not more. A plot with a twist is needed to promote the story. Second: Regardless of priority, 80% of novels about cultivating immortals describe martial arts. The reader's first impression is of the world of immortality. When writing about the world of martial arts, you can write about it, but you must not write too much, because readers will not want to read it. Third: There are a lot of typos in the article, and the author sends it without checking it after typing it. There really is no attitude that an author should have. Fourth: The writing style is not enough, and the descriptive text is repetitive and redundant, for fear that readers will not understand it. You are writing a book. It may be a little difficult for a novice to make the words concise and beautiful without losing expression. But you cannot describe the whole text. This is a novel. The core of the novel lies in the interaction of characters, the dialogue, the psychological changes, and the twists and turns of the plot. Fifth: The progress of cultivating immortality is impressive. The average of one hundred chapters is "one level of Qi training", which is really sorry for my own qualifications and cheats. If he was not a time-traveler, he would have already established a foundation, and it was his time-travel identity that was holding him back. "Han Li" was moved by the speed of one hundred chapters and one level. Finally, someone is better than me. Does it take 1,000 chapters to build a foundation and 10,000 chapters to become an immortal? Sixth: In the game world, I am addicted to expansion. I don't understand that cultivating immortals is a value that attributes power to oneself. I leave the spirit pool and do not take the time to practice. I have been practicing various skills and putting the cart before the horse. Very stupid! Seventh: "Gou" became a real dog. All the words and ink are wasted on the game world. The world of cultivating immortals can be as transparent as possible. I have no ambition to hide as far as my own sect can. I would really rather have a chicken head than a phoenix tail. Eighth: Whether it is cultivation of immortality, martial arts, or fantasy, the core element is the cultivation process. The description of cultivation is a dynamic effort and the most important plot component. The writing is bland and boring, passing it by in one stroke, and strictly limiting the growth rate. It is simply stupid. Ninth: Hey, I won't say more, this novel still has some advantages. The idea is good, but the grasp is not good enough. I hope the author can be more serious

I came here from the fantasy simulator, collect it first

I said some things several times, and I thought I turned the wrong page. I hope the author can change this and not be so stupid. The rest is very good in terms of world background and world selection. Everything about the protagonist's IQ performance is well-founded. Overall, it's pretty good. Cheers, author.

Why do many people say water? For example, the protagonist cultivates crazily through the resources of the two worlds, and improves his talents through adding points in the game world, but after more than a hundred chapters, he is still on the second level of Qi training.

They have all traveled through time as immortals, so there are so many resources that are not needed in the word count, and the growth of the protagonist is deliberately suppressed, and there is no point in giving it up.

I came here from Fantasy Simulator. I just finished watching it. It's pretty good.

The protagonist is currently a cultivator of immortality. In the first chapter, the protagonist is on the first level of Qi training. By the end of the 100th chapter, it is on the second level of Qi training. Not a single spell is mentioned. It is just a mess of words. It is too watery. I have to make up the word count.

The subject matter is very good, but it's too tactful. Is the author Hong Quanqin? One sentence turns over and over and a whole chapter is lost.

Too much nonsense, one sentence to write a chapter, back and forth ink, who will read this?

Advantages: The creativity is good —————— Disadvantages: With a lot of resources, even the leader of the sect is not so luxurious, but after more than a hundred chapters, he is still on the second level of Qi training,? When writing about the world of cultivating immortals, I didn't even mention magic, and I didn't even learn martial arts. In a game world with a martial arts background, one relies on attributes, talismans, and small daggers to crush enemies, with no skills at all. It seems that I have gained a lot of things throughout the article, but at the last look, the progress has changed from one to two, which is ridiculous. I can only say: Sea, you are all water!

I'm not saying, can you smile less? Throughout the whole article, I only saw one kind of smile, smile! ! ! There is smile, smile bitterly, laugh out loud, laugh miserably, giggle, giggle, sneer, ridicule, laugh out loud, laugh out loud, laugh through tears, laugh out loud, laugh out loud, laugh up at the sky, laugh out loud, smile with wide eyebrows, grin, smile with lips pursed, smile with smile, giggle, laugh haha, smile, understand. Yi, laugh, smile, smile, smile, smile, chat and laugh, snicker, chuckle, laugh, laugh strangely, laugh wildly, sneer, smile coquettishly, laugh slyly, snicker, laugh sarcastically, laugh slyly, joke, smile flatteringly, smile all over the face, smile playfully, hide the knife in the smile, smile slyly . There are so many smiles, can you stop just smiling? My mentality is broken!

The author's writing skills are not good enough. He can mention it in one stroke, but if he has to repeat it twice, it feels like it is watery, like a running account, which makes it uncomfortable to read. This should be the author's first book. Let's keep up the good work.

Cowhide, time travel game, kill monsters and upgrade. He only reached the second level of Qi training in Chapter 62? Even Han Paopao is not as good as 🙂

It's obviously a good plug-in, but not easy to use. What kind of elixir to sell? It is more convenient to choose martial arts secrets for non-capital trading. Send a task and wait for payment. Don't tell me that you can't get the secret code of the body refining realm in the world of cultivation... What does the hard currency of spiritual stone mean... It is the concentration of spiritual energy. I am afraid that I will not have spiritual energy in practice. Eat the spiritual energy tiger... I am in a daze while practicing... Do you want to have a baby? Why do players have to describe 2-3 pictures when they fight mobs?.. Three years have passed. After accumulation, the foundation has been built to reach the peak of the martial arts world. There is no way to upgrade. Various hundred arts are learned at the first level, and then they can change the map at once. The world after that has just begun. The game world has destroyed the balance, but there are so many things... Obviously there is gold and silver, but I don't choose it, but I choose iron.

I read about 60 chapters and found the creativity and the like to be good, but I kept stressing about the protagonist. Then I read the comments and found that I was still practicing Qi for three or four stages around Chapter 170. Even if the pace is slower than Chapter 200, I should have been promoted to a large stage. According to the traditional cultivation of immortality, Qi training is divided into - For the division of Foundation Establishment-Golden Pill-Nascent Soul-Transformation God, even if it is a 200-chapter section, it would be almost a thousand chapters. Even if it is written after becoming an immortal, it can still be considered as one or two thousand chapters. You are still at the third or fourth level of Qi training in these 170 chapters, do you want to write four or five thousand chapters?

It's too verbose, and in the game world, it is impossible for players to be so polite to NPCs. For lawless players, as long as they can achieve their goals, they can do any kind of tricks.

🙂 I laughed when I saw some readers saying that this was not good. Water fish is considered the king of the sea, but his big star at least became famous after he became famous. What about you? After reading dozens of chapters, I am still confused. What is the main plot? Crossing between two worlds? Use the time difference to quickly upgrade? Sorry, I didn't see it. Or the main world keeps a low profile, and the dungeons push all the way to collect resources to support themselves. I'm sorry but I can't see it. So what else is there to like about this book? The author seems confused?

It took more than 150 chapters to practice the third level of qi nb

Luo Liba talks a lot of nonsense.

Maybe for the sake of authenticity, the difficulty of cultivating immortals is increased. It makes people feel desperate. Those who can become immortals through cultivation must have a lot of luck, one step at a time. The protagonist's cultivation level is low, so his horizons are low. There are not so many, definitely, there are krypton medicine flow. Hurry up and change to a good skill. This basic skill is too difficult to practice. It's a waste. Goldfinger. In fact, in the game world, improving qualifications, blessings, and practicing sub-professionals is the way to go. Adding points can save a lot of time.

After upgrading the Qi Refining Technique, my level and strength have not improved, and I am still drunk. So what is the purpose of practicing the Qi Refining Technique? Is it just that practice makes perfect?

Write a new book with this setting. Your book is hopeless. Maybe the next one will get better results.

Alas, I still like the creative writing style and so on, but I really don't feel that it's refreshing. It doesn't matter if it's watery, but it's just not that refreshing. , The pressure on the protagonist is too harsh, you are a cultivator. You have been cultivating immortality since the beginning. You are not just a mortal practicing martial arts in the first 100 chapters. You have been cultivating immortality from the beginning. You have downloaded several dungeons, and it took more than sixty chapters before you broke through to the first level of Qi training. The pressure is too heavy. If it were written like this, it would really be another lifetime series. And there is no need to change the map. Other maps are constantly changing in the lifetime system, like the peak of martial arts, where dozens of maps are changed. I'm so tired that I can't stand it anymore

Why do I feel like it's another Jie Nan's vest?

Keep writing, don't stop, all they say is shit

It doesn't feel like reading a cultivation book at all. Instead, it feels like a daily life novel. The fighting feeling is very poor. Basically, it only takes a few sentences to get through it.

This is a book that is so watery that it cannot be watered down any more. To save someone, just take a few pictures

I haven't chosen any chapter names yet. Have you given up?

Water, water, water, water. The water has come to your grandma's house.