The Warm Man in the Feminist World

The biggest problem is the confusing use of the protagonist's perspective (first person) and God's perspective (third person), which is the most taboo in writing.

I'm just a new author. As long as I don't think the writing is bad, it would be great if you can give me some other suggestions. I will try my best to write a better first book.

Why did I delete some comments? Was it deleted by Qidian. Com?

There is a feminist article, support it, the author, hold on, feminist articles are about to rise, and we men have to stand up 😏😏

Are there any yandere girls out there? 😏

Get up and update, the donkeys in the production team don't dare to rest like this

Quick update😠😠😠

It is recommended that the author plan more words. It is so dense at first glance that it hurts the eyes and makes the viewing experience very unpleasant. . .

Don't you understand that so few people read the author? No one reads the first person version.

Sure enough, this is a novel written by a newbie. The protagonist's perspective and the third perspective don't know how to storyboard, and the reading is like a running account.

Sure enough, I'm not the only one who feels that it feels like a running account, which is too discouraging. Instead of updating it, it's better to fix the front part first, otherwise it will be really unreadable and people will run away.

Watch more female videos first before writing, I'm exhausted

Is the author a male or a female? If you are a female, have you considered taking a photo? If you are a male, have you considered dressing up as a woman?🙂🙂

The first person is no longer popular, or it was not mainstream before. The author's plot is still okay. I felt pretty good after at least four chapters. The beginning needs to be in the first person to be understandable. But if you continue, problems will arise. For example, I don't seem to see my sister's name. The animation-like "picture description" is indeed very vivid, but the first person in the animation mostly uses the protagonist's mouth to tell the setting and background. There is another problem that may be derived from the first person, which is the problem of symbols. Large sections of character dialogue do not have quotation marks or colons. It looks like a long section. It's hard to inspire people's desire to read. Zhang Xiaohua's "The First Chaos in History" is also a first-person novel and is very old. His layout looks very comfortable. You can go and take a look.

All finished. Although this book is rough, it is actually a good book. I know that the way this book is described and the beginning will dissuade a large number of readers. But keep reading as much as you can! This is a rare feminist novel, and for once the heroine cannot be viewed as a woman. I always feel that the author is female.

I have read Chapter 26 so far. Let me talk about my feelings first. After reading it, I felt an inexplicable irritation. The storyboarding, dialogue, and person switching, or character switching, are all a mess. I hope that the next chapters will be better.

…………The protagonist is Mu Han, right? What the hell is it that Li Xuan and the squad leader ran in front of me, picked up Mu Han and ran away……Aren't you surprised when you read it yourself? It would be better if I were replaced by Mu Han, or Li Xuan and the squad leader could just pick up Mu Han and run away...

It's perfect, I'm very satisfied with how traveling through a feminist world should be... Come on

Come on, I will keep watching

I'll come back to see you when I'm tired of reading

If the update is faster and the content is more, if there is no problem, I will write another book and I will definitely support it. 👍😊

How to say it. . . So well written? Does it make me feel like it's a female protagonist?

Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง, gain more experience with your first book

I thought I wouldn't write it anymore, so I almost deleted it.

It looks very nice. Can you update it soon?

Author, you should also pay attention to the punctuation of your words. It's up to you to use the pronoun. But if you can read a few more novels, you won't use the wrong pronoun...

The author will update soon, come on, come on, come on! ! !

The author's writing is very good, definitely worth reading and subscribing! Borrowing precious treasures, I recommend a book with three vulgarities and many joys. "The old man picked up rags in time and lived by making bad movies" is hilarious...