Mortal Transformation

Please correct any errors. Looking at the current novels, I find that they are all in a single version, with infinitely pretentious writing methods and outdated routines; I think novels should be like life, with gains and losses, joy and sorrow. This time I am ready to fly into the flames and blow up the novel fish pond, but I am not very talented and knowledgeable, and I am not good at words. I hope readers will give me some advice and kind corrections! Sincerely, thank you very much! ! !

The writing style is good, the sense of substitution is okay, but the description of the environment is a bit sparse, the scene where the story takes place is not very clear, and the description of the characters is a little bit limited, which limits the sense of substitution. The story continues smoothly, and the description in some places is not very delicate. For example, the description of the woman in Chapter 28 does not describe the unique image characteristics of the woman, and it is not very effective in enhancing the character image and sense of substitution. There are no obvious loopholes in the plot. The first plot is a bit slow and dull, but it gets better and turns later, but it is not very twists and turns. It is not particularly attractive. There is less suspense and foreshadowing. The overallness of the article is weak. Moreover, the time advances a bit fast. It feels that the plot is still a bit empty and not very full. There are many descriptions of life details. This is very helpful for readers to integrate into this novel world, but it is inevitable to be slow.        ，，，，， The character creation of Dada is quite good. The protagonist's character is very vivid and real. He has the emotions and dissatisfaction that ordinary people should have. Moreover, I think the protagonist has strong growth potential. I don't know if Dada will help the protagonist grow up little by little. If so, I will express my support. The other characters are also good, at least they are not paper figures and have their own thoughts and emotions. This is already better than many novels. However, the disadvantage is that the characters lack their own stories, which makes the characters seem a bit too thin and cannot leave a very deep impression on the readers. Now there is an opportunity for a well-shaped character. The woman who saves the protagonist in Chapter 28 is someone who can have a story. I hope you can take advantage of it. Dada's articles have their own thoughts integrated into them, which can be said to be Dada's unique works. This is also worthy of praise, but it is not enough and not particularly profound. In my personal opinion, DaDa's book is still good. Just as DaDa said that novels should be like life, with gains and losses, joys and sorrows, DaDa has achieved and insisted on this in the novel. Unfortunately, doing so is not in line with the online novel market. I personally recommend DaDa not to change the text for signing a contract, but to recommend for signing. If there are no particularly novel highlights or settings in the novel, then it can only adapt to the market, which will inevitably violate the original intention. Personally, I still hope that DaDa can stick to itself. (Book reviews are highly subjective and represent only personal opinions. Please consider carefully before making a decision whether to adopt it or not.)

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This book is very nice, the writing is very good, the skills are deep, and the story is interesting. I have collected it and will come and communicate more often.

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