Xiaodaozang

🙂 Although the male protagonist was blinded, scolded, beaten, stoned, and beaten with eggs in Mangshan Town, the male pig foot never left him and guarded Mangshan, the true Virgin Mary

I hope the protagonist will practice cultivation seriously and not have a harem or stallion.

It's poisonous, I'm about to be poisoned to death. I feel that since we are both players, at least Li Shitannian's IQ should be online and not so reckless. I feel that my whole brain is a bit out of place. The author seems to be deliberately trying to portray this person's character traits, but I feel that it is counterproductive.

Without further ado, let's talk about what I think is the poisonous point. (Remember, this is my opinion. I am not confident that my views can represent everyone's views, but I still want to complain and comment) First, world view. At the beginning, I thought the world of mountains and seas was an ordinary fantasy and mythical world, then it came to the wreckage of the world in the River of Forgetfulness, and finally the protagonist saw the wreckage of the multiverse world in the River of Forgetfulness. I know it's over. In fact, it's okay to see this. As long as the author's writing style is good enough, such a world view can be controlled. But in a certain chapter, I felt like he wasn't good enough. In a certain chapter, the author wrote that the protagonist drove to the New World China on the Twilight Plateau, perhaps to express the size of China. He said that China has a universe as large as two blue stars that can be observed. If the blue star is aligned with the earth, the diameter unit of the observable universe is tens of billions of light years. That's not bad, it's big! But I can't understand his previous sentence. He said that the protagonist traveled through most of the mountains and rivers using the teleportation array, and then said that if the speed of light could travel, it would be at least a thousand years. You are putting famous mountains and rivers in a village. Go out to Mount Tai, take a step to Mount Huang, and then take a step to the Three Gorges? Second, feelings. The protagonist is liked by two people, one is the White Lotus Virgin, and the other is Xu. There is no logic. Xu Sha was saved by the male protagonist once, and then he didn't meet the male protagonist a few times, so he skipped work and came to watch the male protagonist (although it was to explore the truth), but he was taken care of a little by the male protagonist disguised as the male protagonist's junior brother, and then he conquered it by himself? The Second Holy Mother of White Lotus, an evil god who has lived for who knows how many tens of thousands of years, inexplicably betrays the male protagonist when he goes to Jiming Mountain, and then inexplicably declares his love to the male protagonist, and finally sacrifices himself. How long did it take for the male protagonist to arrive at Dusk Plateau and reach Jiming Mountain? How many times have they met? Someone who has lived for who knows how long and fell in love with the evil god all at once? What about the process? Mary Sue novels wouldn't be written like this! Third, noodle eaters. The Noodle Eater appeared on the protagonist's first mission, and was later given a lot of descriptions. The Noodle Eater has the following characteristics. After rebirth (the author said in a reply to a reader that he thought he was reborn), he loves Blue Star and wants to kill Xuanzhen. One reason for killing Xuanzhen is that he is a giant of immortality in the world of mountains and seas, not a giant of Blue Star. This combination seems to bring disaster to Blue Star in the future that the noodle eater thinks Xuanzhen will become as a giant of mountains and seas. This poisoned me.

Is the harem just about having sex? What are a group of people thinking and talking without using their brains? I don't know what's going on with online writing right now? The existence of the heroine can make the content less boring. It's impossible to just practice fighting monsters all the time, right? Some authors can't write heroines well, so they completely deny them? Who are they? ! ! ()

Xuan Zhen doesn't write like the protagonist's doppelgänger, but like an independent individual, which feels weird. Moreover, Huang Quan didn't have any interest at all and just skipped to watch it.

It's too confusing, the causes and consequences are always missing, pitfalls appear inexplicably, and conclusions are drawn, it's all a waste of brains. The outline is in your head, and you know how to write it. The problem is that it is very difficult for readers to read it.

The camp has been put on the shelves but it's still pending? You don't want to choose a camp at the end, do you?

It's too thin, and there's a suspicion of wateriness, but there's nothing wrong with it, but the more the protagonist looks, the more she looks like a woman. Every step he takes may arouse sentimentality, and he often feels sorry for himself. Are you sure you can live in the heavens like this? Then there is Xuanzhen, who knows too much, is this a clone? It's really not as good as a system wizard or an absolutely rational personality like Dr. Chen.

He is indeed a saint and writes well, but he does not agree with my three views. I'm not a good person. I don't mind doing good deeds if I have the ability, but I can't exchange my life for a life I don't know if I can save.

It's actually pretty good-looking. There is one thing, an ordinary stand-in talisman creates the feeling of an external incarnation. This is too cheap.

The problem is actually quite obvious – it's unpleasant. There are too many settings and too many thoughts. It's a bit similar to Thriller Paradise, but this thing is different from Thriller Paradise. Spells, cultivating immortals, etc. Are integrated into this kind of game-like copy. People can't accept them all at once. You are like him entering a horror story. We can usually understand it through hearing and seeing, but when you enter, you throw thunder charms and the like. The original copy of the story escapes from reality, and some other settings are added to the imaginary world, making it difficult for the audience to integrate into it. I would like to give you a suggestion: for future stories, work on "people" and "dungeons". The story is so exciting that other things don't matter. The settings and props used in it are as simple as possible. After all, if the skill of the props is strong, it will look pretentious, but if it is complicated, it will be uncomfortable for people to watch. A good story is better.

As long as this book is too messy, various characters appear without even an introduction, and then involve a lot of related stories, making it confusing to read.

Is that Li Sinian a reborn person? It gives me the feeling that my IQ is completely off the charts

What can I say, the book is a good book and you can see that the author put his heart into it. But I personally feel that the bad thing is the suspense. It may be a matter of my personal preference. The second copy is simply a mess. To be honest, the novel, even the mystery novel, takes the reader step by step into the plot to dig out and fill in the pits step by step. The writing of this copy gave me the feeling that the protagonist and supporting characters in the book have weird and incomprehensible operations. , There is no sense of Conan-style plot advancement, just a strong sense of separation. As a reader, I can't get into it at all. There is no sense of excitement in promoting the plot. There are pitfalls everywhere. The protagonist in the book understands my God's perspective, which makes me confused. The final explanation seems very reasonable, but it feels so confusing that it doesn't make sense to connect all the clues. In fact, putting aside these suspenseful writing methods, it might be better to simply write it as a fairy tale. After all, working people nowadays really don't have time to think about it in detail. My own feeling is that reading novels during my break time at work and entertainment time after get off work every day really doesn't have the energy to read a plot in detail. I know this is a bit disrespectful to the author. After all, someone else has written a book that he worked hard to write, and it must be very unpleasant to be dismissed hastily. Of course, this is all my personal opinion. After all, many people like suspense. I saw it from everyone's guide. Generally, I watch fairy tales and historical genres, which may be a bit uncomfortable. I just hope that the author can change his writing style from my own standpoint. The story written by the author is quite good, but it is a pity that I voted for suspense 😏

How to say it. . Although I don't like this kind of obvious plot arranged by the powerful, but this kind of thing is the most realistic. The only thing that disgusts me is that the protagonist has no clue at all, and feels that he can escape the powerful plot in Blue Star. Typically you think I am on the first level but actually I am on the second level, but you never thought that the mighty one is on the fifth level.

It looks so messy. I didn't write clearly in many places before moving on to the next link.

The plot in the real world is almost coming to an end, and the next copy is about to begin. This copy is very important, and it should slowly reveal the true face of the Shanhai Realm. The author has completed the outline of the copy and will be filling in the storyline in the next few days. So, now we start collecting supporting roles from all book friends! Those who have ideas can start to register! Format: name + background + personality + ability. If the author feels it is appropriate, he will make appropriate magical changes or add it to the book intact, in line with the plot. As a hit-and-run book that cannot be ordered more than a hundred times, the author's building of this package is a bit risky. Because it is very likely that the building will be empty, hahaha. The main thing is to increase the popularity of the book review section. After all, for a street author, I will read every comment you make carefully. Just like the votes, it is the biggest motivation for me, a street author, when I write! So, all book friends, please leave more comments and talk about this chapter, so as to give the author a little more motivation to write! Anyway, it's free to type a few words.

There are too many typos, and there are too many loopholes... The little junior brother was a baby a year ago, but a year later he can make phone calls, and can still go out of the gym to pick up people...

How to say it? The stand-in is very embarrassing, goosebumps fall all over the floor, it's hard to bear 😅

I took a look at it and found that it looked really good at the beginning, but I couldn't stand it anymore after the protagonist's avatar turned into a real person with his own memories. It violated my personal poisonous point and deleted it on the spot. Today I read it again and I have a lot of emotions.

How to put it this way, I think this book is a bit ahead of its time in terms of ideological settings, but it doesn't have the brainless elements that most people like, so it's hard for too many people to like it. However, the structure is indeed a bit messy. I don't know if it's intentional or unclear. Some of the ideas in it inspired me. I hope I can continue to persevere and not be influenced by some people. I want to see the future.

I read more than 200 chapters of Yangha. What's wrong? I've finished raising it.

Don't you understand why everyone needs to be extraordinary? Can't you see the chaos and impact that extraordinary people bring?

Looking at the introduction, it feels like the seventy-two transformations of Disha

I saw this book yesterday and have read more than half of it. It is free today 🤔

May I ask, the ending of the clone Xuan Zhen? Thank you.

It feels like the whole thing is going too fast. The perspective is all on the protagonist. The world of mountains and seas is so big, there must be a lot worth writing about. The other supporting characters should also have their own charms. There are only a few copies and the game is over.

The author's writing is good, but after seeing the noodle-eating and writing letters, I knew it wasn't for me.

The following represents only my personal thoughts. First of all, I think the protagonist's character is actually quite good, a bit like a virgin, but really gentle and has a great love for creatures and life. Also very calm, for the most part. I liked the previous plot very much, and it felt like I was reading a storybook about monsters. From the second dungeon, I personally felt that it was a bit confusing. Everything was talked about, but I couldn't find the key points. Moreover, the description of the fight was too long. It was a fight in several chapters. After the fight, it was reversed and then fought again. It was quite tiring to watch. The real-life plot is okay. But in the third dungeon, after crossing the River of Forgetfulness and fighting that evil god, I stopped reading it. I felt tired and couldn't stand it any longer. I skipped to read the chapter titles. It seemed like there was a heroine and a love line? I was a little scared (covering my face) Overall, I still like this book very much, and I am very grateful to the author for the great story. Thank you for your hard work. Finally, I want to ask about Xuan Zhen's ending. Because I didn't continue reading, I don't know what happened to Xuanzhen. Although there is a high probability that he will disappear or return to his original form (guessed), which is a bit sad. I really like this cold clone who can do things without being pushy. It feels very safe! Please kind-hearted people tell Xuanzhen the ending. 😭😭😭