Academy City's Unknown

It's better to practice your writing, and the plot can also be designed, it's really quite bland right now.

You can put a full stop and divide it into multiple paragraphs. The battle can be more detailed, don't go over it in one stroke. Finally, how great is the potential of the protagonist's abilities? Such a position has never been reached again by the party that finally became the top one. In addition, Aiwass is just a powerful trump card for Ya Niang, and the core is always Fantasy Killer. Finally, some pictures of Touma

Segmentation! Segmentation! Segmentation! Say important things three times

It is recommended that the name be changed to Orianna, so that it can be easily distinguished from the person who created and appeared later, Diananna.

Why does it feel like a running account?

If there is anything unreasonable, just mention it and I will look at it carefully.

After reading three of them, I would say it's okay, but the paragraphs have to be divided. When I read this, I felt like I was reading a novel like The Romance of the Three Kingdoms.

Can you divide it into more segments? !