The Sword Immortal of Heian Kyo

Let me explain in advance that this is purely a personal opinion. I don't want to set the pace and I don't want to criticize the author. After all, writing a book is not easy. After reading Chapter 51, I really want to complain. Maybe it is a problem with my reading. The protagonist does not know the plot of Onmyoji. Ibuki asked the protagonist to come to see Shiranui. Why did he suddenly have to protect her and suddenly take her away? I don't understand, and then he took advantage of me, from holding hands to explore the meridians in the body, to carrying him to dance on the sea, and then to the second sudden encounter. Then they kissed, the emotional scene was too sloppy, it makes sense that you liked her when you met her, and you didn't even explain why she liked you. You took the initiative to grab people's hands and hugged them. It's okay if you weren't treated as a gangster. The city lord came out with a cold face. Seeing It was only the second time that you laughed happily. I looked confused, and then kissed you directly. To be honest, I was a little disgusted. The sword fairy is not like the sword fairy. I feel like a rich, rich and handsome version. Your An Zhen has the halo of the protagonist. But one thing to say, the subject matter is good and novel, and the supporting characters at the beginning are all well written, but the plot I feel Shiranui is falling apart for me.

Before Shiranui: What's so good about Ali? Wouldn't he still be alive without it? After Shiranui: A Li is the best in the world!

I am away I am away from being the best in the world

The background of the protagonist's past life is blown to the sky. How do you know the King of Hell, a rare strong man in the three realms? After time travel, he initially said that he had accumulated experience in the past life and had no realm restrictions, but it turned out that it was not even two chapters. After the first realm of junior high school, the initial stage of the breakthrough was like constipation. He also said that the foundation of the previous life was not stable before the accident happened. The relationship between being able to become a sword fairy in the previous life was even water in the first realm. Damn, I was expecting the protagonist to develop quickly if he had past life experience. The typical character is an immortal before time travel and a 🐷 after time travel.

Is this the first in the three realms? He's just trash, he can't even do the most basic steps, he's beaten up by a low-level guy, and his cultivation level is forcibly suppressed. Don't even know what you're writing about?

After making a sword, it was taken away by Haiguo, or was it that the sword spirit rushed to the door for Haiguo to take it? The middle and late stages of breaking through were like constipation, or after a fight, someone hung him up and beat him? Can you bully cannon fodder? The more I look at it, the more frustrated I feel, 😆

Farewell, the character of the protagonist is terrible, and his IQ is also problematic. He just met a Dragon Bone Demon before and was beaten up. He was able to do it without a sword later, and he was almost killed He can only fight with one move, but he is still a swordsman. He was invincible in his previous life, but he still doesn't have a back-up move?

Can the author please stop insulting the word "Sword Immortal"? Diaosi is a diaosi, return the sword to the immortal, fuck me.

To be honest, the writing skills of this book are not bad, but there are many personal ideas and some expression techniques are very problematic. At the beginning, I write about how powerful the protagonist was in his previous life, and how he defeated the little monster after traveling through time... But what happens next. We want to maintain the protagonist's awesomeness, but don't want him to be too invincible, so existences that far exceed the protagonist's strength, such as Dragon Bone Spirit, Shiranui, and Haiguo, appear one after another, suppressing the protagonist in various ways (either on the way to injury, or on the way to death). This is very different from the previous plot. Don't say that if the protagonist is too strong, he can't continue writing, and he has to suppress his strength... I remember an author said: The invincibility of the protagonist has nothing to do with whether he has ideas for writing the plot. Nowadays, there are more and more pretentious novels from Qidian, and most of them have good results. This trend is visible. Don't abuse the owner. Don't suppress. Wouldn't it be nice to write about the protagonist quietly showing off and earning a few pieces of delicious bread? Hope you can gain something.

Ah Li, my wife(๑❛ᴗ❛๑)

You might as well become a swordsman from Heian Jing. The standard problem for a novice when starting a book is that I always feel that the main character is too strong and I have to suppress it. Then I find that I can't go on with the plot anymore, so I urgently added a plot of three months of seclusion, and I wrote that I have an attack of literary youth again. Isn't it too smooth? Don't let him break through? Don't you find it annoying to go back and forth like this? You might as well have written a pretentious article from the beginning. The character of the sword fairy in the previous life is too disconnected from the current protagonist. At least half of the comments are complaining about this. It is really impossible for people to establish a sense of substitution. Let's talk about results, aren't there many players in Itchy Rat? There must be a lot of people playing Qidian, but the output of the fandom is too little. Look at the results of that book where Brother Shui from the Dragon Clan next door had no money to go to college and had to go to slay dragons. It's simply too many people to pay for high-quality food and grass. Why don't you just write this book along the lines of a swordsman and stop worrying about whether it's a swordsman or a swordsman. To put it bluntly, you can't write it. You always think about overpowering the protagonist's strength. You can't write the traditional fairy-xia style. Then you can honestly write in the second dimension. Just write a story about a swordsman wandering around in the world of Onmyoji. Complete the regrets and bonds in the game. In this way, people will buy it, because there are still few people writing this. The more you think about the character of your protagonist, the less we will buy it. The Sword Fairy's roots will become crooked, and he will not be able to attract people.

I couldn't bear to see Shiranui there! In addition to the writing style that attracts people to read, the rest falls apart. In the previous life, the swordsman was the boss who planted flags and flew up. In the end, his strength and state of mind were not worthy of it! Not to mention the Sword God from Ten Miles Slope! At least be stronger before going out! The large account has been opened to the small account, and the equipment is gone! There are always some experience techniques! How dare you go wandering around the advanced map with a broken wooden sword! ! Didn't the protagonist die eight hundred times already? In addition to majoring in Kung Fu, there are also forbidden techniques! Something desperate! Here's the trump card! None! ! Shiranui is also fascinated by it! Never mind! ! Unable to complain! !

The author is really strong, and he can still maintain such results for more than 280 chapters 😰

It's really disgusting that the protagonist can make other people's swords even if he practices them. Is Haiguo the author🐴?

I'm confused. In the previous life, Pig's Foot was said to be invincible after hundreds of years of cultivation. In this life, every breakthrough and weapon refining can attract a large number of monsters. I want to ask how Pig's Foot was invincible for hundreds of years in its previous life with such a setting. How did it not be killed after breakthroughs or weapon refining?

The subject matter is good, and the writing is okay, but the details are not handled well, and the character setting is a big hole. The protagonist doesn't look like a cultivator who has practiced for hundreds or thousands of years, just a simple one. The author may want to write about a sword immortal who can defeat all magic with one sword, but when he thinks of sword immortals, he is more reminded of the sword immortals in "The Legend of Shushan" and "The Legend of Sword and Fairy". What he wants to see is a wide variety of sword techniques. It can be set so that the protagonist is weak in the early stage and needs various sword techniques to enhance his strength and control the enemy. When his strength increases, he can cut the world with one sword. In this way, the reading experience of the novel will be much better, instead of just one move back and forth no matter who the opponent is, which is unrealistic. The protagonist was also a big boss in the world of immortality in his previous life, and this is just this set of sword skills?

Wife No. 1