The Mysterious Man of Hogwarts Awakens

Harry has black hair and his parents have blond hair, so this is not normal. No one has noticed. Wizards are by blood, and Snape is his biological father.

I haven't finished reading the free chapter yet, but this book has already left a very deep impression on me. The most profound impression is probably that the author must be a new author, the story concept is very good, and the plot is also very attractive. However, the writing style failed to keep up, and the parts that could clearly be written down were brushed off in one stroke. Instead, the tense fighting scenes were over and over again. For example, after the second attack, what happened when everyone was dining in the lobby. "A Slytherin student ran in with a look of fear on his face." Just this sentence, with a little description can make it into a long paragraph. If it were me, I would probably write: "At this moment, accompanied by screams, the door of the hall was pushed open hard, and a student ran in in a panic. The touch of green on the robe made it easy for us to tell that he was a Slytherin. Although I don't know why the student's legs looked weak and he stumbled a little, but he still ran with all his strength, like a newborn baby being chased by a wild wolf. The lamb stumbled towards its mother's arms. And the frowned brows, widened eyes, and widened mouth all showed that this Slytherin student was facing huge fear at this moment." Right, as long as you add a little more detailed description, you can make it clear and clear, and it will be easier for readers to create a sense of picture through your description, and it will not let the readers find out that you are actually talking about water. The corresponding thing is to use water in places where water should not be used. For example, in the first battle with Tom, "The protagonist told Tom that as long as I absorb your soul, I can complete myself. Tom said to the protagonist, of course, but if I absorb your soul, I can also complete myself. At this time, the protagonist thought, as long as I absorb your soul, I can complete myself." Fang's soul can complete himself, he must absorb the other party's soul to complete himself, and Tom is also thinking in his heart that he must absorb the other party's soul to complete himself." I briefly recounted it, and the text gave me the feeling that it was even worse. It was just one sentence, and it was really annoying to read it over and over again. Especially when two pretty good wizards were in the middle of a duel, and it was still a life-and-death situation where either you die or I die today. Repeating the same sentence over and over like this was a little bit confusing. In addition, I would like to make a small suggestion. This suggestion is just my personal experience. There are too many reversals, too many. From the beginning of the protagonist's resurrection, it seemed to be going smoothly, but the result was reversed. A black light appeared halfway through the resurrection? I thought that this foreshadowing would start to have some weird side effects after the protagonist was resurrected, but it turned out to be reversed. It turned out that the black light was a Slytherin who should have died long ago? Just when I thought the next step would be a fight between the protagonist and Slytherin, the result was reversed. It turns out that Tom is not dead yet? At this time, Slytherin did not reveal his purpose. Just when I thought that the next battle would be between the protagonist and Voldemort Tom, the result was reversed and Slytherin also came to get involved? When I thought Slytherin also wanted to be resurrected, the result turned out to be reversed. It turned out that this was not Slytherin, but the despicable Halbo who should have been lost in the long river of history? As soon as Haierbo took action, he directly targeted two people at the same time. I thought that the next step would be when the protagonist and Tom teamed up to kill Haierbo, but the result was reversed and the three people started a melee? The three people were fighting fiercely, and no one could get the upper hand. They were restrained by each other. Just when I thought that an outsider, such as the Three Little Birds or Dumbledore, would come to break the balance, the result was reversed. Tom killed Halpo with a sneak attack? Just when I thought it was just the protagonist and Tom who would decide the outcome, the result was reversed. Haierbo was not dead, but he killed Tom with a backhand? Just when I thought the protagonist could reap the benefits, the result was reversed. Hale Bourbon had killed Tom, but he chose to sacrifice himself to fuse with Tom and get Tom back again? When I thought that this time the protagonist and Tom could finally have a showdown, hey, guess what, the twist happened again, Tom ran away? Just when I thought Tom was going to hibernate and wait for an opportunity to retaliate against the protagonist at some point in the future, alas, the reversal happened again, Tom turned into a snake! Hey guys, it really makes my scalp numb. What do you think, author, that you can put more than ten reversals together? Is this a drama or a sketch? Take me personally as an example. When watching a movie or reading a novel, if there is a reversal in the ending, I will feel very wowed. Two reversals will make me feel super wowed, but when the fourth reversal occurs, I will become speechless. If there are really so many reversals, I think they must be throughout the whole text, with a reversal every once in a while. This will keep the reader, or at least me, feeling fresh and motivated to continue reading. Of course, the above are all my personal feelings. Maybe some people like this kind of operation 😂. But in general, the author's imagination is still very good, and the story setting and plot arrangement are both remarkable. I hope the author can work hard and slowly hone himself in the writing process, so that he can grow and produce better content.

I feel that it's generally okay, but there are some places where it's nonsense. Although fan fiction inevitably needs to add some secondary settings to enrich the plot, but different grades have a class at the same time? Author, are you serious?

It feels like the protagonist will do whatever it takes to achieve his goal, causing the Harry trio to fall apart. The friendship is no longer there. Maybe a new Voldemort will appear, another master of black magic. In a word, what a sin!

I really want to know what the protagonist is planning to do here to tease the incompetent savior instead of quickly killing Voldemort. It seems that some of the memories are known to Voldemort, right? Is it really okay to stay here and commit suicide leisurely? If Voldemort tried his best and told the protagonist's memories to other wizards, I want to know how the protagonist would face the endless pursuit, or would the protagonist be said to be invincible and not care about any possible threats.

I've only read the first few chapters, and I feel like it's not my cup of tea. Pig's feet are too retarded and talk too much.

Not to my liking. I did so many sexy tricks to resurrect myself and then got backhanded.

Has the author ever thought about writing this book as Mugenliu after the HP storyline is over? I feel it is very suitable for Mugenliu, which is biased towards Western fantasy, and the writing style is very brilliant.

It is better to think carefully about the next volume first. It is best not to deviate too much from the original work in the setting of the fan fiction. You can supplement and improve it on the basis of the original work, but it is better not to change the settings that have been given in the original work.

You can completely pretend to be a person from hundreds of years ago. Voldemort is just the previous owner of the notebook. If you have to expose such a big flaw, you can definitely find out who the students were fifty years ago.