Rebuilding Cybertron in the Marvel Universe

I was finally convinced. Seven of the ten chapters were low in word count, and I kept writing about daily life there. There was no outline at all, and no purpose at all. It felt like Pig's Foot was just messing around in time.

I quite like watching the daily ones, but there is a slight problem with the name. The source of fire is a cube, not a person.

1. Rebuilding Cybertron is the title of the book, so when do you plan to start building Cybertron? Not to mention the planet Cybertron, more than sixty chapters have passed, and the progress... Is basically 0. This book is more like Spider-Man's daily life. The plots of various characters that have nothing to do with the main plot can occupy a large number of chapters, but the Transformers themselves barely appear many times. 2. Adults travel through time, but they are more childish than children. Chinese people who travel through time naturally believe in American values. They are not willing to reveal their identity easily, and they are not willing to kill gangsters when they encounter them. Um. Batman + Spider-Man. I love all Americans. Even if he is a gangster and my identity may be exposed, I will not hurt him. He must be judged by the law. Very thoughtful. 3. A person who can obtain information and evolve at will through the Internet, and can invade Stark Company to obtain information at will. Very poor. 4. I am very poor. Although I can easily obtain huge amounts of money, I still decided to rob the gang's money. At the same time, because I accidentally failed to rob two gangsters, I can never rob any gangsters again. This path is no longer feasible. 5. Although I have powerful superpowers, I will never kill my enemy directly, or control my enemy's men and kill him. Instead, I will control other forces and engage in a long struggle with my enemy. … In summary. It seems to have a rich outline, but in reality it is disorganized. The main plot is difficult to find, and the characters lack any typical characteristics. The idea is interesting, do you dare to overthrow it and start over? 🙄

You dare to use Optimus Prime when writing about Cybertron, but Optimus Prime only fucks Cybertronians

The good Golden Finger is written in such a boring way...? ? ? It feels like the protagonist is a fake time traveler? ? ? ? They don't look like adult time-travelers? ? Even if he becomes a child... But he is actually the soul of an adult? ? ? ? The protagonist has to find a way to solve the energy problem at the beginning? ? ? ? And... Make plans for the future? ? ? Do all time travelers know the dangers of the Marvel world? ? ? From the beginning, the protagonist should let Transformers activate their learning ability... To learn the knowledge that can be learned on earth? ? ? ? ? The protagonist can have a spiritual link with the creation... So that the protagonist can learn quickly... And can also pretend to be a top student? ? ? So that the protagonist can start a company when he becomes an adult? ? Or... The protagonist can direct behind the scenes even when he is still young... Does the guardian open a company? ? ? ? ? It's impossible for the protagonist, Goldfinger, to be inferior to Iron Man, right? ? ? Can the protagonist have a butler-minded Transformer? ? ? This is... Main computing power... Management...? ? ? Dedicated to coordinating everything for the protagonist...? ? ? Similar to... Jarvis... But stronger than... No... There's no way he can be compared to him, right? ? ? ?

The protagonist uses the source of fire to transform himself. I think Dc Yadromo is very good. Also, wouldn't it be enough if you turn the computer into a Transformer and let him make money for you on the Internet? Still working part-time, too slow

It is not as bad as some reviews say, but there are still flaws. First of all, I would like to state that I really like this subject and would like to see it develop better, so I would like to put forward a few personal opinions. The following opinions only represent personal opinions. They are not to teach the author to write novels, not to criticize, not to criticize this book, but to express opinions and complaints. Personally, what affects the audience the most is the unclear character of the protagonist. The protagonist talks about becoming a superhero and uniting this and that, but ends up doing the same thing as stealing, robbing, and beating people. In the face of the truly heinous gangsters, they were grenade-smeared in the face but were reluctant to kill them and let them off lightly. Later, a person's creed suddenly appeared, which has always been tooth for tooth, blood for blood, and then he started killing people. I knew that the author wanted to write about the growth of the protagonist, but at the same time, the protagonist's words and deeds would be contradictory, such as being divided... The protagonist set himself a "Cybertronian" background, trying to use a tiger's skin as a banner, but in the end, he never told others. When facing Stark, he answered every question and admitted that the Transformers were all beings created by himself. However, he introduced them to them as "Transformers". Hey, according to your own settings, shouldn't these be your fellow Cybertronians? Why do we introduce them the way people on earth call them? But when Black Widow approached him, she started pretending to be stupid again. You, an ordinary person who doesn't understand acting or micro-expressions, just pretend to be blushing and pretend to be introverted. Is the top agent who has been a top agent for decades an old lady with old eyes? It is better for an ordinary person to say less when facing a top agent than to tell lies! Wouldn't it be better to let the other person think about it while you're talking? When the identity of the protagonist was revealed, it was Luodan who said, "His shyness and introversion are all fake. He is indeed a powerful alien." Is it more reasonable or Luodan said, "I thought Lu Bu (crossed out) Ronan was just an ordinary alien, but I didn't expect him to be the crown prince of such an advanced civilization. Which civilization is Cybertron?" It felt more satisfying? Take Dihua as a reference. The protagonist is more sophisticated. How much trouble can S. H. I. E. L. D. Prevent the protagonist? In the original work, the reason why the military uses public opinion to force Stark is because he is a business tycoon, a big tax payer, a big capitalist, etc. The military does not dare to use violence easily. Similarly, look at what happened to Banner who has no identity and background. He is hunted down by all kinds of people. The protagonist has nothing but mastered the core technology of Cybertron. The military actually comes to force Stark through public opinion? In fact, I'm afraid that when the protagonist goes out to buy groceries, he finds heavy machine guns on the supermarket shelves, surrounded by aircraft, tanks and armed forces, and the emp is throwing money at Arcee. There is also the fact that the protagonist uses Cybertron technology too much... Mastering the source of fire can be said to have mastered the cornerstone of Cybertron civilization. As a result, the protagonist lives in poverty. He has to steal and offend people to get energy, make armor, etc.; There is a beautiful girl, but at the critical moment, the atmosphere is ruined by "I have to put out a fire". What are the Transformers in your hand used for? Are you a Pokémon Master? If you don't go to the scene and throw a Poké Ball, Optimus Prime can't get out, right? The protagonist's presence is too deliberately enhanced. Even when fighting a gangster, it's like "Arcee is too tall to enter the bar, so the protagonist can only go in and fight hand-to-hand." Then let's go to a bar, bro. The protagonist's fighting ability was captured alive by the military in minutes and dissected. Reading this novel, there must be some people who like Transformers. The author has not written out the characters of Transformers at all. Optimus Prime is just a cool image. I would like to see the stories of each Transformers in this world, which can show their characteristics, their choices and actions in the face of various events, SHIELD or Hydra's attitude and mutual game in the face of such a huge force. If you write the original characters well and not OOC in the fanfic, it will be brilliant, such as Tony, like Optimus Prime, use the remaining pen power to write a few eye-catching supporting characters, instead of creating some supporting characters in a large space. The participation in the main Marvel line is low or passively involved, and then written roughly (even the plot of Thor is briefly mentioned) ), a lot of ink is devoted to the overt and covert struggles of gangsters. Some characters are indeed well described, but the focus is a little off. Some people in the comments said that the writing is off-topic, and some Marvel fans will not like it. It neither retains Transformers fans nor pleases Marvel fans. Some people say that part of the reason for the messy writing is because of this. Sometimes the main plot is original, and sometimes it creates some daily life. (I must mention here that I really don't like the plot of the sister and her racing gang boyfriend. They are simply a collection of vulgar plots. They are masters of making trouble for the protagonist, and they are doing math work. If the author insists on letting the protagonist start with the main line of "my sister and brother-in-law are trying to die again and I have to save them", I would rather choose the mercenary protagonist who killed Obadiah and then gave Iron Man a stun gun and took the opportunity to steal Obadiah's mecha and energy. At least it can be explained that he will do whatever it takes to become stronger and cope with future crises. There are too many fans who write about Marvel. It can be seen that Marvel does write some, and Transformers is almost the same. The author of two such big IPs has great ideas, but the actual performance is not satisfactory so far. There are too many things to write about. It can be said that the world view of these two universes is quite large, involving galaxies, universes, and even gods. As a result, in this book, the presence of the government is zero, the army is just a background board, and the main character of the protagonist is The person we have to deal with is still the New York Police Department... Even the police in Conan have no sense of existence. In this book, the police uncle is still shining, which is really touching... In recent chapters, it seems that Hydra has started to cause trouble, but in terms of development, Hydra has a supporting role and gathered a few guys who have a grudge against the protagonist to form a small group (Avengers against the protagonist?). It is suspected of starting high and going low, so I really don't dare to look forward to it. Because the title clicked on it, I originally wanted to read "The fallen prince of a high civilization is cupping the earth" or "It is our duty to rebuild the glory of Cybertron", or even "I am really not the mastermind behind Cybertron's invasion of Marvel", or even "Megatron came to the earth and found that the source of the fire was oppressed by a backward civilization! In anger, a hundred thousand Decepticons flew in". In the end, I actually watched a gangster story... I am not exaggerating, just expressing my personal opinion. Finally, I would like to send you a few recommendation votes to encourage the author and hope that he will work hard.

There is a source of fire, and it is in Marvel. If you don't destroy the troops, what are you doing? Waiting for a superhero to save you? With the source of fire, the supreme creation of Transformers, you are not in the same world as ordinary people, and you still want to be a superhero. Even if the dragon falls into the pond one day, it will fly to the sky one day. It was wrong to write the protagonist in the direction of human beings from the beginning. He should have the source of fire and be an independent force. Just like the title of the book, he can guarantee his own interests for the rise of the Transformers, rather than joining the Earthling camp to scheming. In the end, the pattern is still small.

Forget it if you write about Marvel, as a character like you is still on Earth, aren't you exposed to Ancient One? And you still want to rebuild Cybertron. I'm convinced. Why do you want to travel through time and become a child? Since it's reconstruction, isn't it better to use farming style or violent soldier style?

It was so boring to write that I finished reading it in half an hour. To be honest, it is common to jump from one chapter to three or five chapters. If the author is really ambitious, I suggest reorganizing the outline. The following are some minor issues for reference only 1. Putting the cart before the horse, whether there are original plots and characters in writing fan fiction is the fundamental difference between being a boss and being a street fan. However, your original plots are too numerous and boring, resulting in the writing being bland and not enjoyable, deviating from the essence of the original writing. 2. The image of the protagonist is not vivid enough and there is no plan. Maybe when you write it, you have a more reasonable plot in your own mind, but as a reader, you can't see it at all. So in my eyes, the protagonist is like a childish kid, drifting with the crowd and holding a golden finger but not developing. This is one of the reasons for the flow of literature. 3. There is no clear main line. Is your main line a heroic act of justice or the revival of Cybertron? Your current writing method is a hammer in the east and a hammer in the west. If a book does not have a clear main line and goal, it will not attract readers at all. You haven't put it on the shelves yet, but I'm sure it will still be written like this after it is put on the shelves. Your follow-up will be very miserable

How do I put it? The main character of this book is probably like this. I want to write about Transformers but I don't give them the camera. I can kill my enemies instantly or use official means to kill them instantly, but I just can't. I have to have a long battle of wits with the enemy in the air. I can easily get a lot of wealth and do not violate the principles, but I just want to work. I just want to rob gangs and make myself live a very poor life. I have technology in my hands that is millions of years beyond the earth. I just don't use it. I just like to steal technology that is very rubbish to me. Generally speaking, the illness is not serious at all.

I just want to say one thing, it's not worth spending money on traffic!

Apart from the title of the book, the article is a complete mess. The plot is incomprehensible, the protagonist is insane, the outlook on life is explosive, and it's poisonous

To be honest, after reading more than a dozen chapters, I feel that the protagonist is quite useless, and how about a time traveler? With the source of fire, Goldfinger has no idea at all. Maybe the subsequent plot is licking America to become a superhero.

Why do you write so much about daily life? Water? Since you have chosen Cybertron, go and conquer it. In the early stage, you can be wretched, but are you developing? Find a laptop that can connect to the Internet and use it to learn online. Ask Playboy to get it. Or go to the satellite cemetery to find a satellite to launch into the sky. I want to read the paid chapters. Are you still good at it?

It's now 2021, and we're still playing with the American heroism. The old things are outdated. What's popular now is a community with a shared future for mankind.

It's really boring. It's a sci-fi fan novel written in the form of a two-dimensional fan novel. It's really annoying. . . . . It doesn't mean that the protagonist is Long Aotian from the beginning. You can write about growth and changes in the protagonist's personality, but if you don't have the ability to grasp the ups and downs of the plot, don't rush in blindly. After dozens of chapters, I didn't see anything about the protagonist's growth, only a strong flavor of a two-dimensional daily novel, as bland as water.

I chose to give up. Starting from Chapter 40, I thought the author was really going to insert the main line, but later on, it turned out that they were all original daily stories written by myself. To put it bluntly, there are only three highlights for this novel, one is Marvel, the other is Transformers, and what kind of sparks will Transformers create in Marvel? You can be original, but it can't be all your original work. After reading the latest chapter, I didn't even want to say anything.

It's so everyday. The protagonist feels like he's done nothing for so many years. He only has a motorcycle and two 20cm robots. He looks like an ordinary high school student who has to work. It's so boring. The protagonist can't make any money even if he wants to. Ah, I don't even know what he is writing in front of him. We all know Stark, but he doesn't feel anything at all. He still laughs that others will be beaten by aliens in a few years. He himself can't survive at this pace. He is also planning to become a researcher, saying that this will allow him to have access to advanced energy. Oh my god. Author, how can you find this most boring way of writing and still want to finish college with peace of mind? Oh, what are you watching? Watch the protagonist study seriously and rise? Transformers are useless. They can be used as transportation, toys, and ordinary mobile phones. It is really uncomfortable.

I saw the latest one. As the master of Transformers, the protagonist can't even understand the code. He is a complete waste 😤😤😤

Actually, I can tolerate other things, after all, it is not easy for a novice to create, but what is the source of fire? It is the pinnacle of Cybertron's technology and the source of life for mechanical life. There should have been absolute suppression of mechanical creations. As a result, neither the mechanical soldiers nor the mechas of Sangbian can be controlled? A Tinder solution makes a mess. Don't talk about energy. The reactor is on the chest, let alone not being able to absorb it. How can there be so many things if the reactor absorbs it?

After reading Chapter 38, I came here because of the situation of Transformers in Marvel, but it turned out to be like a lot of running accounts. The author hasn't finished the chronicle yet and entered the Marvel storyline. Be careful of others jumping to read it. He just kept reading the book until he forgot about it.

I remember reading a similar book before. The protagonist married Wanda, who ended up at the level of the OAA's main monitor.

Qidian is almost over, right? The books that are recommended by the vane today are the books that were discontinued 4 or 5 years ago.