Vitality Record

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I've read more than a dozen chapters, so I'm here to comment. Personally, I think Dada has great potential, and I should have a lot of ideas in my head. In fact, the writing is not bad, but in terms of paragraphs, it is really not suitable for online articles at first. I read the later writing and it is much better. It can be seen that Dada is making progress Some small suggestions, I think the introduction should be changed, it is a bit too white, which will not attract readers It means slow writing. In fact, in the first few chapters, there is too much to explain and is too cumbersome. You can make it simpler and exaggerate it according to the environment or weird atmosphere. Otherwise, many readers will lose interest. I must have read a lot of books. Think about what would happen if you read many chapters and never get to the point This book is used as a writing practice, and I feel that it will get better and better. I have read a lot of books recently, and there is great potential, really. The above are my sincere comments. Hehe, I have just started writing a book and understand the pain of stand-alone. Come and take a look when you have time. Let's work together 😁😁

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