Wasteland Ascension

It's a rare first-person perspective, so I'd like to make some suggestions as soon as possible. After reading the beginning, the setting should be similar to a record, a form of first-person real-time recording. This style is very suitable for the wasteland world and is very immersive. But the author's problem is that he typed too many "I"s. Here you can refer to a typical negative teaching material - the lyrics of Shoumai. In people's normal consciousness, the word "I" does not appear often. The novel is coherent and does not require naming the subject at all times. Too many "I" words may be a common problem among beginners in diaries. And not just this small issue, the entire language also needs to be refined. Take the page above as an example. First of all, the combination of "if I am" is very difficult to pronounce, and the "I" in the previous sentence and the "I" at the beginning of the next sentence give people a very redundant feeling. "If I" should be removed here. The remaining part can be read smoothly even if the word "I" is removed. And the logic of writing such as recording or diary generally writes what happened first, and then what you think and how to do it, because this is the order in which people think about problems. For example, the second paragraph: Several cars around me either had oil tanks leaking or had scrapped tires. There was also one car whose body was intact but whose battery pack was completely scrapped. This left me helpless even with a tokamak reactor. Since it was getting late and I was afraid I couldn't see clearly, I didn't try out more vehicles (but from what I could see, there probably wouldn't be a lucky car waiting for me). Of course, this does not mean that it must be like this. For an article to make people want to read it, it must change between lines. People must first be interested in your words before they will listen carefully to your story. The prerequisite for good ideas to support a book is that the writing skills are not too bad. Anyway, come on, author

This book is great! Why are there so few recommendations? As a student, I can only vote once for free every day. I hope people who watch it will vote.

First person... Only suitable for memory killing

You are still better. Some people like your first-person writing. This is my first time writing an online novel. I didn't know that there are still many people who don't read first-person books 😭 Several people left messages under my book saying that they are not used to the first-person 😭😭 But I am too lazy to change it, so I just plan to finish the book like this~ Come on, brother! Stick to the first person to the end

Mechanical transformation and ascension beat the physical gene ascension Physical gene ascension beats spiritual energy and virtual ascension Psychic virtual ascension beats mechanical transformation and ascension I wonder if this is not grass defeating water, water defeating fire, fire defeating grass

I haven't read a first-person book for a long time. I didn't expect that the first-person version of the adventure mode in the early stage would be so effective. It has a strong sense of immersion. The several ascension settings introduced later are also great and very attractive. I look forward to the follow-up. The earth background and starry sky background will slowly unfold. What kind of stories will happen to the survivors in the several modes? I am looking forward to it. Come on, it is really well written.