The Leisurely Path of a Mage

First of all, let me explain that I am not targeting the author's writing ideas, I just want to share my personal thoughts In today's female-channeled novels, whether children, pets or weapons, if there is intelligence, they must be male. There are also genderless things such as systems, artificial intelligence, and robots. They can obviously be described in neutral terms, but most of them are written with a male identity. Lord, I'm really afraid that one day the sword in my hand, the pet I hatched, or the robot picked up in the garbage dump will become the male protagonist that day, because these characters are all male, and they accompany the female protagonist day and night Even The author clearly states that there is no male protagonist, so he doesn't know that the bird or the wolf picked up that day will fall in love with the female protagonist, or that the sword in his hand will protect the female protagonist and sacrifice himself because of the love between men and women, and then the female protagonist will run on the road to repair each other and keep it in her heart. What I said may be familiar to many people, because I have seen these plots in novels. So when I saw the thing that the heroine had that I didn't know whether to call it a pet or a brother, I thought that even if it was a male, it must not be too intelligent, speak, or communicate. Then the heroine learned spells to communicate with it, and its wisdom was not low... Xiaomian, Xiaomian, etc., Now I should pray for this Won't a dog turn into a human form in the future... Otherwise, what's the difference from having a man who will always be by your side Hey, those without intelligence should always be intelligent, those without gender should be genderless, and those with animal form should never be able to become humans. With intelligence and gender, the day when you can become a human is not far away from becoming Lei.

This subject matter is too rare 1 No cp! ! ! Friendship is so good 2 She has golden fingers but is reasonable but not too awesome 3 The heroine has made obvious progress and has grown up since childhood 4 The heroine is kind but not a virgin, has a righteous outlook on life, kills when she needs to be killed, and saves when she needs to be saved 5 The heroine strives for steady progress, pursues quality of life, friendship, and has friends 6 Really studies magic! ! ! It's so rare😭 Really study spells! ! ! It's so rare😭 Really study spells! ! ! It's so rare😭 7 The heroine has a companion 8 The whole world is described in detail and true Reward 50 yuan

It's so beautiful (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡, it's been a long time since I've seen a gamified article like this, and the missions are also very interesting, so stick with me. 😄

I sincerely wish you a smooth completion of this article, and it would be nice to add more updates, coming from a reader who has been through several miserable pits.

I said I would finish it if I wasn't in prison, but my family has been sick recently, and the summer is my busiest time, so I can't find time to update. I will come back after surviving this period, I hope you all understand (*^ω^*)

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Congratulations to the author for the smooth launch, and I wish the work will get better and better! ! !

... I am so cautious and still come across a scam article... Why can it be finished before it is finished? Judging from the setting, it feels like it is halfway through and stops abruptly, so be careful when entering a scam! ! !

Mild spoilers follow. A brief summary of my thoughts on the length of the story so far (30 chapters): The way the story unfolds is more like an infinite flow adventure story, and the actual content feels a bit like a different world system novel. Because the protagonist can return to reality at any time with the acquired abilities, it is not strictly a game work. Thoughts on the details: The story does not have a particularly intense and coherent plot for the time being. It has been promoting the story with fragmented monster-killing upgrades. Add points after upgrading, upgrade after adding points, and become stronger little by little. Although the characters continue to expand as the story goes on, most of them do not play a large role in the story. A mature work is meant to be seen by the audience. It must not only satisfy one's own fantasies, but also need a certain story framework. If there is no main line support, it will become a story without story. The fun of the game can only be felt most immersively through actual experience. You will be discounted when watching others play, and you will be discounted again when listening to other people's narrations. The longer the article, the harder it is to highlight the charming points. Sooner or later, aesthetic fatigue will appear. According to the current progress, it will take about 80 chapters to completely escape the novice stage, and it should be about 150,000 words to enter the multi-character large-scale interaction stage. In addition, the story has no main line, why was it selected, is there some kind of mission, and what is the purpose of the World Network. Readers will easily lose the purpose and stage of reading when reading. If you fail to capture the readers' hearts for a long time, they will be lost. In view of the current situation, there are some immature suggestions: 1. Develop a main line that runs through the entire text as the backbone, or weave each character's purpose lines into each other. This determines whether a story can have a good beginning and end. Instead of becoming an endless literal purgatory. 2 Emotional Line The only companion is a dog, and the protagonist also behaves relatively lonely. The emotional line of the story does not mean that there must be CP. The changes in the heroine's spiritual journey can also be used as the emotional line. Using emotional lines to promote the plot is also an excellent writing technique. The biggest highlight of adventure works is the growth of the protagonist. Strength and ability are on the one hand, and spiritual growth is also on the other. The lack of one of the two will cause the overall quality of the work to drop by a notch. Although this work uses magic as its selling point, it does not have any unique and unique settings in terms of magic types or opinions in such a long chapter. As a stimulating point, it is far from being 'wonderful'. (In recent years, the only one with a strange magic theme setting that I have seen is "Soul Sacrifice") There is no emotional line in the current content, including the heroine's almost no vivid description of the game's emotions. Because she was selected, she participated. Become a tool for getting things done. Are you happy? How the character's emotions are expressed cannot be summed up simply by saying, "The protagonist is very happy." This is where you can see your writing skills. Otherwise, it can only be a matter of high or low, novice or novice, good-looking and no special features. The work is boring. 3 Focus If you don't want to invest in a cleverly designed main line, nor are you willing to invest in an overly emotional story, it is recommended to write in the style of exploring another world, and focus on describing the style of creating the game world. But if that's the case, why not just write about another world directly? The writing idea of ​​the now popular "I Have an Adventure House" is actually the same as this one. It is a mission-based unlimited upgrade. After each upgrade, you set a cool point to show off your abilities, and then continue to adventure and upgrade. Although the main line is not very important, it runs through the whole text. The emotional line does not occupy the center of gravity, but it is just vague. This captures the reader's appetite. If you want to develop in the direction of business writing, you can refer to that book for specific ways to improve it. In the end, the author still needs to ask himself: What purpose do I want to achieve through this work. Only with the answer to this question can we understand how to write better.

I hope this one is a long one! I like this setting so much! 💙💙💙