When an Internet Addicted Teenager Meets the Immortal Cultivation Team

Come on, author! Go ahead and get tired!

The standing position is short, the squatting position is short, and the fancy positioning is short.

I always thought this name was a girl, but then I almost looked for evidence that Qin Meng is a boy, haha. Originally, some of the things I like to play are chicken games. When I saw the beginning, I thought, this game is not bad. As for me, I was very interested in it from the beginning, but I have to say that the main character died too suddenly. You can explain that he often played games and stayed up late, so he died. Anyway, just give a simple reason, so that it will not seem abrupt. Later, he traveled through time and staged a real-life version of the game, but it seemed to lack the feeling of the game and was not satisfying. I have a friend who writes e-sports articles about Peace Elite. She writes about the future, and I think it looks very interesting. Then, let's talk about the writing style. It's pretty good and there are no major problems. However, there are some places that need to be modified, not much. Then the title of the book is okay and interesting. I look forward to the team of cultivating immortals. Come on⊙▽⊙

I read it completely, and as you said, the ending was so sudden It felt like it wasn't well constructed from the beginning, so I couldn't continue writing Ahem, no wonder I finished reading it