Player Enemy

How to say it? The prologue seems to have been decided by a pat on the head? It's a bit illogical Don't repeat things that are repetitive. The opening narration of both people is the same, so why not change it to an ellipse in the middle? Some descriptions don't need to be stated in full. They are not important, or do not affect the development of the plot. You can open a separate post to write them specifically. There are too many such descriptions, which can easily make people feel that they are watery. On the contrary, there is a lot that can be written in the dungeon, but you omit it, such as the mood when experiencing this kind of game for the first time, the method to test the authenticity of the game, the growth after being tortured when fighting at the same level for the first time, the interesting daily life after having a partner, someone's company when being public enemy of the whole server... There is so much to write, what should be watered down, and what should be watered down. Then, writing about alien technology crushing the earth and then making a game will limit the ending a lot. If you then write it like a novice copy and crush it, I don't know why aliens make games? Don't leave it unfinished I can't see much at the moment, so let's just leave it at that The idea of ​​the book is good, so work hard