Origin of Spirit

I'm waiting for your new work. No need to update it daily, just update it every week. Let's work hard together!

The work is very creative, I hope the author can stick to it and look forward to your updates.

1. The 7-year-old little protagonist is too mature based on his speech and behavior. It would not be surprising if it was written like this by an old monster who traveled through time and space! 2. The settings of the first three chapters are quite satisfactory, with no highlights or surprises. Generally speaking, they are written according to the old routine. 3. The description of the environment is good, but the beginning of the article was written by two people. I personally feel that there is no connection in the first three chapters, and there is no foreshadowing. The plot is suspicious of hydrology. 4. There is too much dialogue, and during the test, the author seems not to have explained whether it was hidden during the test? If it was made public, would it be redundant for the spiritual master to tell the protagonist to keep it secret? Don't spray if you don't like it!

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In fact, the books themselves are also very good. Many people feel that their books are terrible at the beginning, or they feel the same way later on, but the little progress they make every day is a great encouragement to themselves. This is my first time writing a book. At the beginning, I paid special attention to those recommendation votes. Every day I struggled with what to write today to attract everyone's likes and attention. Later, I gradually began to stop paying attention to these things, although they are really important. I began to try to find happiness in books. Even if no one reads it, it is a kind of exercise for me to watch my words mature little by little. Maybe no one really reads the book I write, but I also want to give it a try. Once I start the book, I want the characters in my book to have a good ending. The road is long and far away, I will search up and down. Writing is inherently boring and tedious. When no one is watching, I feel very anxious. When someone does, sometimes I feel surprised and proud. I want to write to myself as a gift to my life, so even if no one reads it, I am still happy on the spot. I hope you will get better and better as you write, and your writing skills will reach a higher level! Wish you a successful signing as soon as possible!

Come on, I hope your story will continue to be wonderful.

The story is okay, and so is the writing. It would be better to have more tension and intensity in the description of the fight, come on!

I hope the author will sign the contract and put it on the shelves as soon as possible 😌

1. Judging from the title of the book, I'm afraid I can't extract much information. It's neither a novice nor a literary artist, so it's hard to attract readers. The layout of the introduction is a bit messy, with the career system taking up most of it. It's not necessary. I should write some highlights of the book to at least attract readers to read the first chapter. 2. The plot about a man, a woman and an organization at the beginning should be from a God's perspective, but it doesn't feel very good and does not connect with the subsequent plot, which is a bit confusing and abrupt. 3. The writing style is relatively smooth, which is okay. Part of the narration is a bit colloquial, but that's not a big problem. It's just that some of the dialogues are a bit dramatic. It's recommended that symbols like this be removed or appear less often. It's not an anime or comic. As a novel, having such symbols makes the page cluttered and affects reading. 4. I feel that the performance and character of the male protagonist Mu Lingguang in the first few chapters are a bit inconsistent and dissuaded. He is too mature and seems to be a little bit middle-aged. 5. Regarding the plot, the time accelerator seems to be slightly faster, so please grasp the rhythm and world view. Personal opinion doesn't mean anything. Don't blame me, don't blame me. Come on.

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