Wuji Zhantian

Dear fellows! After reading this book, can you leave your recommendation vote? This book really lacks recommendation votes. If you feel you can write it, please save it so you don't find your way back in the future. By the way, help with promotion and sharing. Even if there is no recommendation ticket, let's go down below and type a word to let me know that you have been here every day. When you come, don't leave quietly, leaving your shadow behind. Let us communicate with each other.

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Well, in order for you to be able to make severe criticisms and urge me to improve when you read my articles, I won't be in agreement. Speak directly and only look for flaws. First of all, I am very tired from reading the article. There may be three reasons for this: first, a paragraph is too long, and second, each sentence is too short and jumpy. These two points make the entire paragraph cover too much content, making it difficult to read. Three is a terrifying number of exclamation marks. Each reader may have different perceptions, but when I saw the exclamation point, I naturally got a little excited, feeling that it expressed the author's intense emotions. To be honest, the exclamation mark in the entire first chapter made me feel too high. I had no chance to breathe and was exhausted. Then there is not enough emotional integration. Watching the old patriarch die and taking his wife with him, there is no feeling of sadness or emotion. Chapter 1 When a child is born, he cannot experience the shock of the world changing color. You can add a little description appropriately. I feel like each sentence is still too short. The plot is not too fast, but the reading pace is too fast. In short, to be simple, just change the exclamation marks in more sections first, so that the overall feeling will be much better; and emotional integration is a technical task and may not be so easy to adjust. You can continue to write slowly, and then go back and change it when you feel it later. Welcome to visit "The Most Powerful Brain: Breaking the Chrysalis", I hope you can give me enough corrections from your perspective, don't waste my typing so many words to you 😃 Thank you!

Dear veterans, you can put forward all kinds of suggestions. What is written is not good and what is written wrong. Or if there are any classic dialogues that are better than this, or even various flaws, as long as you see them, then come here to complain. Three people go together there must be my teacher! The master is here, and the disciple pays homage to him!

Writing novels is really good. It's a bit tiring, but as long as you rest, you can quit playing games.

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