Witcher of Oden

"The Witcher of Alden" Attractiveness of book title and introduction (1/5): Your book title and introduction... Are too perfunctory, right? There are only two sentences in the introduction. I don't know anything except that this is a witcher novel, which makes me speechless... There are actually not too few witcher novels in recent years. Your title and introduction really make it difficult for you to stand out among the many witcher novels and let readers choose your book instead of other witcher novels. This point is recommended for improvement. Content retention (2/5): After reading the first five chapters, the overall story line is relatively bland and a little bit toxic, but it also has conflicts and refreshing points, so it is quite satisfactory. But the biggest problem is that you either make the male protagonist's character only about money and blood, or you set it as a demon-hunting tutorial dominated by emotions. Your current nondescript approach to dealing with the tavern owner's incident really makes readers frown - to put it nicely, it is called both sides, and to put it poorly, it is called both sides, and it does not even have the basic rights and wrongs. On the whole, the core personality of each character is basically maintained well, but the male protagonist always likes to talk to himself, and the character's speech occasionally seems rigid and the tone is slightly weird and slightly poisonous, such as the following two paragraphs. "This is impossible. How could Luna give you a commission? She is already dead. It is said that the eyes of a witcher are only money and blood. You must want to take the gold coins as your own, right?" "Ahhh... You damn freak! The Baron will not let you go!" Captain Enma was lying on the ground in pain, repeating obscene words in his mouth. Overall review (2/5): The male protagonist's character is really unlikable, and many of the supporting characters' speech is either venomous or dull as if they are reading a script. Both of these points are recommended for improvement.

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The beginning of the novel is quite good, but there are too many passers-by, and the number of words in each chapter is also quite high, so the material is quite sufficient. The protagonist Sean's character is not distinct, and his conversation with the undead feels unreal. Since the protagonist can talk to the undead, why should the protagonist have a monologue? At the Baron Manor, did the protagonist happen to encounter the beast that killed Luna's father? Is this a plot for the plot? Don't delve too deeply into plots that I personally feel do not contribute to the main plot of the novel. Don't spray if you don't like it!