Magic Crystal Civilization

I finished reading the first conflict in one go. First of all, the quality is very good, the writing is smooth, the character motivation logic is online, the IQ is online, and the multi-party struggle is also reflected. The explosion and chase at the beginning are exciting, super powers, the scenes are gorgeous and imaginative, there are foreshadowings, twists and turns, details, and games. Basically everything is there, and there are no flaws. . . . I always feel that it is still a little bit closer to the beginning of a masterpiece. The following is basically not a question, just a suggestion. First, the male protagonist's [character creation] is relatively blank. In the readers' eyes, he feels like an honest loser. At most, he wants to learn magic for no apparent reason. It is simply a blank slate. This means that the readers have not liked or known the male protagonist yet. If he is directly involved in the conflict, the reader's sense of substitution will not be strong. This is why the screenwriter has the theory that the protagonist saves the cat at the beginning. If we could describe more about the male protagonist's character, why he wants to learn magic, etc., I feel that the work would be more complete. Excellent example, the opening chapter of My Hero Academia - actually a bit like you, the male protagonist does not have superpowers, but he longs to be a hero. The difference is that at the beginning, he uses several flashbacks to introduce what a person with abilities is and their duty to fight monsters and protect the people, so the passionate and righteous young male protagonist also aspires to be a hero. Becoming a hero, and then being denied, ridiculed, working hard, meeting an idol, and then being shattered by the idol, using practical actions to show that even without superpowers, you can still be a hero with both wisdom and bravery, and finally being recognized by the idol, inheriting the ability, and embarking on the road of a hero. The article is not long but it is simply explosive. This is the charm of human nature.