Stealing Luck and Cultivating Immortality

From ten chapters to now, it is a very special book. It is a pity that it collapsed. In my opinion, the problem is that the map has not been expanded. It is still in Huayang Mansion as of now, and there are only a few characters. It was originally written that when the protagonist is almost invincible locally, talented and powerful enemies from outside should be introduced to provoke and attack the protagonist. After the conflict is expanded, new maps and new characters will naturally be opened. This way, the plot will not be boring. For example, in the latest chapter, a certain house next door could have been used to unite a certain family to attack the Lin family for some treasure, and then the protagonist could start pretending to slap the face again (that's pretty much what it means). It won't be written down as a running account...

The plot writing is okay, but the difference between Luo Feng and the protagonist is overemphasized. Luo Feng is a loser and the protagonist is self-disciplined. But the problem is that the protagonist is only half a pound. The protagonist was not at the bottom of society for 30 years in his previous life. It is not easy to compare Luo Feng and the protagonist. After all, the world is different. If you think about it differently, both the protagonist and the earthling can be compared. Who is more useless? The protagonist is not like Luo Feng. The most fundamental problem is poverty. Poverty limits most of his small ideas, but Luo Feng can realize these if he has money.

What a bullshit. He beat his own family members, and even killed one of his own men, locking up a woman. This is the first time I saw the author write this. If he becomes ruthless, he will kill everyone in his family.

I have read the last 16 chapters, and I have some comments that I hope will be helpful to the author. I want to thank Shuangwen for the online novel. What the hell are you writing about? 1. The protagonist's character and behavior are always negative emotions, distracted, and self-righteous. 2. The protagonist is a mentally retarded child who was slapped on the left cheek and stretched out the right cheek! 3. There are too many psychological descriptions of the protagonist, and most of them contain negative emotions and thoughts. It is recommended that the author change the outline to center on the golden finger of the pig's trotter, fight monsters in a positive and upward direction and upgrade, gain luck points to upgrade, and show off to the enemy and slap them in the face. Don't always write about the pig's trotter being slapped in the face like an idiot.

To be honest, if the protagonist is enjoying his life, why is he so cruel to his family members? Normal people would not do this.

I don't like the main character's character. It's cool for you to write like this.

It feels like the protagonist is a bit possessed, and is self-righteous and cautious.

Well, after reading Chapter 28, I found the pig's feet very unpleasant. I thought the author created an unlikable protagonist. But then I found out that when the protagonist was fighting Rakshasa, you, the author, are so fucking weird. Which one's own family is pretending not to hit the Xia family or others. When writing about the main protagonist's own family, I can only say that the author is weird and strongly persuades him to quit.

The author, you practice, but you don't practice self-protection techniques.

Luo Feng, what the hell is Han Sui? Can't you just use Luo Feng? It's inexplicably creating dyslexia.

Do you have ink on your books now? I've written several chapters and it's like I haven't written anything at all. Luo Liba Suo really didn't explain it clearly. Generally speaking, novels don't have three golden chapters. Do the first three chapters explain the world view and system? I've been grinding for a long time. Where did you get the milk from?

I ask two questions. You have traveled through time with the first name, Luo Feng is just Luo Feng, why do you still have the original name? Did you know that people who read it have confused thinking, less pleasure in reading, and keep acting out? There is also the problem of Tang Xiaoyu. I always feel unhappy when the Phoenix cannot come back. If your earth dwelling strength is high, can't you bring the luck of the people around you?

Cultivation of immortals used to be about asceticism and hatred. In fact, the most important thing for cultivating immortals is to enjoy the blessings of immortality that ordinary people dare not think of. The logic that such enjoyment will ruin the path to immortality is not worth refuting... Not to mention the forgetfulness and cheats of mortals. Even if there are not, you are an immortal if you can step into the path of immortality. You have to get all kinds of good things.

It's written by the main character, and it's uncomfortable to read. The author needs to improve it, otherwise it's really unbearable.

Will the author continue to update? Been chasing

If you continue writing, you must have a chapter name. This is as important as not touching the published chapters.

There is no need to pay attention to the comments section, just write what you want to write. None of those platinum masters were taught by the comment section to teach them how to write. The author writes the story, the readers read the story, and the reader chooses the book. The author is not choosing the readers, just like Boya Ziqi. Just write it wonderfully

In fact, I feel that the protagonist's reasons are not very good. This awakening of the natal spiritual light cannot be awakened by enlightenment on a certain path. The author could have written the protagonist in this way. In the process of playing swordsmanship, drinking, and visiting prostitutes, he attained the ultimate spiritual enlightenment and became a perfect and perfect prostitute.

The problem is, I traveled through time and wrote pig trotters as young people in modern society.

Theoretically Luo is already dead, so Tang Xiaoyu will be snatched away by his brother in the end.

Even if I don't practice swordsmanship, my first robbery was to rob my own house. I was also drunk!

I think it's well written, but there are few updates.

The writing is still very good. Not bad, come on, author! The protagonist has desires, opinions, and is humane.

I don't think my writing is bad. There are many reasons for my poor performance, and it's not necessarily the work.

Come on, sir, what are you writing about in the first few chapters? I feel dizzy after reading it. When writing a book like Cultivation of Immortality, you have to make readers understand it quickly. It doesn't matter whether it's time travel or rebirth. In short, it needs to be explained clearly in the shortest number of words. The protagonist in the first few chapters is like a person suffering from sleepwalking.

I think the main purpose of robbing people is to suppress those who are lucky and rob them of opportunities, thereby increasing their luck. Just like the little girl at the beginning, she surrendered and was robbed of her luck. Of course, it is understandable that some chance items have luck, but it cannot be the main source. A stone in a warehouse can bring thousands of fortunes, which is nothing to write home about. Taking away luck from people is interesting. For example, the current plot ruined Wang Teng's plan and caused him to lose a lot of luck. Part of it was made of pig's feet, torturing his fiancée to make him surrender, and gain luck again. From now on, the plot is to find people with high luck, destroy plans or seize opportunities, and then gain luck My writing is far inferior to the author, but that's probably what it means