League of Legends: The Commentary System

The idea is good, but the writing is too dry and unengaging. The whole text consists of the main character: "blah blah," the female lead: "blah blah," and the comments: "blah blah."

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Readers are here for the protagonist's antics, not for a remake of a competition. After 60 chapters with virtually no exciting plot points, this book has no chance of success! This bland, uninspired novel has essentially filtered out its potential readers before it even went on sale.

I suggest adding it to the cafeteria's weekend nights; I want to see the main character being sarcastic and quirky, haha.

This is so annoying! When will Zhao Xuetong disappear? It's driving me crazy! I'm removing her from my bookshelf. Please let me know when she's gone. This plot is disgusting. The predetermined female lead is suddenly replaced by another character, and the male lead has to help him pursue her. Whether he succeeds or not, it's still disgusting.

The romance subplot is nauseating. Why force this toxic storyline in?

Unlocking quotes is a bit of a letdown. Many classic quotes are already familiar to regular viewers; there's no need to unlock them. Besides, if you're just watching the commentary, it's basically just real commentators in a different persona. I'd rather watch the game again than read this text version. The author needs to address the issue of transitioning to a different genre soon; I think this subject matter is doomed to fail…

Actually, it's fine if the team name isn't changed. Look at all those books by top players, none of them are so messed up. They even changed the team name to Pirate Ship, and tbq to qzl, making it unrecognizable. If you can't recognize it, you lose the sense of immersion.

Commentary is a difficult subject to write about. No matter how good your commentary is, it's hard to find a single exciting play by a professional player that leaves a lasting impression. Good commentary often accompanies good plays, so everyone's focused on the player, and not many people pay attention to you.

It's more of a suggestion. The author's writing... Is alright? Hmm, it's readable. But the plot... To put it this way, the emotions you convey as you describe the commentary in your writing are something that viewers can definitely empathize with when watching the game, but when you turn it into words, it's hard to create that emotional resonance!