I Am a Big Boss in Ancient Times

It feels pretty good. Let's take one first.

It's okay, just watchable, keep it up.

Well, first of all, the writing of this book is smooth, and there is no big embarrassment in any part. Secondly, as a game novel, I feel that it lacks the style of a game. The book is very bland and not outstanding. It is neither outstanding nor eye-catching, and it is not the kind that suddenly poisons people to death. In my humble opinion, there are several reasons . In the game text, the golden finger of the pig's trotter is not prominent. At least for now, it is still indistinguishable from others. Of course, I can only think that the pig's trotter has a golden finger. Also, apart from the holographic immersion of the game, the other eye-catching aspects of the game Huangu are not introduced. This results in no introduction to what type of online game Huangu is, what the specific content is, and how players should play and do to become stronger. This leads to the fact that compared to other players, Pig's Foot is at a loss as to whether it can take shortcuts or whether it can take shortcuts to surpass others. . For example, in a game, if it is a detective story, it should be based on a suspense plot of solving crimes and promoting the development of the story. Business games and money-making games should be based on making more money. At the same time, I don't need to tell you that competitive articles such as fighting chicken should be mainly competition types. The most important point is that there is no clear main line. This is fatal! What is the purpose of pig's feet traveling through the ancient times? What is the goal? Or what is the achievement to be achieved in the primary stage? By what means? What people or things will you meet in the process of achieving it? Or what hidden tasks are triggered, etc... Where is the conflict? Where is the contradiction? Where is the fun? What is the purpose when the task is issued? These are all things to consider. Of course, it's my humble opinion. If you don't like it, please delete it.

That's it! 🔨🔨🔨🔨

Well written, good luck to the author

It's beautiful👍

Is the author in middle school?

My humble opinion I'll post it tomorrow