The Thing About Me Wanting to Become an Immortal

1. The title and introduction of the book are not very good. Although it is in a light-hearted novice style, it is not very attractive, too rough, and even a bit discouraging. The title and introduction are the readers' first impression of a book. It is recommended that you revise it greatly and add something more interesting to the introduction. 2. The writing style is acceptable, but I feel that there is no sense of immersion. It is recommended to add more environment description and action description to make it more vivid. 3. The segmentation is okay, and it's not tiring to watch. 4. The plot is a bit strange. The protagonist could not practice cultivation in his previous life, and it was said that he was able to seize the body by chance, but the ability to name himself with hands and feet when he was born is a bit weird, and he has no spiritual power... Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง